At Dawn

At Dawn…

At dawn in the morning, become a gentle breeze.
   Drinking like a drunken, and doing as you please.
Look at all the tulips, their cups are filled with wine.
   Drinking in the morning and dance with all the trees.
You've got to smell the flowers, flowers are divine.
   Bathing in their nectar, and humming like the bees. 
The garden filled with kindness, wake up smell the light. 
   The journey is the short one, a chance for you to seize.
My heart is pure goodness; my hands are tied with pain.
   My pain will soon be over, my heart will stand at ease.
If never taste sunshine, your mouth is full of night.
   The nights veil the darkness and make your life to freeze.
Wake up, go with “Haloo” the sun is friend of his,
   Your eyes will be open, and see the thing he sees.

9/23/16     Haloo
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Sietesantos Avatar
May 31, 2017 at 3:43 PM
What a very beautiful piece this is! I love the beauty and majesty of the dawn and you have captured it so well with your lovely images! A-7! Well done, my friend! Pandita
Salehi Avatar
June 1, 2017 at 2:37 AM
Thank you my beautiful friend..
Allison Avatar
February 5, 2017 at 12:02 PM
Thanks for opening my eyes to how the form is correctly written Pashang its lovely to read this poem again:-) hugs Jan xx
Salehi Avatar
February 5, 2017 at 1:44 PM
You're always welcome... don't kiss me goodbye.
Chircop Avatar
December 19, 2016 at 7:52 AM
Soooo beautiful!
Salehi Avatar
December 19, 2016 at 1:34 PM
Thank you Charmaine...
Daniel Avatar
November 1, 2016 at 7:05 AM
Beautiful write on nature at dawn:)
Salehi Avatar
November 24, 2016 at 11:50 AM
Thank you my friend
Kendrick Avatar
October 15, 2016 at 7:45 AM
Enjoyed reading your work..Ghazal is not an easy form to do..You seemed to be right online with this but I would have to look it up for I forget how to do one and always have to go back to see how it is done..Sara
Salehi Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 11:36 AM
Thanks Sara.... I like this form of poetry...
Sage Avatar
October 10, 2016 at 3:38 PM
wow, I bet the things you see are cool and nice, I hope to see them too. nice ghazal Pashang.
Salehi Avatar
October 11, 2016 at 12:48 PM
Thank you... look closely... they are closer than you think..
Dalei Avatar
October 8, 2016 at 10:56 AM
Very meaningful Ghazal U penned dear friend. I enjoyed the entire piece. Brilliant write. A7 from me...........//hugs
Salehi Avatar
October 11, 2016 at 12:47 PM
Thank you for your kindness...
Canerdy Avatar
October 7, 2016 at 8:18 PM
A 7 for this wonderfully descriptive poem--full of lovely imagery, Pashang! Janice
Salehi Avatar
October 8, 2016 at 10:43 AM
Thank you Janice..
Green Avatar
October 7, 2016 at 6:03 PM
Now this is definitely one that should be painted, because the poem is a masterpiece of the beauty of nature and the dawning of a new day. So very lovely.
Salehi Avatar
October 8, 2016 at 10:41 AM
Thank you Chris ... you are so kind.
Allison Avatar
October 4, 2016 at 6:53 PM
Such a beautiful uplifting poem Pashang:-) hugs jan xx
Salehi Avatar
October 5, 2016 at 12:41 AM
Thanks my dear Jan...
Rycroft Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 1:01 AM
Great poem well written x
Salehi Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 1:34 AM
Thank you Wendy....
Onclaud Avatar
September 26, 2016 at 11:33 AM
what joy this splendid morning brings, pashang..huggs
Salehi Avatar
September 27, 2016 at 1:35 AM
Thank you very much..
Dietrich Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 10:34 AM
this is a beautiful one for dawn, Pashang. WEll done.
Salehi Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 4:36 PM
Thank you my dear friend....
Horsman Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 6:12 AM
Truly inspiring poetry, just love this.
Salehi Avatar
September 25, 2016 at 4:35 PM
Thank you Harry....
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September 24, 2016 at 11:14 PM
awe, this is very nice, Pashang, the goodness will heal and ease the moments hidden. To seek is to find, and I love how you drew me in by using so much imagery... A 7. LINDA
Salehi Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 11:20 PM
Thanks Linda for stopping by....
Murray Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 4:46 PM
Twilight and dawn. Such special moments to enjoy. Just as I enjoyed this poem Pashang. Beautiful.
Salehi Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 11:09 PM
Thanks Jean.. you are so kind.
Callus Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 4:27 PM
Yours is such a beautiful dawn, Pashang! I like the imagery and personification. I would be only too glad to walk with you and enjoy the pleasure of daybreak. // paul
Salehi Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 11:08 PM
You're always welcome........
Sediqi Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 4:03 PM
I couldn't reply a thank you on your comment on my poem. Thank you your poem was nice
Salehi Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 4:14 PM
Thanks Bahram..
Turner Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 7:37 AM
"Tulips filled with wine" Great metaphor! Just a beautiful ghazal Pashang my friend. I love it:)
Salehi Avatar
September 24, 2016 at 9:39 AM
Thanks DT... We even think the same..
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