Brenda Chiri Poet Rhyme

Ancient God

A vision held my 
dream hostage....
here let me better explain........

breathtaking sparklingly 
Carmel eyes entered on a 
moon's silvery beam
piercing thru my soul 
disturbing my lovely dream
Upon looking up i gazed to see; 
dark glistening coal 
black ringlets framing 
dimpled cheeks, 
soft sweet pale rose 
colored lips with chiseled chin
to leave me just 
standing as I grin

'Twas a true god's face 
to sit atop buffed wide 
shoulder torso; 
Adonis style and 
waist so slim it holds promise 
of many sleepless nights....
Thighs so thick could 
make one choke, muscular 
calves down to his feet,being 
more perfect than mine; 
no mere mortal was this, 
Twas a gift from gods divine 

What goddess let you go 
When he left surely she cried
"Thy mustn't go, please no!"
An outstretched hand reached 
for mine pulling me ever close

Melting unto him I became submissive
Whilst his vibrating touch 
left me to feel quite delicous
Awe struck whilst I gazed 
into his eyes 
Ancient Gods touch....
errrrr wait I just realize

Alas I am but Modern woman 
our words don't even mix.......
he then leaned in whispering into my ear
 "T'would be an easy fix!"

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Aditi Mishra July 28, 2020 at 10:58 AM Ah! A powerful muse of tender emotions crafted in woven strands of deep thoughts Brenda. Your words enchant me. Congratulations on your win! Blessings and love :) Brenda Chiri July 28, 2020 at 11:12 AM You are too kind thank you!:)

William Kelii Kekaula July 25, 2020 at 3:39 PM Such indulgence, Brenda, intimately resonates word by word of being imagined, and my compliments for your win -- Aloha~@William Brenda Chiri July 25, 2020 at 5:03 PM William thank you so very much appreciated!;)

Jeanne Mcgee July 25, 2020 at 2:29 PM Awesome write Brenda. Congrats. Brenda Chiri July 25, 2020 at 5:02 PM Jeanne thank you:)

Sam Kauffman July 25, 2020 at 11:15 AM What a delicious, romantic poem, Brenda! Like Andrea before me, the ending is delightful! Congratulations! Brenda Chiri July 25, 2020 at 5:02 PM Sam thank you so very much!;) you truly are far too kind!:)

Andrea Dietrich December 30, 2019 at 4:51 PM I see this garnered a win. Big Congrats! Brenda Chiri December 31, 2019 at 5:26 PM Haha thank you so much Andrea!;)

Andrea Dietrich December 30, 2019 at 4:51 PM ha. That ending was SO delightful. I actually met one of these gods that I call Adonis. I was 17 and i have never again encountered such a beautiful experience as i did the night with my Adonis. (I have written several times about him here!) Yours was almost identical to mine minus the muscular thighs!! Brenda Chiri December 31, 2019 at 5:27 PM Well the thick thighs added a little something to it I think! I will have to read about your Adonis!;)

Caren Krutsinger December 27, 2019 at 11:59 PM I guess I was write! I mean Right! Congratulations on first place! Brenda Chiri December 28, 2019 at 1:57 AM Thank you Caren!;)

L. J. Carber December 22, 2019 at 10:07 AM Congrats Brenda on your first place win! Brenda Chiri December 22, 2019 at 3:11 PM LJ thank you so very much!;)

Sandra Adams December 21, 2019 at 10:44 PM wonderful penning Brenda, congrats on your top win :) Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 10:46 PM Thanks so much sandy! I see you placed too! Loved the poem!;)

Juliet Ligon December 21, 2019 at 9:52 PM Congrats on your win! Great descriptions! Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 10:15 PM Thank you so much!;)

John Fleming December 21, 2019 at 9:49 AM Congratulations are in order I see -- very well done, Poetess! You certainly are a very accomplished competition writer...it is good to note that you are rightfully gaining more and more recognition as a capable and creative poet -- and rightfully so! Lots of affection. :) john Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 10:11 AM John thank you so very much! I always love your comments you are a boost to the ego too! Lol! Lots of affection!;)

Joseph May December 21, 2019 at 9:31 AM Your dreams takes you to sensuous realms Brenda, Congrats on your top win.. Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 9:41 AM Thank you joseph! As congrats on yours!;)

Vijay Pandit December 21, 2019 at 7:51 AM BIG congrats on your first place Brenda! Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 8:10 AM Vijay thank you so much!;)

Gregory Richard Barden December 21, 2019 at 4:21 AM Sincere congratulations on your win in Sir Brian's contest, Brenda - best wishes and blessings to you and yours for a Merry Christmas! Keep up the great work, my friend! :o) <3 Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 4:29 AM Ahh thank you Gregory and happy holidays to you and yours! May this holiday be blessed!;)

Na Na December 21, 2019 at 4:02 AM Congrats on your winning poem Brenda Brenda Chiri December 21, 2019 at 4:28 AM Thank you Gregory!;)

M. L. Kiser December 20, 2019 at 11:22 AM This is amazing, a highly erotic write full of passion and excitement. Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 11:24 AM Thank you ML!;)

Caren Krutsinger December 19, 2019 at 8:57 PM I think your erotic write was exactly what the contest was hoping to acquire! Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:36 AM Lol I'm not too sure of that Caren but thank you so much!;)

Constance La France December 19, 2019 at 8:48 PM Brenda so beautifully written with such passion! Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:35 AM Dear heart thank you!;)

Freddie Robinson Jr. December 19, 2019 at 10:15 AM So much sensuality bundled in this elegantly written poem, Bre. C! The ink eroticism of this sultry poem strokes the heart w/velvety desires: Melting unto him I became submissive. Whilst his vibrating touch left me to feel quite delicious. Passionate poetry par excellence! LAMBLA! Love and more blessed love always!! Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:35 AM LAMBLA Freddie! Thank you so much!;) Freddie Robinson Jr. December 19, 2019 at 10:18 AM This is my first usage of this loving salutation, Brenda. LAMBLA, my dear friend.

Gershon Wolf December 18, 2019 at 2:01 PM Did this Adonis at least mix you a ilttle nectar of the gods?!... Fun one, as opposed to 'tragic.' At least I thought so. Cheers, Gershon Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:34 AM Lmao! Well Gershon their words wouldn't!;) thank you my friend!;)

Tom Cunningham December 18, 2019 at 9:52 AM Wow, well written Brenda, love the last line, looking forward to part two. Tom. Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:33 AM Thank you so much Tom! Part 2? Lol well that may be awhile!;)

Richard Lamoureux December 18, 2019 at 8:38 AM You have achieved and exceeded your goal. A vividly discriptive piece. Hugs Rick. Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:33 AM Wow thx rick I appreciate that!;)

Na Na December 18, 2019 at 8:24 AM Very impelling. you nailed the head pretty firmly. Thanks for sharing Brenda Chiri December 20, 2019 at 5:32 AM Thank you Gregory!;)