An Admission In Re: Vienna Bombardieri Making An Admission

AN ADMISSION TO TELL HER TO ADMIT IT
           (to vie in re: the poem “the sun the sea etc.)

The lady doth bequeeth unto me too much praise
I write of struggling through nights and she about laughter filled days
two divergent lives woven together by words she said were mine
and all this must be created by some grand design

I wrote a banal poem that needed life and a soul
and somehow she saw my poem less then amateurish and droll
so she took my words and gave life to lifeless sentiments
while she and I took two metaphorical sacrements

we shared some wine from miles away
and she wrote a line to express what I had to say
interwoven words that fit together as if we were one
and I was in awe from beginning until the poem was done

so she wants to give me credit when she polished my shoes
shoes being metaporical for a poem, whether up-beat or the blues
I gave her a sow's ear and she gave me back my pride
by making a pearl as I read the poem wide-eyed

well I say to you all, here and now
if you want to know how to make magic she'll show you how
so when she tells you it was a poem I wrote alone
now you know what you needed to be known
   © 2012..copyright PHREEPOETREE ~free cee!~
p.s. “take another little piece of my heart now baby---you know you got it------ if it makes you feel GOOD!”

Copyright © | Year Posted 2012



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Date: 8/12/2012 2:40:00 AM
Vie is the sun that begs both seeds and weeds to grow. She does not discriminate. She is a jewel that lays on the river bed of this flowing society that waits to be discovered. We can only hope that we are one of those unpolished gems. Rockman :-)
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