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Ataraxis

Tonight, cicadas and crickets are singing for us the trees dance and sway with their wind partner a red sun listens behind her sunset curtain as your smile reflects the last rays of twilight- Your breath brings the sweet summer breeze to my neck Your voice like wind through the grass Your arms tangled with me like winding roots Your hand is a fortress in mine- And in this Eden, the daisies and dandelions blanket beneath you and I A starless sheet hangs over the world but the fireflies around us light our sky, tonight.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2009




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Date: 3/19/2009 11:39:00 PM
I enjoyed this work , the feelings within are beautifuly worded, good write,,,,Johnathon
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Date: 3/13/2009 1:25:00 AM
Thanks everyone! i have revised it a bit though. i added a few new lines, and switched some vocabulary usage. hopefully it made it a little better!
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Date: 3/11/2009 10:50:00 AM
This truly beautiful...our arms like winding roots. I imagery is perfect. -Jason
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Date: 3/11/2009 4:40:00 AM
You create such vivid imagery. It is truly breathtaking and romantic making for a wonderful write. Michael
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Date: 3/10/2009 6:32:00 PM
Alyssa this is a very beautifully written poem that just takes the reader on a very special journey into your heart - This would be a fitting answer to Deborah's contest - God Bless, MJ
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Date: 3/10/2009 5:41:00 PM
Very sweet rich fragrant with imagery &!!! A great entry to the 5 element 5 senses contest!! Note at the bottom of the entry Senses Sound (crikets singing) Sight (night sky) Elements Wind (breeze) Fire (sun& people) Wood (trees& plants)
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