FJ Thomas Poet Villanelle

At the End

Ever so much more than friend
Wearing scars of love's lullaby 
I can still see you at the end

Our song often left wounds to mend
Each time we'd return; blood barely dry
Ever so much more than friend 

To the depths of spite we'd descend
But against hatred's grip we'd ally 
I can still see you at the end

Betrayed by hope left alone to fend
Holding on; clasped hands cracked & dry
Ever so much more than friend 

Cuts slowly heal, the burn lessened
The allure to give up we'd deny
I can still see you at the end 

We stand frayed on a path we didn't intend
My hand in yours I walk with closed eyes
Ever so much more than friend 
I can still see you at the end 

12/05/2017

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Mystic Rose Rose February 17, 2023 at 5:37 AM I've come back for a weep, lol, love xo

Mystic Rose Rose April 21, 2021 at 12:19 PM Tight bonds that go beyond this lifetime, Well written , I loved it

Wayland Bunch February 5, 2021 at 2:56 AM Well I had to come find a villanelle. My favorite form of course. This is a good one. It's about holding on and yes more than a friend, so much more. That line is so powerful. Nice work. FJ Thomas February 7, 2021 at 11:31 AM Hi Way! Thank you so much :) Glad to see you here. One of the few places I visit when I have time to get online.

Richard Lamoureux February 17, 2020 at 8:35 AM It’s best to start with the end in mind. It’s one of the best ways to arrive at one’s destination. I like where you started from. This is an excellent first poem for the soup. Hugs Rick. FJ Thomas February 18, 2020 at 7:26 PM Thanks Rick. I wish I remembered what the actual first one was; it was so long ago. I guess that's why I would now recommend against deleting an account; even when being attacked. When I opened this second one I honestly had no idea which poems were originally posted. So I just added the most recent ones at that point in time.

Juliet Ligon January 30, 2020 at 10:55 PM Sounds like a deep, devoted love. This is a beautiful poem. FJ Thomas February 3, 2020 at 7:31 PM Definitely a tried one :) Thank you again Juliet.

James Inman October 25, 2019 at 6:14 PM Hi, this is beautiful. I thought I had commented on it before, perhaps not. Very touching. FJ Thomas November 25, 2019 at 5:44 PM Hi James! Hope everything is well with you :) And thank you.

J Hamilton Gist May 16, 2018 at 6:48 PM Walking the narrow path of life...yes indeed. FJ Thomas May 17, 2018 at 8:08 AM Good morning J :)

Diana Angell April 29, 2018 at 1:09 PM You write like paint on a tapestry. Very nice FJ Thomas April 29, 2018 at 3:01 PM Diana what a beautiful compliment. Thank you so much.

Debbie Duncan April 11, 2018 at 7:52 PM I like your words. I've written a few like this myself. :) FJ Thomas April 12, 2018 at 6:39 AM I greatly appreciate the time you've given me Debbie. If you had a favorite of yours that you liked others to read which would it be? :)

Jaro Tomko April 6, 2018 at 12:49 PM its beautiful FJ Thomas April 6, 2018 at 8:00 PM Thank you Jaro :)

Besma Riabi Dziri April 6, 2018 at 10:23 AM A wonderful call for uplifted, insightful, profound love.. Love that transcends differences, hatred, quarrels, betrayal.. Divine love.. Love of humanity! "Ever so much more than friend / I can still see you at the end," Amazing write! FJ Thomas April 6, 2018 at 8:00 PM Besma you honor me with your kind words. Thank you so very much.

Yazmin Malik March 29, 2018 at 3:28 PM The one who is silent signposted me to your poems, so happy he did. You write with heart <3 FJ Thomas March 29, 2018 at 3:54 PM Then I am most grateful he is not always Silent ;) Thank you again Yazmin; I look forward to reading your work!

Eve Roper March 15, 2018 at 5:59 PM Always the best written...Nice to have you back :) FJ Thomas March 15, 2018 at 7:43 PM Hmmm... "nice to have me back?" Soupmail.

