Laura Hay Poet Couplet

As Autumn's Breeze

22/8/16
As Autumn’s Breeze

As Autumn’s Breeze
Grasps the leaves

Tugging the last
Golden coat fast

Stripping branches
Winter catches

Jack Frost skating
Skirting, waiting

Blizzards of snow
Imminent show

Flakes take shape
Winter awakes

Crystals cocoon
Minus temp looms

As Autumn’s Breeze
Prepares to Freeze

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Tom Arnone September 6, 2016 at 8:22 PM Looks like the couplet might be your forte. Wonderful seasonal poem. :-) Laura Hay September 8, 2016 at 4:20 AM Thank you for your encouraging comments Tom, much appreciated, warm regards, Laura.

Andrea Dietrich August 30, 2016 at 3:20 PM Love this succinct style. It looks great on this poem Laura Hay August 30, 2016 at 5:43 PM Thanks again Andrea! Warm regards, Laura

Duke Beaufort August 25, 2016 at 6:01 PM You are spot on. You have a style of your own from what I can see. Really a pleasure to see this. Laura Hay August 26, 2016 at 4:57 AM Comments like yours are truly inspiring, thank you Duke! Warm regards, Laura.

Anne-Lise Andresen August 25, 2016 at 5:30 AM - Farewell to summer is always sad and winter is long and dark - A great poem, Laura - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Laura Hay August 25, 2016 at 5:44 AM Thank you Anne-Lise!! I know it seems harder to write about saying goodbye to Autumn when we are still hanging on to summer! Appreciate you stopping by, warm regards, Laura.

Andrea Dietrich August 24, 2016 at 12:11 AM hey, now that's what I call succinct, and using all the words very effectively. well done. Laura Hay August 24, 2016 at 6:10 AM Always appreciate your positive feedback Andrea! Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus August 23, 2016 at 5:40 PM I have truly enjoyed this lovely poem, Laura. Looks like your Scottish summer is nearing its end! Here the weather is still hot and as yet I can't bring myself to think of autumn! I am looking forward to at least another two months swimming! ~ Warm regards // paul Laura Hay August 24, 2016 at 6:09 AM Thank you as always Paul, its a sunny warm day today, there is a hint of Autumn in the morning and evening air but i'm hopefully summer will hold on a bit longer! Warm regards, Laura.

Gary Bateman August 22, 2016 at 3:06 PM Hello Laura, Thanks for your recent comment on the Demon poem co-write by me and my dear colleagues, Anne-Lise Andresen and Liam McDaid. I really like your Autumn Breeze couplet write here. The cogent nature of writes like this can make their message lasting and interesting to the reader. I enjoyed your write here. A "Seven"!! Great Work!! Cheers, Gary Laura Hay August 22, 2016 at 4:50 PM You're very welcome Gary, it was a 'thrill' to read! Thanks also for your kind review of my poem and for the generous rating too, much appreciated! Warm regards, Laura.

John Fleming August 22, 2016 at 6:51 AM Nicely contrived, Laura. I have read several Autumn poems over the last day or two on the "Soup"; seems like everyone feels that Autumn is going to be early this year...And I agree with them. A seven for your capable little poem...It certainly imparted an autumnal feeling towards me. My best regards! :) john Laura Hay August 22, 2016 at 4:48 PM Many thanks for your kind comments John. I guess being here in Scotland with our short lived summer i'm already thinking of Autumn and probably why i chose to write this for the contest. I'm glad you liked it! Warm regards, Laura.