An Exercise

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This is as the title says: an exercise, in the use of one prolonged metaphor from the first to the last line. Hope you like it :)

fringed rifts tear
aside a curtain
ragged with light 
stage is prepared
soft murmurs
grow into roars
voice raises to
a deafening scream
that erupts and whips
waters with
thundering applause 

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September 10, 2017
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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/10/2017 9:42:00 AM

This is so rich in description, I love it. It is substantial delicate yet solid. You know where you are in this poem and can move forward taking in the whole gist without stopping to figure a bit out.

Darren White
Date: 9/10/2017 12:12:00 PM

Thank you Patricia, that's a great compliment :)

Maureen McGreavy The Insolent Rib

Date: 9/10/2017 9:38:00 AM

Wow! :) I applaud xomo!

Darren White
Date: 9/10/2017 12:11:00 PM

I bow for you :)