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As Autumn's Breeze

22/8/16 As Autumn’s Breeze As Autumn’s Breeze Grasps the leaves Tugging the last Golden coat fast Stripping branches Winter catches Jack Frost skating Skirting, waiting Blizzards of snow Imminent show Flakes take shape Winter awakes Crystals cocoon Minus temp looms As Autumn’s Breeze Prepares to Freeze

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Tom Arnone

Date: 9/6/2016 8:22:00 PM

Looks like the couplet might be your forte. Wonderful seasonal poem. :-)

Laura Hay
Date: 9/8/2016 4:20:00 AM

Thank you for your encouraging comments Tom, much appreciated, warm regards, Laura.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/30/2016 3:20:00 PM

Love this succinct style. It looks great on this poem

Laura Hay
Date: 8/30/2016 5:43:00 PM

Thanks again Andrea! Warm regards, Laura

Duke Beaufort

Date: 8/25/2016 6:01:00 PM

You are spot on. You have a style of your own from what I can see. Really a pleasure to see this.

Laura Hay
Date: 8/26/2016 4:57:00 AM

Comments like yours are truly inspiring, thank you Duke! Warm regards, Laura.

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/25/2016 5:30:00 AM

- Farewell to summer is always sad and winter is long and dark - A great poem, Laura - Good luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Laura Hay
Date: 8/25/2016 5:44:00 AM

Thank you Anne-Lise!! I know it seems harder to write about saying goodbye to Autumn when we are still hanging on to summer! Appreciate you stopping by, warm regards, Laura.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/24/2016 12:11:00 AM

hey, now that's what I call succinct, and using all the words very effectively. well done.

Laura Hay
Date: 8/24/2016 6:10:00 AM

Always appreciate your positive feedback Andrea! Warm regards, Laura.

Paul Callus

Date: 8/23/2016 5:40:00 PM

I have truly enjoyed this lovely poem, Laura. Looks like your Scottish summer is nearing its end! Here the weather is still hot and as yet I can't bring myself to think of autumn! I am looking forward to at least another two months swimming! ~ Warm regards // paul

Laura Hay
Date: 8/24/2016 6:09:00 AM

Thank you as always Paul, its a sunny warm day today, there is a hint of Autumn in the morning and evening air but i'm hopefully summer will hold on a bit longer! Warm regards, Laura.

Gary Bateman

Date: 8/22/2016 3:06:00 PM

Hello Laura, Thanks for your recent comment on the Demon poem co-write by me and my dear colleagues, Anne-Lise Andresen and Liam McDaid. I really like your Autumn Breeze couplet write here. The cogent nature of writes like this can make their message lasting and interesting to the reader. I enjoyed your write here. A "Seven"!! Great Work!! Cheers, Gary

Laura Hay
Date: 8/22/2016 4:50:00 PM

You're very welcome Gary, it was a 'thrill' to read! Thanks also for your kind review of my poem and for the generous rating too, much appreciated! Warm regards, Laura.

John Fleming

Date: 8/22/2016 6:51:00 AM

Nicely contrived, Laura. I have read several Autumn poems over the last day or two on the "Soup"; seems like everyone feels that Autumn is going to be early this year...And I agree with them. A seven for your capable little poem...It certainly imparted an autumnal feeling towards me. My best regards! :) john

Laura Hay
Date: 8/22/2016 4:48:00 PM

Many thanks for your kind comments John. I guess being here in Scotland with our short lived summer i'm already thinking of Autumn and probably why i chose to write this for the contest. I'm glad you liked it! Warm regards, Laura.