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Ancient God

A vision held my dream hostage.... here let me better explain........ breathtaking sparklingly Carmel eyes entered on a moon's silvery beam piercing thru my soul disturbing my lovely dream Upon looking up i gazed to see; dark glistening coal black ringlets framing dimpled cheeks, soft sweet pale rose colored lips with chiseled chin to leave me just standing as I grin 'Twas a true god's face to sit atop buffed wide shoulder torso; Adonis style and waist so slim it holds promise of many sleepless nights.... Thighs so thick could make one choke, muscular calves down to his feet,being more perfect than mine; no mere mortal was this, Twas a gift from gods divine What goddess let you go When he left surely she cried "Thy mustn't go, please no!" An outstretched hand reached for mine pulling me ever close Melting unto him I became submissive Whilst his vibrating touch left me to feel quite delicous Awe struck whilst I gazed into his eyes Ancient Gods touch.... errrrr wait I just realize Alas I am but Modern woman our words don't even mix....... he then leaned in whispering into my ear "T'would be an easy fix!"

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Date: 7/28/2020 10:58:00 AM
Ah! A powerful muse of tender emotions crafted in woven strands of deep thoughts Brenda. Your words enchant me. Congratulations on your win! Blessings and love :)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 7/28/2020 11:12:00 AM
You are too kind thank you!:)
Date: 7/25/2020 3:39:00 PM
Such indulgence, Brenda, intimately resonates word by word of being imagined, and my compliments for your win -- Aloha~@William
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 7/25/2020 5:03:00 PM
William thank you so very much appreciated!;)
Date: 7/25/2020 2:29:00 PM
Awesome write Brenda. Congrats.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 7/25/2020 5:02:00 PM
Jeanne thank you:)
Date: 7/25/2020 11:15:00 AM
What a delicious, romantic poem, Brenda! Like Andrea before me, the ending is delightful! Congratulations!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 7/25/2020 5:02:00 PM
Sam thank you so very much!;) you truly are far too kind!:)
Date: 12/30/2019 4:51:00 PM
ha. That ending was SO delightful. I actually met one of these gods that I call Adonis. I was 17 and i have never again encountered such a beautiful experience as i did the night with my Adonis. (I have written several times about him here!) Yours was almost identical to mine minus the muscular thighs!!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/31/2019 5:27:00 PM
Well the thick thighs added a little something to it I think! I will have to read about your Adonis!;)
Date: 12/30/2019 4:51:00 PM
I see this garnered a win. Big Congrats!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/31/2019 5:26:00 PM
Haha thank you so much Andrea!;)
Date: 12/27/2019 11:59:00 PM
I guess I was write! I mean Right! Congratulations on first place!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/28/2019 1:57:00 AM
Thank you Caren!;)
Date: 12/22/2019 10:07:00 AM
Congrats Brenda on your first place win!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/22/2019 3:11:00 PM
LJ thank you so very much!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 10:44:00 PM
wonderful penning Brenda, congrats on your top win :)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 10:46:00 PM
Thanks so much sandy! I see you placed too! Loved the poem!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 9:52:00 PM
Congrats on your win! Great descriptions!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 10:15:00 PM
Thank you so much!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 9:49:00 AM
Congratulations are in order I see -- very well done, Poetess! You certainly are a very accomplished competition writer...it is good to note that you are rightfully gaining more and more recognition as a capable and creative poet -- and rightfully so! Lots of affection. :) john
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 10:11:00 AM
John thank you so very much! I always love your comments you are a boost to the ego too! Lol! Lots of affection!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 9:31:00 AM
Your dreams takes you to sensuous realms Brenda, Congrats on your top win..
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 9:41:00 AM
Thank you joseph! As congrats on yours!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 7:51:00 AM
BIG congrats on your first place Brenda!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 8:10:00 AM
Vijay thank you so much!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 4:21:00 AM
Sincere congratulations on your win in Sir Brian's contest, Brenda - best wishes and blessings to you and yours for a Merry Christmas! Keep up the great work, my friend! :o) <3
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 4:29:00 AM
Ahh thank you Gregory and happy holidays to you and yours! May this holiday be blessed!;)
Date: 12/21/2019 4:02:00 AM
Congrats on your winning poem Brenda
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/21/2019 4:28:00 AM
Thank you Gregory!;)
Date: 12/20/2019 11:22:00 AM
This is amazing, a highly erotic write full of passion and excitement.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 11:24:00 AM
Thank you ML!;)
Date: 12/19/2019 8:57:00 PM
I think your erotic write was exactly what the contest was hoping to acquire!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:36:00 AM
Lol I'm not too sure of that Caren but thank you so much!;)
Date: 12/19/2019 8:48:00 PM
Brenda so beautifully written with such passion!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:35:00 AM
Dear heart thank you!;)
Date: 12/19/2019 10:15:00 AM
So much sensuality bundled in this elegantly written poem, Bre. C! The ink eroticism of this sultry poem strokes the heart w/velvety desires: Melting unto him I became submissive. Whilst his vibrating touch left me to feel quite delicious. Passionate poetry par excellence! LAMBLA! Love and more blessed love always!!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:35:00 AM
LAMBLA Freddie! Thank you so much!;)
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Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 12/19/2019 10:18:00 AM
This is my first usage of this loving salutation, Brenda. LAMBLA, my dear friend.
Date: 12/18/2019 2:01:00 PM
Did this Adonis at least mix you a ilttle nectar of the gods?!... Fun one, as opposed to 'tragic.' At least I thought so. Cheers, Gershon
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:34:00 AM
Lmao! Well Gershon their words wouldn't!;) thank you my friend!;)
Date: 12/18/2019 9:52:00 AM
Wow, well written Brenda, love the last line, looking forward to part two. Tom.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:33:00 AM
Thank you so much Tom! Part 2? Lol well that may be awhile!;)
Date: 12/18/2019 8:38:00 AM
You have achieved and exceeded your goal. A vividly discriptive piece. Hugs Rick.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:33:00 AM
Wow thx rick I appreciate that!;)
Date: 12/18/2019 8:24:00 AM
Very impelling. you nailed the head pretty firmly. Thanks for sharing
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/20/2019 5:32:00 AM
Thank you Gregory!;)

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