An Unnamed Bird

A
large bird
is sitting
on my shoulders.
It likes to lean left,
sometimes pressing its claws,
which burn like small pricks of heat,
all across my back. I must learn
the name of this burdening creature,
and most importantly. . .  how to kill it.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2011

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Maverick Avatar
July 10, 2011 at 11:10 PM
I (feel for you i really do) i will make it a teredactyl in a write Andrea, thereby consigning it to history...you're doing well as always getting write to the point..all the best.
Horne Avatar
June 28, 2011 at 6:44 AM
Intriguing write. You'd be in trouble with the RSPB here, LOL
Babcock Avatar
June 27, 2011 at 8:50 AM
I think Robert must have had the same bird on his shoulder. How is it doing? I hope the pain is not to bad. Love the poems very imaginative. love phyl
Babcock Avatar
June 27, 2011 at 8:50 AM
I think Robert must have had the same bird on his shoulder. How is it doing? I hope the pain is not to bad. Love the poems very imaginative. love phyl
Sweetheart Avatar
June 26, 2011 at 5:36 PM
wow ..impressive piece Andrea.. clever and creative .. like a monkey on your back a bird on your shoulders can be just as frightening and cumbersome luv..shake it off..oh..
Guzzi Avatar
June 26, 2011 at 2:55 PM
so true nerve pain can feel just like this! Hope you feel better! Light & Love
Falotico Avatar
June 26, 2011 at 7:38 AM
Many meanings pour from this write... I guess everyone will have there own vision of it... Profound and unique....with luv Michael
Ball Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 5:43 PM
Hmmmm Sometimes this bird is referred to as a "monkey", either way you look at him though bird or monkey he is a pain to deal with. Before we can kill it though we have to find out what his name is. The ability to identify the bird is the first step toward being free of it. Great job here my friend. God Bless, JB
Neels Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 12:47 PM
this one is quite intriguing Andrea, this can refer to different things if left up to interpretation. enjoyed your Etheree tonight.. Hope your weekend is a good one.. Watched any interesting movies lately? love Wilma
Austin Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 10:16 AM
Ah, yes, the vaunted albatross - back-version. This just has all kinds of speculation brewing. Perhaps E.A. Poe knew the nuisance. Don't know exactly why I like it , but I think this is a GREAT poem. LOve, daver
Poet Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 5:57 AM
This is EXCELLENT.The way you have expressed that feeling is awesome Andrea.Hope that bird will fly away soon:)
Kendrick Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 5:50 AM
Agreed...Nerve pain is a like an Eagle's talon pressing in and pulling...Great one..I feel for you..Sara
Knop Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 3:01 AM
Sorry Andrea, just recognized that my comment was posted twice! But it wasn't my fault.
Knop Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 3:00 AM
I know what that kind of chronic pain means! I am now with arthrosis (right knee, right elbow and left shoulder) which is very painful at times. I hope your health is soon improving! All the best and have a great weekend!...Love, Gert
Knop Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 2:59 AM
I know what that kind of chronic pain means! I am now with arthrosis (right knee, right elbow and left shoulder) which is very painful at times. I hope your health is soon improving! All the best and have a great weekend!...Love, Gert
Johnson Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 1:32 AM
The bird of prey, lingers still, casting it away, what part does it fill? Lindy Chamberlain lost her baby near Ayers rock, 1970s? A dingo was blamed or was it murder. (not Nicole methinks) Australia is still divided on which is right. Enough pain suffered in either case, xo,' Don
Agtani Avatar
June 25, 2011 at 12:42 AM
He is a predator Andrea! Thank you for your kind words on my poem. Your encouragement uplift me to write more. See you again next time. Dalila
Roberts Avatar
June 24, 2011 at 10:13 PM
hoping it is nothing as serious as fibromyalgia Andrea, my mother lives with chronic pain and it is the most depressing thing imaginable, hope your health improves soon, good luck with your surgery
Foley Avatar
June 24, 2011 at 8:19 PM
BURDENINGLY FRIGHTENING. NICELY PENNED. IAN F
Roberts Avatar
June 24, 2011 at 7:10 PM
awesome write, love it Andrea, ( reminds me of the pain when I tore my rotator cuff)
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