At Dawn

At Dawn…

At dawn in the morning, become a gentle breeze.
   Drinking like a drunken, and doing as you please.
Look at all the tulips, their cups are filled with wine.
   Drinking in the morning and dance with all the trees.
You've got to smell the flowers, flowers are divine.
   Bathing in their nectar, and humming like the bees. 
The garden filled with kindness, wake up smell the light. 
   The journey is the short one, a chance for you to seize.
My heart is pure goodness; my hands are tied with pain.
   My pain will soon be over, my heart will stand at ease.
If never taste sunshine, your mouth is full of night.
   The nights veil the darkness and make your life to freeze.
Wake up, go with “Haloo” the sun is friend of his,
   Your eyes will be open, and see the thing he sees.

9/23/16     Haloo

Copyright © | Year Posted 2016



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Date: 5/31/2017 3:43:00 PM
What a very beautiful piece this is! I love the beauty and majesty of the dawn and you have captured it so well with your lovely images! A-7! Well done, my friend! Pandita
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 6/1/2017 2:37:00 AM
Thank you my beautiful friend..
Date: 2/5/2017 12:02:00 PM
Thanks for opening my eyes to how the form is correctly written Pashang its lovely to read this poem again:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 2/5/2017 1:44:00 PM
You're always welcome... don't kiss me goodbye.
Date: 12/19/2016 7:52:00 AM
Soooo beautiful!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/19/2016 1:34:00 PM
Thank you Charmaine...
Date: 11/1/2016 7:05:00 AM
Beautiful write on nature at dawn:)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 11/24/2016 11:50:00 AM
Thank you my friend
Date: 10/15/2016 7:45:00 AM
Enjoyed reading your work..Ghazal is not an easy form to do..You seemed to be right online with this but I would have to look it up for I forget how to do one and always have to go back to see how it is done..Sara
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Date: 10/16/2016 11:36:00 AM
Thanks Sara.... I like this form of poetry...
Date: 10/10/2016 3:38:00 PM
wow, I bet the things you see are cool and nice, I hope to see them too. nice ghazal Pashang.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/11/2016 12:48:00 PM
Thank you... look closely... they are closer than you think..
Date: 10/8/2016 10:56:00 AM
Very meaningful Ghazal U penned dear friend. I enjoyed the entire piece. Brilliant write. A7 from me...........//hugs
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 10/11/2016 12:47:00 PM
Thank you for your kindness...
Date: 10/7/2016 8:18:00 PM
A 7 for this wonderfully descriptive poem--full of lovely imagery, Pashang! Janice
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Date: 10/8/2016 10:43:00 AM
Thank you Janice..
Date: 10/7/2016 6:03:00 PM
Now this is definitely one that should be painted, because the poem is a masterpiece of the beauty of nature and the dawning of a new day. So very lovely.
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Date: 10/8/2016 10:41:00 AM
Thank you Chris ... you are so kind.
Date: 10/4/2016 6:53:00 PM
Such a beautiful uplifting poem Pashang:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 10/5/2016 12:41:00 AM
Thanks my dear Jan...
Date: 9/27/2016 1:01:00 AM
Great poem well written x
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Date: 9/27/2016 1:34:00 AM
Thank you Wendy....
Date: 9/26/2016 11:33:00 AM
what joy this splendid morning brings, pashang..huggs
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Date: 9/27/2016 1:35:00 AM
Thank you very much..
Date: 9/25/2016 10:34:00 AM
this is a beautiful one for dawn, Pashang. WEll done.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/25/2016 4:36:00 PM
Thank you my dear friend....
Date: 9/25/2016 6:12:00 AM
Truly inspiring poetry, just love this.
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Date: 9/25/2016 4:35:00 PM
Thank you Harry....
Date: 9/24/2016 11:14:00 PM
awe, this is very nice, Pashang, the goodness will heal and ease the moments hidden. To seek is to find, and I love how you drew me in by using so much imagery... A 7. LINDA
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Date: 9/24/2016 11:20:00 PM
Thanks Linda for stopping by....
Date: 9/24/2016 4:46:00 PM
Twilight and dawn. Such special moments to enjoy. Just as I enjoyed this poem Pashang. Beautiful.
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Date: 9/24/2016 11:09:00 PM
Thanks Jean.. you are so kind.
Date: 9/24/2016 4:27:00 PM
Yours is such a beautiful dawn, Pashang! I like the imagery and personification. I would be only too glad to walk with you and enjoy the pleasure of daybreak. // paul
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Date: 9/24/2016 11:08:00 PM
You're always welcome........
Date: 9/24/2016 4:03:00 PM
I couldn't reply a thank you on your comment on my poem. Thank you your poem was nice
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Date: 9/24/2016 4:14:00 PM
Thanks Bahram..
Date: 9/24/2016 7:37:00 AM
"Tulips filled with wine" Great metaphor! Just a beautiful ghazal Pashang my friend. I love it:)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 9/24/2016 9:39:00 AM
Thanks DT... We even think the same..
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