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As I Lay

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  In the forecastle 
           I lay

Mine vision as I lay
           true
          is you

           as if
             us
       in a castle

fantasylovefree verse

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Robert Heemstra

January 21, 2013 at 7:54 PM

Just wanted thank you for using forecastle in a poem. I have many good memories of working in the forecastle onboard the USS Nimitz 1983-1987. Nice writing.

James Peranteau

June 1, 2021 at 7:53 PM

No doubt! Ty sir for serving....much love, james

David Smalling

November 16, 2010 at 10:54 AM

Still drying to get under its skin ... yet from outside, I'll say, it seems so secure within ... the space from which you write to our delight.

Poet Destroyer A

November 12, 2010 at 11:52 PM

enjoyed, your poem,,.p.d. *p.s.* I posted a poem dedication, hope you can spy your name in there. (IT IS IN THERE)Thanks for all your comments always p.d.

James Peranteau

June 1, 2021 at 7:48 PM

*winks....much love, james