And So It Ends

Self's true calling candidly bared,
frisson so sweet as two souls paired.
Ardent vows so fondly prepared,
'fore gathered kin, pure love declared.
          Convinced myself you deeply cared,
          words and deeds, ardour implicit.
          Frisson so sweet as two souls paired,
          adoration was explicit.

Have endured perpetual Hell,
savour timbre of fling's death knell.
Entombed within accursed cell,
reduced to lifeless, hollow, shell.
          Nostalgic urge obliged to quell,
          break the curse of pain infernal.
          Savour timbre of fling's death knell,
          this day henceforth, hope's eternal.

Transition 'tween two states still baffles; scattered memories all that survive.

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8 syllables per line (except for the final line) - checked with howmanysyllables.com
A-A-A-A-A-B-A-B scheme as per contest rules

5 November 2017

For the "Rhyme Time II" contest, sponsored by Laura Loo.
(1st Place)

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Date: 11/25/2017 12:57:00 PM
Much to you sir, brilliant write and read. Pleasures of joy engages my mind after reading each and every line. Great!! Write on!!! ---James
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John Michaels
Date: 11/27/2017 2:09:00 PM
Thanks for the great comments, James. Am pleased you enjoyed it. Regards, John.
Date: 11/25/2017 7:26:00 AM
awesome poem dear John! thank you and congrats on your top placement :)
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 8:58:00 AM
Thank you for running the contest - and for my placement!!! All the best, John.
Date: 11/24/2017 9:22:00 PM
Lovely, John! Congrats!
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 8:58:00 AM
Thanks for the kind comments, Kim. Regards, John.
Date: 11/24/2017 8:21:00 PM
John, congratulations on your win with this beautifully written poem. Excellent!
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 8:57:00 AM
Thank you, Eve, for the kind comments. All the best, John.
Date: 11/22/2017 5:19:00 PM
Great contrast in the two stanzas and I love the final line ... and memories can be the only thing that is left.:-) Many congratulations on your win John:-) hugs Jan xx
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 8:55:00 AM
Thanks very much, Jan! Glad you liked it! Regards, John.
Date: 11/22/2017 4:14:00 PM
Wonderful write, John, I love your phrasing and word usage, and such exquisite rhythm ... enjoyed it very much! Congrats on your win! :-)
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 8:52:00 AM
That means so much coming from you, Greg! Thanks so much for your kind comments. All the best, John.
Date: 11/18/2017 7:14:00 PM
Wow, what a captivating write John. Beautifully expressing love's bliss and blistering pain. A very tough rhyme scheme that you handle with grace and poetic style, and your final line is amazing! Excellent and enjoyed my friend!
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John Michaels
Date: 11/25/2017 8:50:00 AM
Thank you for the wonderful comments, Susan - greatly appreciated! All the best, John.
Date: 11/7/2017 1:20:00 PM
Love can be a tricky business, John...taking one from heaven to hell! Your two superbly tackled stanzas ably express this; you make this rhyme scheme look easy, too! Regards // paul
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John Michaels
Date: 11/15/2017 2:16:00 PM
Thank you for your very kind comments, Paul... much appreciated! All the best, John.
Date: 11/6/2017 6:08:00 AM
I hope this is just fiction, John, well written contrast between the two stanzas, though sad..
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John Michaels
Date: 11/6/2017 1:39:00 PM
Hi Jo. Thanks for your kind and sensitive comments. Some of my poems are plucked from my imagination, whilst others are very much rooted in reality. I try to let the reader determine which is which... Kind regards, John.
Date: 11/5/2017 6:57:00 AM
It's tragic that a love, once so deep, can become such a painful wound. Well done, John.
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John Michaels
Date: 11/5/2017 12:06:00 PM
Thanks so much for your sensitive comments, Lin. Kind regards, John.
Date: 11/5/2017 4:44:00 AM
Very powerful John, yet it can play out like that with situations in life to be very painful for some. Take care. Good luck in the contest. :)
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John Michaels
Date: 11/5/2017 5:35:00 AM
Thank you for your kind and supportive comments, Heid! All the best, John.
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