At Night


buried dark, daysky
shorn hair from Etain
pedestal opens
now walking eggshells
none will see her fall

welcome midnight
her profile's dab
with missing light — 
phantasmic yolk.

foggy pane
more a face
watches glass;

half there
oval

pitch

angstextended metaphorimageintrospectiondiminished hexaverse

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CayCay Godwin

September 20, 2026 at 12:58 PM

Walking phantasmic eggshell magic. I mean that. CayCay

Kim Rodrigues

September 11, 2026 at 3:48 AM

Well written! Walking eggshells, common, but then you give us phantasmic yolk! More a face becomes an eerie image. ✍️📖🌹

Nette Onclaud

September 9, 2026 at 3:30 PM

love the brooding kind of mood this piece evokes...outstanding, paige

Andrea Dietrich

September 9, 2026 at 12:24 AM

I like how egg shells went along with the yolk line. Great poetry form you used here

Yann Rolland

September 8, 2026 at 2:55 PM

impressive poetry, merci

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri

September 8, 2026 at 1:24 PM

An intriguing poem, with somewhat dark mystery . Expressed and narrated superbly !kudos! Plz also read and comment my newest poem too

Sotto Poet

September 8, 2026 at 6:18 AM

With its mysterious and dreamlike quality, this poem effectively creates an atmosphere of intrigue, Paige. The imagery is unique and leaves a lot to ponder, effectively capturing the essence of night.

Daniel Henry Rodgers

September 8, 2026 at 6:10 AM

Dear Paige, I love how you let the imagery stay fractured: Etain’s shorn hair, the eggshell walk, that “phantasmic yolk” hovering like a light that forgot its source. The whole piece reads like someone trying to stay upright in a darkness that keeps shifting shape. It’s eerie, and beautifully pared down. You make the diminished hexaverse feel. Blessings, Daniel

Hiya Sharma

September 8, 2026 at 2:33 AM

Ohhhh this is patch dark rage! And phantasmic angst that you've presented here so exquisitely dear Paige! Your language here is really profound and sets the atmosphere in such a mysterious way ~ I've never tried a diminished hexaverse ever i think, but you did it with all the poetic vigour that has inspired me! Walking on eggshells.. sigh definitely related with that! Life sometimes! Very thought-provoking as always ~ keep writinnnn and shininnn my sweet friend!! Hugszzzz 🫂🌹 🧚 🧚 💫 💫