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At the End

Ever so much more than friend Wearing scars of love's lullaby I can still see you at the end Our song often left wounds to mend Each time we'd return; blood barely dry Ever so much more than friend To the depths of spite we'd descend But against hatred's grip we'd ally I can still see you at the end Betrayed by hope left alone to fend Holding on; clasped hands cracked & dry Ever so much more than friend Cuts slowly heal, the burn lessened The allure to give up we deny I can still see you at the end We stand frayed on a path we didn't intend My hand in yours I walk with closed eyes Ever so much more than friend I can still see you at the end 12/05/2017

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Date: 2/17/2020 8:35:00 AM
It’s best to start with the end in mind. It’s one of the best ways to arrive at one’s destination. I like where you started from. This is an excellent first poem for the soup. Hugs Rick.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 2/18/2020 7:26:00 PM
Thanks Rick. I wish I remembered what the actual first one was; it was so long ago. I guess that's why I would now recommend against deleting an account; even when being attacked. When I opened this second one I honestly had no idea which poems were originally posted. So I just added the most recent ones at that point in time.
Date: 1/30/2020 10:55:00 PM
Sounds like a deep, devoted love. This is a beautiful poem.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 2/3/2020 7:31:00 PM
Definitely a tried one :) Thank you again Juliet.
Date: 10/25/2019 6:14:00 PM
Hi, this is beautiful. I thought I had commented on it before, perhaps not. Very touching.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 11/25/2019 5:44:00 PM
Hi James! Hope everything is well with you :) And thank you.
Date: 5/16/2018 6:48:00 PM
Walking the narrow path of life...yes indeed.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 5/17/2018 8:08:00 AM
Good morning J :)
Date: 4/29/2018 1:09:00 PM
You write like paint on a tapestry. Very nice
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FJ Thomas
Date: 4/29/2018 3:01:00 PM
Diana what a beautiful compliment. Thank you so much.
Date: 4/11/2018 7:52:00 PM
I like your words. I've written a few like this myself. :)
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FJ Thomas
Date: 4/12/2018 6:39:00 AM
I greatly appreciate the time you've given me Debbie. If you had a favorite of yours that you liked others to read which would it be? :)
Date: 4/6/2018 12:49:00 PM
its beautiful
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FJ Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 8:00:00 PM
Thank you Jaro :)
Date: 4/6/2018 10:23:00 AM
A wonderful call for uplifted, insightful, profound love.. Love that transcends differences, hatred, quarrels, betrayal.. Divine love.. Love of humanity! "Ever so much more than friend / I can still see you at the end," Amazing write!
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FJ Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 8:00:00 PM
Besma you honor me with your kind words. Thank you so very much.
Date: 4/1/2018 1:47:00 PM
Hi Shadow , belated welcome :) wonderful write enjoyed this form ::)))Hugs~~~Niall
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FJ Thomas
Date: 4/6/2018 7:59:00 PM
Niall I know I've replied to this; I'm so sorry it disappeared. Thank you so very much.
Date: 3/29/2018 3:28:00 PM
The one who is silent signposted me to your poems, so happy he did. You write with heart <3
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FJ Thomas
Date: 3/29/2018 3:54:00 PM
Then I am most grateful he is not always Silent ;) Thank you again Yazmin; I look forward to reading your work!
Date: 3/15/2018 5:59:00 PM
Always the best written...Nice to have you back :)
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FJ Thomas
Date: 3/15/2018 7:43:00 PM
Hmmm... "nice to have me back?" Soupmail.
Date: 1/7/2018 4:41:00 PM
WOW!! what an emotional write with so many great lines. One of my favs is; wearing scars of loves lullaby. So good: I enjoyed every line well done Shadow.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 1/9/2018 12:04:00 PM
Hello Edward, it often does make one suffer in one way or another. Thank you :)
Date: 12/31/2017 9:18:00 AM
Wow, I felt this a'll the way to my core. Good stuff, it's raw I like it. I'm very new to this type of formal type writing, I'll be honest I just guessed at the type of form mine are even in. I haven't a clue, but I know what soul sounds like if that makes since. You got plenty of it. Nice work.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/31/2017 8:32:00 PM
Thank you Amber :) I'm a big proponent of write what you feel how you feel! But I get bored so I try different forms to pass the time. Thank you again.
