Ashen Backdrop

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Brian Strand's 2025 Posted Short Form Contest... 19 Jan 25....dodoitsu 7/7/7/5 syllabic count

bare the foliage of trees petals crumbling… split from bones ghosts of maples hanging low, ashen backdrop tilts

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Duke Beaufort

Date: 2/24/2025 4:44:00 PM

Nette, almost reminds me of the fire scenes in California, but I'm thinking you're simply referring to winter's ending scenes. Either way, it's haunting and I am glad spring is around the corner for us!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/19/2025 11:17:00 PM

This is so nice. Hope it was a win. How are you doing, Nette?

Tom Woody

Date: 1/19/2025 9:46:00 AM

Surreal, almost ghostly winter scene nicely portrayed in few words. Have a nice Sunday Nette

Paige Hind

Date: 1/19/2025 9:40:00 AM

Sounds like burning or chopping down trees - such a sad thing, deep imagery