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Another One Down

Another One Down
And another one bites the dust. 

Marriage. 
My friend, my neighbor, the lady next door, 
Rampant miscalculations of being too nice, 
two people that complain, endlessly.

She does not do enough. 
I have not had “any” in weeks. 
I work all the time. 
What do I show for it?
When do I get my due?
These are the words, 
That he would spew. 

She did the dishes, 
She worked two jobs, 
She got the kids to school, 
What a fool…
She made dinners, 
and kept appointments, 
made small talk with your mom, 
who hates her. 

Yet… She does (did) not do enough. 
I wanted, need(ed) more. 
I wanted my feet rubbed, twice each night. 
I wanted someone to bring my dinner in the chair. 
When my plate is empty, I want more…
I want her to fill it, 
and every need, 
that I can think of, 
until, 
I feel… 
loved,
enough.

I am “first” not last, I am the husband. 
I am the King of everything. 
I sit alone in my new apartment. 
“Why… is she mad at me?”




Red roses bleed...you just can not see it...
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Jullion Avatar
May 25, 2023 at 2:12 PM
Very nice! Good insight well spoken. Thank you for posting.
Iversen  Avatar
February 11, 2020 at 5:06 PM
That troglodyte would not like my wife,yuk,yuk. Great write!
Gauthier Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 9:38 AM
Congrats on your POTD. All that emotion is very relatable. Many of us have been through this familiar scenario of being taken for granted.
Foster Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 10:44 AM
We all do that to our partners. We need a serious wake up. We are in this together or the whole puzzle falls into the box... Ty for stopping by... and your kind comments. Have a lovely day... Ann
Rodrigues Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 6:42 AM
Yes, one must tend to the fire. Never noticing what one does, instead roaring for more, more, more. That’s when you finally hit the floor. Congratulations on your apt depiction of the complicated intricacies of marriage and what ends it.
Foster Avatar
November 18, 2019 at 10:43 AM
Thank you friend, but by no means is this the apt depiction... or at least I pray it is not... but it is probably the most accurate of late. God give you a lovely day... full of nice surprises, and fun remembrances. Ann
One Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 7:08 AM
A great choice for potd... Congrats
Foster Avatar
November 16, 2019 at 11:33 AM
Thank you... a little sad. I wish it was a happy poem... but it is not... it is a common issue we need help ... serious... help... with... Have a lovely day. Ann
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November 12, 2019 at 12:12 PM
Ann a fantastic poem which husbands and partners should read and be aware of - stumbling blocks that can be averted or avoided! I love your write and it very deservedly got POTD. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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November 16, 2019 at 11:32 AM
thank you dear friend... blessings on your day... Ann
Kitchin Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 8:27 PM
Ann, congratulations on POTD , a fabulous write!
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:17 PM
Thank you for stopping by. Ty so much... have the very nicest day. Ann
Laurie Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 6:39 PM
G'day Ann … life in the suburbs, but of course when the thinking is 'king', then that starts the ball rolling. I reckon I've seen this situation too many times - great ballad Ann - Lindsay
Nicole Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 4:25 PM
When a man or woman thinks this way!!! I am the King or Queen!!! There will always be trouble. Being selfish, is the wrong attitude to have, in a marriage. Congratulations Ann, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 4:34 PM
Thank you friend. I so thrilled with the honor. Have the very nicest day. Ann
Sands Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 11:00 AM
Congratulations for POTD :)
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 11:20 AM
Still in shock... sipping my coffee... starring at the screen... What a nice morning... thank you friends... all... Ann
Robinson Jr. Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:59 AM
Too cool ballad, Ann! Kudos on POTD! Love and smiles and smiles of joy always.
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 11:19 AM
I wish it was not this topic... yet... it is a fierce topic to attack... lost of emotions... on both sides... ty for stopping by ... Blessings on your day friend. Ann
La France Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 8:49 AM
Ann, great poem and congratulations on your POTD, enjoy the honor !
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:45 AM
Shock... oh yes... and then... wowowowow... I am thrilled. Thank you friend. God Bless your day with new surprises as well... all the time. Ann
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November 11, 2019 at 8:15 AM
A raucous write Ann!!!! Congratulations on POTD! Have a fabulous day :))) xomo!
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:44 AM
Wow. I was shocked this morning. What a nice surprise. Thank you friend for stopping by and the kind comments. Have the very brightest day... Love your stuff! Hugs. Ann
Ravidas Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 7:52 AM
Marriage is a centripetal rotation around the center of gravity where neither he nor she is the center of gravity. Congrats on POTD, Ann)
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:43 AM
That is so very true. That should be in the quotes... Excellent. Thank you for stopping by and the kindest comments. Blessings to your day... always... Ann
Trifiatis Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 7:23 AM
What a fine story! No wonder is honored as POTD dear, Ann. Congratulations!
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:41 AM
I am so excited. It is an honor indeed. Thank all for the support. You and all on this site, have been so kind indeed. Have the very nicest day. Ann
Michael Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 6:02 AM
Congratulations Ann on POTD... Express it like it is....All the Best
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:40 AM
I am so thrilled. Thank you friend. God Bless. Ann
Aristy Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 5:11 AM
Powerful in beauty and truth, congratulations Curtis!
Foster Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 9:40 AM
OMG POTD...??? WOW... Thank you so much... for your kind comments. God Bless you. Ann
One Avatar
November 10, 2019 at 1:24 PM
Hmmmm... Now there is a saying there are always three sides to a story.. especially when it comes to relationships and marriage... Great poem Ann..
One Avatar
November 11, 2019 at 7:11 AM
Yes Tommy, spot on!
Krutsinger Avatar
November 10, 2019 at 3:39 AM
This is a darling poem that shows what happens when you do not give your husband the same attention you give to everyone else because you are EXHAUSTED. What a selfish man!
Foster Avatar
November 10, 2019 at 10:05 AM
The get "used" to being treated well, then don't realize they are being "treate" well... lol... Ann
Somadas Avatar
November 9, 2019 at 11:20 PM
Feminism?? But the message is clear.. Husbands beware..
Foster Avatar
November 10, 2019 at 10:10 AM
No... just tired of slavery... people forget and take each other for granted, then wonder what happens to their lives. Time is measured. Spend it where you want because you want to, and with who. It should be treasured, not nagged or yelled at. Not Feminism, fairness... Ann
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