Anxiety

anxious pulse pounds in throat stomach flutters skin crawls metal taste on tongue, a pale pall heartbreak heart break hands wrung red, raw cancerous lips, chewed sore nails ripped from their beds bleeding, worn anxious

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Jasmine Turner

Date: 4/25/2011 7:05:00 PM

i like it but it does't seem to have anything to do with anxiety

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/19/2011 5:18:00 AM

Congratulations Debbie on your well deserved win in Catie's contest "Traditional Cinquain". Love, Carol

Elaine George

Date: 4/18/2011 3:36:00 PM

Sensational! Deb. So worthy of its First Place Win. Many congrats. Love, Lainie

Matthew Anish

Date: 4/17/2011 7:22:00 PM

Not a pleasent poem but one which has a lot of "power". Hope your health is good. I know what it means to have a serious illness. Peace & blessings Matthew Anish

Brenda Atry

Date: 4/17/2011 4:03:00 PM

The poem comes to life in between the spaces. Brilliant use of a pause. Congrats. Brenda Atry

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/17/2011 5:35:00 AM

Congrtulation on the first place win in the contest, Debbie

Francine Roberts

Date: 4/16/2011 8:49:00 PM

congrats on your first place win with this extraordinary write

Charles Henderson

Date: 4/16/2011 2:20:00 PM

hey, way to go in Catie's contest. Reading your poem. Ready to say "get a grip". You really said a lot in so few words. Charles

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/16/2011 2:07:00 PM

WAY to GO, DEbs, Congratulations.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 4/16/2011 1:26:00 PM

Congrats Debbie on your first place win in this contest luv.. great piece ..enjoy your top spot sweets...

Kash Poet

Date: 4/16/2011 1:06:00 PM

Many congratulations Debbie on your 1st place win with this awesome Cinquain---kashinath

Jack Horne

Date: 4/16/2011 1:02:00 PM

Many congrats on getting the number one spot : )

Carrie Richards

Date: 4/16/2011 11:35:00 AM

Yep....a well chosen top notch poem!! Kuddos for Number 1 !!!

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/15/2011 10:10:00 AM

One write best about what one understands through experience [sigh].

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 4/14/2011 10:17:00 PM

AMAZING! This was what I wanted to read tonight! Call me a freak, but the pain in poetry is like a sudden rush to me. ~JSLambert

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 4/14/2011 2:19:00 PM

This is just what anxiety feels like, Deb. You did a great job with this cinquain and I wish you success in the contest. Love, Carolyn

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 4/14/2011 1:50:00 PM

This describes the anxious moments we all get at one time or another. The world seems to live in a constant state of anxiety and I can see my stomach turning over and my skin crawling at times but stopped biting my nails years ago. ha ha. love phyl

Sara Kendrick

Date: 4/14/2011 1:45:00 PM

That would be bad to be that anxious about life..Very descriptive and expressive..Soup mail in a few minutes.Sara

Canny Amah

Date: 4/14/2011 11:59:00 AM

... you knifed the thought at the modern world ... don't we all feel that way one day or the other? to pretend one hadn't ... is the falsehood to the anxiety of the generation ... the world itself has become anxious ... everywhere ... anxious moments ... anxious peoples ... anxious events ... Ma, wel-write!!! Canny

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/14/2011 8:59:00 AM

One of your best my friend. Hope you aren't feeling this way now or anytime in your life Debbie. Thank you for the kind comments on my writing. Love, Carol

Kash Poet

Date: 4/14/2011 12:43:00 AM

Anxious moments described very effectively here.Best wishes---kashinath

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 4/13/2011 10:29:00 PM

interesting little line breaks and this gets across well the feelings of anxiety, Debs!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 4/13/2011 4:35:00 PM

Thanks for the heads up on Sunlight. Strange that my poem has reappeared in the contest entry/ God, Ghost or Love at work? hahahahah, Debbie

Jack Horne

Date: 4/13/2011 2:42:00 PM

Wow, this is a powerful poem, Debbie