Edward Mccall January 7, 2018 at 4:41 PM WOW!! what an emotional write with so many great lines. One of my favs is; wearing scars of loves lullaby. So good: I enjoyed every line well done Shadow. FJ Thomas January 9, 2018 at 12:04 PM Hello Edward, it often does make one suffer in one way or another. Thank you :)

Amber Smith December 31, 2017 at 9:18 AM Wow, I felt this a'll the way to my core. Good stuff, it's raw I like it. I'm very new to this type of formal type writing, I'll be honest I just guessed at the type of form mine are even in. I haven't a clue, but I know what soul sounds like if that makes since. You got plenty of it. Nice work. FJ Thomas December 31, 2017 at 8:32 PM Thank you Amber :) I'm a big proponent of write what you feel how you feel! But I get bored so I try different forms to pass the time. Thank you again.

Darlene De Beaulieu December 20, 2017 at 9:00 PM Hello Shadow of the Past,Yes your poem is well written. I always wondered what a Villanelle poem was like, now i know. Welcome to Poetry Soup.Have a nice evening my friend. FJ Thomas December 31, 2017 at 8:30 PM Aww thanks for thinking of me D! :D Darlene De Beaulieu December 29, 2017 at 6:23 PM Happy New Year my friend. FJ Thomas December 21, 2017 at 8:12 AM Good morning Darlene :) And thank you very much!

Pandita Sietesantos December 20, 2017 at 2:43 PM A beautifully penned Villanelle! Welcome to PoetrySoup and please continue to churn out lovely pieces such as this! Best wishes. Pandita FJ Thomas December 20, 2017 at 3:36 PM Thank you again Pandita. Your comments are very uplifting :)

Harry Horsman December 19, 2017 at 9:30 AM taking in your first posting 'at the end' awesome, and what an intro to your poetic pen..love this, FJ Thomas December 19, 2017 at 10:00 AM I very much appreciate your visit Harry. Thanks so much!

Freddie Robinson Jr. December 18, 2017 at 10:01 PM Stunningly superb Villanelle poem, SP! Great debut offering ... enjoyed the loving flow of your poetic expressions. A river of peace it water fell into my heart. Outstanding poem, my talented friend. Love and more love to you and yours. FJ Thomas December 19, 2017 at 7:51 AM Another wonderful compliment from you this morning! Thank you dear Freddie.

Phyllis Babcock December 16, 2017 at 10:52 AM Hello new souper and welcome. Glad to read this lovely poem and with a form I have never tried. Good one. love phyl FJ Thomas December 16, 2017 at 7:29 PM I really appreciate you reading my poems Phyl; thank you again.

Joanna Daniel December 16, 2017 at 8:33 AM Wow! Great poetry, Shadow:) tough form and you've executed it really well, welcome to Poetry Soup:) FJ Thomas December 16, 2017 at 7:27 PM I'm glad you think so Jo. Thanks a lot!

Rhoda Tripp December 16, 2017 at 7:47 AM Awwww...My heart melts and I am left with only swoon. FJ Thomas December 16, 2017 at 7:26 PM Lol well that made my day! Thank you Rhoda :)

James Marshall Goff December 15, 2017 at 9:18 PM Cool! FJ Thomas December 16, 2017 at 7:24 PM Thanks James!

Connie Marcum Wong December 15, 2017 at 11:21 AM Darlene, A warm welcome to Poetry Soup. Love does have a way of conquering all through all life's tribulations. Beautifully expressed in this poignant Villanelle. : ) FJ Thomas December 15, 2017 at 12:05 PM Lol Well my name isn't Darlene but I greatly appreciate the compliment! Thank you Connie. I am familiar with your Constanza style and really enjoy it.

Akkina Downing December 15, 2017 at 10:02 AM Definitely a pleasure reading your first post. It's awesome... hugs and smiles :) FJ Thomas December 15, 2017 at 10:39 AM Thank you Akkina. Smiles right back atcha ;)

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