Ataraxis

Tonight,
cicadas and crickets
are singing for us
the trees dance and sway
with their wind partner
a red sun listens behind her
sunset curtain
as your smile reflects
the last rays of twilight-
Your breath 
brings the sweet summer breeze
to my neck
Your voice
like wind through
the grass
Your arms tangled with me
like winding roots
Your hand is a fortress
in mine-
And in this Eden,
the daisies and dandelions
blanket beneath you and I
A starless sheet
hangs over the world
but the fireflies around us
light our sky,
tonight.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Souders Avatar
March 19, 2009 at 11:39 PM
I enjoyed this work , the feelings within are beautifuly worded, good write,,,,Johnathon
Finley Avatar
March 13, 2009 at 1:25 AM
Thanks everyone! i have revised it a bit though. i added a few new lines, and switched some vocabulary usage. hopefully it made it a little better!
Johnson Avatar
March 11, 2009 at 10:50 AM
This truly beautiful...our arms like winding roots. I imagery is perfect. -Jason
Degenhardt Avatar
March 11, 2009 at 4:40 AM
You create such vivid imagery. It is truly breathtaking and romantic making for a wonderful write. Michael
Jordan Avatar
March 10, 2009 at 6:32 PM
Alyssa this is a very beautifully written poem that just takes the reader on a very special journey into your heart - This would be a fitting answer to Deborah's contest - God Bless, MJ
Guzzi Avatar
March 10, 2009 at 5:41 PM
Very sweet rich fragrant with imagery &!!! A great entry to the 5 element 5 senses contest!! Note at the bottom of the entry Senses Sound (crikets singing) Sight (night sky) Elements Wind (breeze) Fire (sun& people) Wood (trees& plants)
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