Date: 12/20/2017 9:00:00 PM
Hello Shadow of the Past,Yes your poem is well written. I always wondered what a Villanelle poem was like, now i know. Welcome to Poetry Soup.Have a nice evening my friend.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/31/2017 8:30:00 PM
Aww thanks for thinking of me D! :D
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Darlene De Beaulieu
Date: 12/29/2017 6:23:00 PM
Happy New Year my friend.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/21/2017 8:12:00 AM
Good morning Darlene :) And thank you very much!
Date: 12/20/2017 2:43:00 PM
A beautifully penned Villanelle! Welcome to PoetrySoup and please continue to churn out lovely pieces such as this! Best wishes. Pandita
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/20/2017 3:36:00 PM
Thank you again Pandita. Your comments are very uplifting :)
Date: 12/19/2017 9:30:00 AM
taking in your first posting 'at the end' awesome, and what an intro to your poetic pen..love this,
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/19/2017 10:00:00 AM
I very much appreciate your visit Harry. Thanks so much!
Date: 12/18/2017 10:01:00 PM
Stunningly superb Villanelle poem, SP! Great debut offering ... enjoyed the loving flow of your poetic expressions. A river of peace it water fell into my heart. Outstanding poem, my talented friend. Love and more love to you and yours.
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Date: 12/19/2017 7:51:00 AM
Another wonderful compliment from you this morning! Thank you dear Freddie.
Date: 12/16/2017 10:52:00 AM
Hello new souper and welcome. Glad to read this lovely poem and with a form I have never tried. Good one. love phyl
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:29:00 PM
I really appreciate you reading my poems Phyl; thank you again.
Date: 12/16/2017 8:33:00 AM
Wow! Great poetry, Shadow:) tough form and you've executed it really well, welcome to Poetry Soup:)
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:27:00 PM
I'm glad you think so Jo. Thanks a lot!
Date: 12/16/2017 7:47:00 AM
Awwww...My heart melts and I am left with only swoon.
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:26:00 PM
Lol well that made my day! Thank you Rhoda :)
Date: 12/15/2017 9:18:00 PM
Cool!
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/16/2017 7:24:00 PM
Thanks James!
Date: 12/15/2017 11:21:00 AM
Darlene, A warm welcome to Poetry Soup. Love does have a way of conquering all through all life's tribulations. Beautifully expressed in this poignant Villanelle. : )
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Date: 12/15/2017 12:05:00 PM
Lol Well my name isn't Darlene but I greatly appreciate the compliment! Thank you Connie. I am familiar with your Constanza style and really enjoy it.
Date: 12/15/2017 10:02:00 AM
Definitely a pleasure reading your first post. It's awesome... hugs and smiles :)
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/15/2017 10:39:00 AM
Thank you Akkina. Smiles right back atcha ;)
Date: 12/15/2017 6:23:00 AM
Hello Shadow, Thanks for commenting on my recent Tanka on "Racism." And, Welcome to Poetry Soup!! A wonderful Villanelle you've written here for sure, with a most compelling and demonstrable meaning. Your subtle mastery of the words and the form are quite evident. Keep Writing and Having Fun at it!! Best Always, Gary
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/15/2017 10:40:00 AM
Thank you Gary :)
Date: 12/14/2017 3:43:00 PM
Such an emotional poem Shadow, I love this form and the impact of the repeated lines:-) welcome to poetry soup:-) hugs jan xx
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FJ Thomas
Date: 12/15/2017 10:36:00 AM
Thank you very much Jan :)
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