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Atmospheric Pressure

Welcome to this club called "Earth"

Your wait will no doubt fill its worth

If you're a breather, have no fear

Your going to like the atmosphere

Mind not the pain behind your eyes

I'll be taking it with me when I rise

You see, the earth requires rain

And lows can create headache pain

But while I'm down when e'er it's grey

My mood is changing day-to-day

See, I never stay one way or other

I'm capricious, (like Nature's mother)

So here comes sunshine and blue sky

Things always improve when I get ...

HIGH!


** FOURTH PLACE in the "Atmospheric Pressure Poetry Contest", Shadow Hamilton, Sponsor. **

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Roy Pett September 5, 2017 at 7:10 AM Congratulations on your well deserved win Greg, really enjoyed this well written piece, :))

Connie Marcum Wong September 5, 2017 at 12:43 AM Greg, Congratulations on your high placement! I am so happy she liked this. ; )

Subimal Sinha-Roy September 4, 2017 at 11:24 PM Congratulations, Greg for another win with a fantastic poem. Gregory Richard Barden September 5, 2017 at 12:39 AM Blessings and thanks to you, my friend, I'm glad you liked it!

Anita Harris September 4, 2017 at 7:13 PM Very cool poem. Congratulations on your contest placement! Gregory Richard Barden September 5, 2017 at 12:39 AM Thank you very much, Anita - I am very pleased you like it! :-)

Suzanne Delaney August 29, 2017 at 6:02 AM Some fun twists with words, Greg: Your humor shows through. I enjoyed the way your rhymes worked keeping the atmospheric pressure constant. Should be a winner. SuZ Gregory Richard Barden September 1, 2017 at 10:49 PM Thanks so very much, Suzanne - I love wordplay and ambiguity, so this kind of piece is a lot of fun for me! Blessings - so happy you enjoyed it! :-)

Andrea Dietrich August 28, 2017 at 6:00 PM by the way, REALLY good. Gregory Richard Barden August 28, 2017 at 7:57 PM Thank you, Andrea, I'm pleased you liked it! :-)

Andrea Dietrich August 28, 2017 at 6:00 PM Dang, I don't understand enough about science to even think up something as clever as this. Gotta hurry and come up with something symbolic or I am DONE for. Gregory Richard Barden August 28, 2017 at 7:59 PM I have absolutely NO doubt you will, my friend, as you are extraordinarily creative AND brilliant ... I've yet to read ANYthing of yours that I didn't love, and that is rare, as I am very picky. ;-) Blessings!

Freddie Robinson Jr. August 28, 2017 at 4:49 PM I agree w/all the other talented poets/poetesses ... creative genius this poem be, Greg. I'm partial to poems w/cerebral wordplay ... this poem has it richly too. Great ending, it made me smile broadly. Love and peace always, bruh. Gregory Richard Barden August 28, 2017 at 7:56 PM Thank you SO much, Freddie, that means a lot to me ... if nothing else, I try to make my poems substantive and integral - TRY is the operative word here, I don't always succeed, lol. Mostly, I like making others smile, so that's the best part of this wonderful comment! Blessings, my brother!

John Hamilton August 27, 2017 at 12:12 PM Great wordplay and personification, like this one a lot! Shadow should love this, but hey what do I know? Gregory Richard Barden August 27, 2017 at 8:15 PM I hope you're right, Buddy - thanks! Glad you enjoyed it!

Joanna Daniel August 27, 2017 at 9:31 AM Ha ha, clever and funny, Greg:) Gregory Richard Barden August 27, 2017 at 8:14 PM Glad you enjoyed it, Jo, and that it made you smile! Bless! :-)

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart August 27, 2017 at 12:20 AM Awesomeness. Gregory Richard Barden August 27, 2017 at 8:13 PM Thanks, sweetly, my friend! <3 :-)

Connie Marcum Wong August 26, 2017 at 11:53 PM You did really well with this clever piece Greg! I think she will really like it, I do! : ) Gregory Richard Barden August 27, 2017 at 8:13 PM Thank you so much, Connie, I hope you're right, but SO many great poets here! Thanks so much, my friend - blessings! :-) <3