Anorexic & Obese

Grass Calls for
 More and more
And I water and water.
The Obese: Expires

Hitherto, that grass
Spikingly Winds up by the"Plop, Plop"
Snubbing over the drops.
And Passes.

The Olive Grass
Gawking incessantly out at the flecked Rays
I witness them dance
They post me the murmuring messages

Of the Wind.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2009

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Loveless Avatar
June 8, 2009 at 10:05 AM
Awesome Visuals.
Langston-Moran Avatar
June 4, 2009 at 10:11 AM
Saidah...your metaphors are magnificent..."The Olive Grass"..I am reading all your poetry today. You are a POET!! Patricia
Megens Avatar
May 27, 2009 at 8:41 AM
I LOVE THE WAY YOU GRABBED THE IMAGERY AND PORTRAYED A STORY FOR US TO READ YOU ARE A NEAT POET AND I LIKE YOUR STYLE
Cantu Avatar
May 26, 2009 at 1:44 PM
@.@ great one, I love onomatopeyas (don't know if that's the correct word in English jojjo); the images, I don't know if your poem works in several layers or you like using very diverse images, however they work, oh yeah!! thanks for sharing bye bye =D and by the way, I heard the song jojjo it is nice =) yet I think I am more like mmm have you ever heard Interstellar Overdrive, from Pink Floyd? Listen if you want to, jojojo it turns interesting from minute 2 =) bye bye
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