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Another Old Haiku

Night's blackness obscures
our very limited view.
Does dawn surprise us?

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Karen Croft

July 2, 2024 at 3:40 PM

Nice haiku!

Jancarl Campi

February 18, 2012 at 12:25 AM

An interesting haiku. Give the reader words to make one think. Take care, Jancarl I understand it all.

Charles Henderson

February 17, 2012 at 9:39 PM

Lines one and two are very nice but drop the caps and punc. You actually have a double negative I just notice i lines 1 and 2. If you obscure a limited view you would actually make the view better. Just a thought. You may like to reword. I like the premis. Line three is intellectualizing, when you should be describing what the dawn IS doing. Or rather what is happening as dawn approaches.