Attitude Adjustment

It is always after days like this one,
of a kind of proverbial snake chasing
its tail, its form flawless, its strength in

numbers of its friends all rolling together
carrying me to the end of a long day,
the end being where I started, just as

dark, my breath as clear on the concrete
platform as it was twelve hours before,
my insides still a Colombian neck tie.

But I am still one hour and at least two
languages away from there, here in the
bar car, my head against the stretch window

as the Norman countryside smears by at
200 kph, a drop of casis stirring towards a
mandarin horizon fuller than my plastic cup of scotch,

tilting with each banking of the train only to
level out sharply seconds later, the minimum
time required - I suspect - for the stubbly 

driver to refresh his senses with a good chuckle,
which would surely be more 
frequent if they let me ride up there with him,

playing "I Spy" with our eyes closed,
testing the emergency brake and
scaring cars at crossings with the horn.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 2/1/2012 6:34:00 PM
Wow. incredibile detail.
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Date: 1/30/2012 8:41:00 AM
Your imagery places me there...well done!! Really liked how you finished the poem up, the last verse closed it out well. Ohh and Glad you found a giggle in I.M.A.G's station broadcast lol
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Date: 1/30/2012 7:33:00 AM
This poem is so visual...I like how I can close my eyes and picture this because you are so descriptive :)
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Date: 1/27/2012 8:49:00 PM
Every time I see one of your poems, I just feel like i am seeing something very well crafted. I love the "controlled" feel of your free verse. I guess being a lover of form poetry, that's why I admire your style in free verse. Where are you from? I can see here it is not the States!
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Darryl Davis
Date: 1/28/2012 6:15:00 AM
Thanks! Check your Soupmail for more info :-)
Date: 1/27/2012 10:43:00 AM
A heartfelt expressed story poem..I enjoyed reading it.God bless you. Erich
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Date: 1/26/2012 2:07:00 PM
Darryl....NICELY DONE !!! You impress me. oxox love Anne-Lise (Cheers!)
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Date: 1/25/2012 2:54:00 PM
a wonderful poem, with so much going on in it. it brought me to that train with you (although i'd prefer a beer) and i loved the ending. also - it's so great to find someone who knows how to use "its" correctly! bravo!
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Date: 1/25/2012 10:51:00 AM
I wish I had a better understanding on the forms of poetry so I could give you a clear confident comment on your writing Darryl. I will tell you I do love reading poetry. I thank you for sharing yours today I enjoyed reading it. Love, Carol
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Darryl Davis
Date: 1/25/2012 12:10:00 PM
Cheers! I think you understand all you need to. ;-)
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