Bukang Liwayway Poet Rhyme

Angel the Dreamer

My name is Angel the dreamer
                                            I’m still inside my beloved mother
                                  Three months to be exact
                        I’m so happy it’s the fact

              Mommy and Daddy love me
              For the whole world to see
              Because they plan my future
              That’s what I heard not sure

                         I can feel they are glad and excited
                                   To go to the doctor and be consulted
                                             Feels good to know they care
                                                       But surprises to see the doctor’s stare

                                                       With the instruments he hold
                                             I’m afraid and my body feels so cold
                                   Then my mother began to cry
                         I don’t know the reason why

             Suddenly I feel my body is in deep pain
             Ouch!! ahhhhh!! It hurts, what happen?
             Where are you Mommy? I am afraid!
             Please take care of me as what you said

                       Now I will not be born after all
                                 Shattered dreams, bless my soul
                                           Goodbye to all, its time for me to fly 
                                                      Up in the world of nowhere above the sky


10/8/12
For Scribe Marlon Linton's "Unborn Babies Dream" Contest
2nd Place Winner
By: Maria Paz Samelo

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Len Gasun October 17, 2012 at 7:16 PM MY HEARTY CONGRATULATION MY DEAR FRIEND, MARY!! I AM SO EXTREMELY HAPPY AND SO PROUD OF YOU! love, Norie

Carol Sunshine Brown October 16, 2012 at 12:35 PM Congratulations on your win in the "Unborn Babies Dream" contest Maria. Love, Carol

Dr Hitendra Mehta October 15, 2012 at 11:58 AM Many congrats Maria on winning the contest, "Unborn babies dream" by Linton. Best wishes - Hitendra Mehta

Debbie Guzzi October 15, 2012 at 11:12 AM Congrad's on your winning write. Light & Love Bukang Liwayway October 15, 2012 at 11:49 AM thanks friend Deb :)

Joseph May October 15, 2012 at 4:56 AM congrats on your win with this melancholy write Maria Bukang Liwayway October 15, 2012 at 8:47 AM thanks friend Joseph May :)

Lee Ramage October 14, 2012 at 7:47 PM Maria, congratulations on your win. Lee Bukang Liwayway October 14, 2012 at 9:28 PM thanks Lee, congrats to you too :)

Poet Destroyer A October 14, 2012 at 7:32 PM MARIA, congratulations with your deep and wonderful win in THE SCRIBE'S "Unborn Babies Dream" contest. Have yourself a good night~ PD Bukang Liwayway October 14, 2012 at 9:25 PM thanks PD :) congrats to you too :)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart October 14, 2012 at 4:12 PM CONGRATS MARIA ON AN ELEGANT WRITE AND WIN LUV .. Bukang Liwayway October 14, 2012 at 9:12 PM thanks friend Linda Marie :) congrats to you too

Andrea Dietrich October 13, 2012 at 1:40 AM wow, what a creative piece this is. REally like how you did your entry. Awesome. Bukang Liwayway October 14, 2012 at 9:09 PM thanks friend Andrea :) good day!

Justin Bordner October 10, 2012 at 11:35 PM This emotional write encompasses the rebirth odyssey very well Maria - the last two line communicate something fatal, but also immortal and redeeming for this lost corporeal opportunity - the tragic transition really made me feel somber - J.A.B. % Bukang Liwayway October 10, 2012 at 11:44 PM i know how you feel friend Justin..I just remember the homily of our Priest last sunday about some information on Abortion worldwide so I wrote this poem...

Len Gasun October 9, 2012 at 1:54 AM Wow!! This is awesome and delightful my friend! i love it and I love the form. You're really creative! Good luck in the contest! warm hugs:) Leonora Bukang Liwayway October 9, 2012 at 2:50 AM thanks dear Leonora...have a nice day always!!

Robert Pettit October 7, 2012 at 10:55 PM The configuration of your lines actually makes this easier to read. Everything here is very descriptive. Bukang Liwayway October 9, 2012 at 2:49 AM thanks Robert for your comment

Debbie Duncan October 7, 2012 at 4:37 PM great write you got here Maria,,,, I know what it feels like to have miscarriages,

Joann Grisetti October 7, 2012 at 2:43 PM Moving poem. I like the way you staggered the lines to add to the impact of the words. Bukang Liwayway October 7, 2012 at 10:19 PM thanks friend Joan..have a nice day!

Anne-Lise Andresen October 7, 2012 at 12:10 PM Your mother will always take care of you little angel - even in heaven - Luck in contest !!!! Very sweet and loving poem Maria - oxox love Anne-Lise :) Bukang Liwayway October 7, 2012 at 12:18 PM thank you so much my dear friend Anne Lise...have a blessed day always!!

Jack Horne October 7, 2012 at 12:03 PM very moving write, my friend. Congrats on your wins : ) Bukang Liwayway October 7, 2012 at 12:17 PM thanks friend Jack...not yet a winner..still hoping (^_^)

Michael J. Falotico October 7, 2012 at 11:34 AM Beautiful form and display here my friend. Michael Bukang Liwayway October 7, 2012 at 12:16 PM thanks friend Michael...good day!!