At the End

Ever so much more than friend Wearing scars of love's lullaby I can still see you at the end Our song often left wounds to mend Each time we'd return; blood barely dry Ever so much more than friend To the depths of spite we'd descend But against hatred's grip we'd ally I can still see you at the end Betrayed by hope left alone to fend Holding on; clasped hands cracked & dry Ever so much more than friend Cuts slowly heal, the burn lessened The allure to give up we'd deny I can still see you at the end We stand frayed on a path we didn't intend My hand in yours I walk with closed eyes Ever so much more than friend I can still see you at the end 12/05/2017

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Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 2/17/2023 5:37:00 AM

I've come back for a weep, lol, love xo

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 4/21/2021 12:19:00 PM

Tight bonds that go beyond this lifetime, Well written , I loved it

Wayland Bunch

Date: 2/5/2021 2:56:00 AM

Well I had to come find a villanelle. My favorite form of course. This is a good one. It's about holding on and yes more than a friend, so much more. That line is so powerful. Nice work.

Fj Thomas
Date: 2/7/2021 11:31:00 AM

Hi Way! Thank you so much :) Glad to see you here. One of the few places I visit when I have time to get online.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 2/17/2020 8:35:00 AM

It’s best to start with the end in mind. It’s one of the best ways to arrive at one’s destination. I like where you started from. This is an excellent first poem for the soup. Hugs Rick.

Fj Thomas
Date: 2/18/2020 7:26:00 PM

Thanks Rick. I wish I remembered what the actual first one was; it was so long ago. I guess that's why I would now recommend against deleting an account; even when being attacked. When I opened this second one I honestly had no idea which poems were originally posted. So I just added the most recent ones at that point in time.

Juliet Ligon

Date: 1/30/2020 10:55:00 PM

Sounds like a deep, devoted love. This is a beautiful poem.

Fj Thomas
Date: 2/3/2020 7:31:00 PM

Definitely a tried one :) Thank you again Juliet.

James Inman

Date: 10/25/2019 6:14:00 PM

Hi, this is beautiful. I thought I had commented on it before, perhaps not. Very touching.

Fj Thomas
Date: 11/25/2019 5:44:00 PM

Hi James! Hope everything is well with you :) And thank you.

J Hamilton Gist

Date: 5/16/2018 6:48:00 PM

Walking the narrow path of life...yes indeed.

Fj Thomas
Date: 5/17/2018 8:08:00 AM

Good morning J :)

Diana Angell

Date: 4/29/2018 1:09:00 PM

You write like paint on a tapestry. Very nice

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/29/2018 3:01:00 PM

Diana what a beautiful compliment. Thank you so much.

Debbie Duncan

Date: 4/11/2018 7:52:00 PM

I like your words. I've written a few like this myself. :)

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/12/2018 6:39:00 AM

I greatly appreciate the time you've given me Debbie. If you had a favorite of yours that you liked others to read which would it be? :)

Jaro Tomko

Date: 4/6/2018 12:49:00 PM

its beautiful

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 8:00:00 PM

Thank you Jaro :)

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 4/6/2018 10:23:00 AM

A wonderful call for uplifted, insightful, profound love.. Love that transcends differences, hatred, quarrels, betrayal.. Divine love.. Love of humanity! "Ever so much more than friend / I can still see you at the end," Amazing write!

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 8:00:00 PM

Besma you honor me with your kind words. Thank you so very much.

Niall Fulham

Date: 4/1/2018 1:47:00 PM

Hi Shadow , belated welcome :) wonderful write enjoyed this form ::)))Hugs~~~Niall

Fj Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 7:59:00 PM

Niall I know I've replied to this; I'm so sorry it disappeared. Thank you so very much.

Yazmin Malik

Date: 3/29/2018 3:28:00 PM

The one who is silent signposted me to your poems, so happy he did. You write with heart <3

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/29/2018 3:54:00 PM

Then I am most grateful he is not always Silent ;) Thank you again Yazmin; I look forward to reading your work!

Eve Roper

Date: 3/15/2018 5:59:00 PM

Always the best written...Nice to have you back :)

Fj Thomas
Date: 3/15/2018 7:43:00 PM

Hmmm... "nice to have me back?" Soupmail.

Edward Mccall

Date: 1/7/2018 4:41:00 PM

WOW!! what an emotional write with so many great lines. One of my favs is; wearing scars of loves lullaby. So good: I enjoyed every line well done Shadow.

Fj Thomas
Date: 1/9/2018 12:04:00 PM

Hello Edward, it often does make one suffer in one way or another. Thank you :)

Amber Smith

Date: 12/31/2017 9:18:00 AM

Wow, I felt this a'll the way to my core. Good stuff, it's raw I like it. I'm very new to this type of formal type writing, I'll be honest I just guessed at the type of form mine are even in. I haven't a clue, but I know what soul sounds like if that makes since. You got plenty of it. Nice work.

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/31/2017 8:32:00 PM

Thank you Amber :) I'm a big proponent of write what you feel how you feel! But I get bored so I try different forms to pass the time. Thank you again.

Darlene De Beaulieu

Date: 12/20/2017 9:00:00 PM

Hello Shadow of the Past,Yes your poem is well written. I always wondered what a Villanelle poem was like, now i know. Welcome to Poetry Soup.Have a nice evening my friend.

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/31/2017 8:30:00 PM

Aww thanks for thinking of me D! :D

Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 12/29/2017 6:23:00 PM

Happy New Year my friend.

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/21/2017 8:12:00 AM

Good morning Darlene :) And thank you very much!

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 12/20/2017 2:43:00 PM

A beautifully penned Villanelle! Welcome to PoetrySoup and please continue to churn out lovely pieces such as this! Best wishes. Pandita

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/20/2017 3:36:00 PM

Thank you again Pandita. Your comments are very uplifting :)

Harry Horsman

Date: 12/19/2017 9:30:00 AM

taking in your first posting 'at the end' awesome, and what an intro to your poetic pen..love this,

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/19/2017 10:00:00 AM

I very much appreciate your visit Harry. Thanks so much!

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 12/18/2017 10:01:00 PM

Stunningly superb Villanelle poem, SP! Great debut offering ... enjoyed the loving flow of your poetic expressions. A river of peace it water fell into my heart. Outstanding poem, my talented friend. Love and more love to you and yours.

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/19/2017 7:51:00 AM

Another wonderful compliment from you this morning! Thank you dear Freddie.

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 12/16/2017 10:52:00 AM

Hello new souper and welcome. Glad to read this lovely poem and with a form I have never tried. Good one. love phyl

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:29:00 PM

I really appreciate you reading my poems Phyl; thank you again.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 12/16/2017 8:33:00 AM

Wow! Great poetry, Shadow:) tough form and you've executed it really well, welcome to Poetry Soup:)

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:27:00 PM

I'm glad you think so Jo. Thanks a lot!

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 12/16/2017 7:47:00 AM

Awwww...My heart melts and I am left with only swoon.

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:26:00 PM

Lol well that made my day! Thank you Rhoda :)

James Marshall Goff

Date: 12/15/2017 9:18:00 PM

Cool!

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:24:00 PM

Thanks James!

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/15/2017 11:21:00 AM

Darlene, A warm welcome to Poetry Soup. Love does have a way of conquering all through all life's tribulations. Beautifully expressed in this poignant Villanelle. : )

Fj Thomas
Date: 12/15/2017 12:05:00 PM

Lol Well my name isn't Darlene but I greatly appreciate the compliment! Thank you Connie. I am familiar with your Constanza style and really enjoy it.