Are You There God- For Contest

Thanks for seeing me, if you please
can I now get up off my knees?
Where do I start? I've made a list
forgive me for the one's I've missed.

Can we go back to '77
when you were in your cosy heaven
whilst down below I watched my Dad
struggle for breath, his lungs gone bad?

Ok, my life then I'll admit
held little faith for quite a bit
I  fought daily battles alone
relied not on the great unknown.

When finally he left us all
my heart gave out a silent call
that in some bright celestial light
he finally was now alright.

Is he?

Unaided, can he get along
clear lungs to breathe, give praise in song?
Dull eyes that sometimes shone in mirth
as clear as his first hour since birth?

Eighteen years fast forward now
my link with you rebuilt somehow
as by your rules I tried to live
the bond between us tentative

From ten commandments, maybe six
I got to obey- 'pick 'n mix'
The good stuff I could not resist
was sadly never on your list.

Was that why when I called you Lord
you never offered a reward?
When Mother's health went in decline
you punished all those
sins of mine?

And still that faith, though tattered strands
made me kneel down and clasp my hands
and thank you for final release
and pray that she now rests in peace.

Does she?

With father's hand does she now go
like that old black and white photo,
with wedding veil and beaming smile
down some cherub-lined wedding aisle?

And then my brother, six years on
happened so quickly, and was gone
we soldier on and do our best
while he sleeps in eternal rest.

Or does he?

Have you for him set by a place
where he plays his  Fender Jazz Bass?
Making up a group of four
with Lennon, Hendrix, Gary Moore?

Jamming sessions, laying down tracks
free from Cancer and heart attacks
playing to approving nods
from some of music history's Gods.

Sorry, Lord, I know there's only you,
really.

Anyway that's enough from me
you've sat and listened quietly
not judged me which I did expect
and one last thing, Lord-
am I next?

For contest 'Are you there God', sponsored by Silent One
13th October 2015
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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October 18, 2015 at 4:39 PM
Viv, this is a nice win. SKAT
Wigley Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 11:37 PM
Thanks, Skat, I'm switching back to 'humour mode now, methinks. Darker days at this time of year are enough for me, Viv x
Inman Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 1:45 PM
Very strong meaningful write. Questions with no real answers in our life time. Something we all deal with in our own way.
Wigley Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 11:38 PM
That's the nice thing about Poetry, don't you think, James? Very Cathartic. Regards, Viv
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October 17, 2015 at 10:32 AM
Your fondness for your family cannot be denied. You have a wonderful heart. All the experiences you have had have brought you to the place where you now are, so there is nothing wrong/bad you could have ever done to cause any grief. Such is life--a total mystery. We all just do the best we can. Your poetry is a wonderful gift to me and I thank you kindly, sir.
Laurie Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 6:54 PM
Absolutely great Viv... you ask the questions we all ask with great rhyme - Lindsay
Wigley Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 10:44 PM
Thanks, Lindsay, hope you're well. Regards, Viv
Y. Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 7:15 AM
Viv, this is a well written piece. You have asked that we all have thought about. Congratulations on your winning write it was well deserved :') Alexis 7
A. Sharma Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 1:41 AM
Indded a superb write n win Viv! Big congrats on ur awesome win!
Wigley Avatar
October 18, 2015 at 11:41 PM
Cheers, Dr Upma, thanks for stopping by. Viv x
Vaso Avatar
October 15, 2015 at 11:12 PM
That Vig, is a masterpiece from top to bottom, I just loved how you summed up how we all think and struggle over the years, and said so in such an eloquent way! A7 all the way!
Wigley Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 1:03 AM
Thanks Arthur, yes I must have a go at the childlike unquestioning acceptance tactic. Regards, Viv
Tor Avatar
October 15, 2015 at 10:56 PM
Viv nice win my friend.!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Wigley Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 1:04 AM
Thanks Michael, one of the Silent One's thoughtful subjects for a contest, guaranteed to produce a rich harvest. Regards, Viv
Allison Avatar
October 15, 2015 at 4:12 PM
reality tinged with humour - so many questions and few answers - congrats on your win Mr Viv:-) hugs jan xx
Wigley Avatar
October 16, 2015 at 1:05 AM
Thanks Jan, and well done you, too. Hope you're ticketty-boo. Viv x
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October 13, 2015 at 12:58 AM
This is a jolly good poem a bit of serious and a bit of fun mixed into a really neat blend. Good luck in the contest
Wigley Avatar
October 13, 2015 at 7:14 AM
Thanks Mark, to be honest, on meeting my maker I think I'd be a little star struck to say the least. Many thanks for dropping by. regards, Viv
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