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An Old Tramp Fast Asleep

an old tramp fast asleep on a bench in an empty park no sounds or visible movements yet on his worn out clothes fleas hop and bedbugs and lice crawl Date written 16th May Name of Challenge Lind68868 Sponsor Dear Heart Constance Theme Chosen comparitive thought

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Date: 5/28/2019 12:06:00 PM
Hi Jack - congratulations on a superbly penned and imaginative poem - a very deserved win - strange we were writing about tramps on exactly the same day! Hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/26/2019 5:49:00 PM
dropping back with my itches I mean congrats jack!:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 5/24/2019 7:30:00 PM
Back with my congrats, my dear friend!
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Date: 5/24/2019 6:42:00 PM
You have given us a vivid look at the reality of homelessness Jack. The sadness of this situation is palpable. Congratulations on your deserving first placement my friend! : ) xxoo
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Date: 5/24/2019 2:44:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in Dear Heart's Lind68868 contest my friend! God bless.... Robert
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Date: 5/21/2019 12:06:00 PM
- Congratulations on a great first place in this contest, a wonderful writing Jack :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 5/21/2019 11:43:00 AM
Very vivid image, albeit grisly. Congrats on your win in the contest, Jack. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 5/21/2019 9:27:00 AM
Jack, congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this excellent poem!
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Date: 5/21/2019 7:04:00 AM
Oh that poor man. He needs a meal, a bath and some new clothes and a place to sleep. Really good description here. God Bless, JB
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Date: 5/17/2019 7:45:00 PM
oh goodness such a gross description. Ewwww!! How terrible to have to live this way.
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Date: 5/17/2019 7:24:00 PM
all so sad...the vermin lives on him amidst an otherwise serene setting but we must take note.
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Date: 5/17/2019 6:05:00 PM
Oh!! That would be hard to imagine the fleas, bedbugs and lice. Enjoyed reading your work. Thanks for dropping by all my poems and leaving a comment. Sara
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Date: 5/16/2019 10:10:00 AM
Hi Jack, you have just reminded me of an incident on a trip to England about 25 years ago - in fact you have given me an idea for a poem. This one is a great description of a tramp - excellent - bravo - hugs, Jennifer.
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Date: 5/16/2019 8:56:00 AM
Now I'm itching all over, Jack!! ...and the old tramp sleeps happily. What a contrast you present, my friend! Regards // paul
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Date: 5/16/2019 7:21:00 AM
oh my skin is crawling at this vivid scene Jack! good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx
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