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As I Lay

. In the forecastle I lay Mine vision as I lay true is you as if us in a castle

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Robert Heemstra

Date: 1/21/2013 7:54:00 PM

Just wanted thank you for using forecastle in a poem. I have many good memories of working in the forecastle onboard the USS Nimitz 1983-1987. Nice writing.

James Peranteau
Date: 6/1/2021 7:53:00 PM

No doubt! Ty sir for serving....much love, james

David Smalling

Date: 11/16/2010 10:54:00 AM

Still drying to get under its skin ... yet from outside, I'll say, it seems so secure within ... the space from which you write to our delight.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/12/2010 11:52:00 PM

enjoyed, your poem,,.p.d. *p.s.* I posted a poem dedication, hope you can spy your name in there. (IT IS IN THERE)Thanks for all your comments always p.d.

James Peranteau
Date: 6/1/2021 7:48:00 PM

*winks....much love, james

Sarah Hales

Date: 11/12/2010 3:04:00 PM

lovelly x sarah

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 11/8/2010 2:03:00 AM

Now that you taught me the word,it sounds romantic,smile :).You re in my poem'to all the soupers:)

C.C Bloomsfield

Date: 11/7/2010 4:23:00 AM

Castles can be made of sand,but Castles can be made for a king and queen. .still figuring out :)intriguing poem. .Nice Sunday to you and little Noah!

Kim Hilliker

Date: 11/6/2010 7:39:00 PM

Nice and simple. Well done, James.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 11/6/2010 3:26:00 PM

Nice romantic write, James

James Peranteau

Date: 11/6/2010 3:24:00 PM

nope...you look up forecastle *smiles* much love, james