Connie Marcum Wong Poet Rhyme

Amid the Jagged Shadows

"Amid the jagged shadows of mossy leafless boughs; " 

                                Samuel Taylor Coleridge

Amid the Jagged Shadows

The restless wind swept all your leaves away,
     gay colors I enjoyed every day.
My heart feels like you, my favorite tree, 
     in a colorless world I've lost my glee.

My heart is aching as holidays near,
     I miss you so much and wish you were here.
Often nights, I barely sleep before dawn.
     I'm trying to cope with you being gone.

My sweet granddaughter, with tears in my eyes,
     I welcome again a lonely sunrise.
You remain in the shadows of my heart.
     With my deepest love, to you I impart. 

11-24-19 

Poem of the Day November 26, 2019

~First Place~
Writing Challenge 3, November - Any Form
Sponsor, Dear Heart - Wisshkobi Ode

 "I remember the years you spent under my wing,
As I recall all the joy, it makes my heart sing"

*Note: My Granddaughter is not dead, but her family moved a flight away.

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Laura Leiser January 21, 2020 at 9:39 AM Beautiful verse and a pleasure to read, Connie! I can relate, too, as both my grandchildren live across the continent...hugs! :) Connie Marcum Wong January 21, 2020 at 12:37 PM Thank you very much Laura. I cared for my granddaughter since her birth more than half the time, so I really miss her. She will be 8 on March 2nd. xxoo

Caren Krutsinger December 12, 2019 at 3:41 AM A flight away is WAY too far for a grandmother! I understand your dismay. It comes across well.

Lindsay Laurie December 10, 2019 at 5:36 PM Hello Connie … First of all; I trust you and your family will have a wonderful Christmas. The old adage 'absence makes the heart grow fonder' is not always the cause. Another verse from you that is so meaningful Connie - thank you - Lindsay

Kurt Ravidas December 8, 2019 at 2:54 PM That's very moving, Connie. Three of us, Coleridge, his Christabel and me congratulate you on win and POTD.

Constance La France December 5, 2019 at 6:18 PM Connie congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this beautiful poem! Connie Marcum Wong December 5, 2019 at 9:05 PM I am so happy you liked it Constance, and thrilled you gave it a First Placement. Your wonderful choice of quote inspired me to write it. Thank you! Have a blessed holiday. xxoo

Caren Krutsinger December 5, 2019 at 5:39 AM Congratulations on your winning poem! It is gorgeously done, as usual, my friend.

Joseph May December 4, 2019 at 4:45 PM Congrats on your win Connie..

Sandra Adams December 4, 2019 at 2:35 PM Back for a third time to say congratulations on your top win my friend :) hugs XoXo

Andrea Dietrich December 4, 2019 at 1:58 PM you did such a wonderful job expressing your emotions here, connie, and I don't know if I said it before, but congrats for a potd as well and for your win with Constance.

Anne-Lise Andresen December 4, 2019 at 12:48 PM - Congratulations so much on your winning poem, dear Connie :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Lady Labyrinth December 4, 2019 at 3:07 AM Beautiful Connie. Congrats. Sad, but very beautiful. Much love to you at this time of year, which can be heartwrenching. Much love, Leanne x

Na Na December 3, 2019 at 8:29 PM Congrats on your winning poem Connie

Sam Kauffman December 3, 2019 at 3:21 PM Hi Connie, This poems puts us squarely in the middle of your feelings of loss. Beautiful phrasing and meter. I understand how you feel as my granddaughter lives 2,000 miles away! Congratulations on your win! Connie Marcum Wong December 4, 2019 at 4:43 AM My grandson lives across the ocean over 2,000 miles away too. He is nine now. I see him once a year when school is out. Thank you my friend. I can relate perfectly with your situation. Blessings, Connie xxoo

Brenda Chiri December 3, 2019 at 11:57 AM Connie congratulations on your top win!;)

M. L. Kiser December 1, 2019 at 11:07 AM I know you miss her, beautifully penned feelings.

Kai Michael Neumann November 30, 2019 at 8:35 AM Congratulations on POTD. A heartfelt tribute and very well penned. Kind wishes, Kai

Paula Goldsmith November 27, 2019 at 8:39 PM Congratulations on your POTD. You did not write with ink, you wrote with love. Be blessed.....

Line Gauthier November 27, 2019 at 7:42 AM Back with well deserved congrats on your POTD, Connie.

Robert Lindley November 27, 2019 at 1:45 AM Congratulations on POTD my friend. The message m the love in this gem is easily felt and seen! Afav...

Brenda Chiri November 27, 2019 at 12:49 AM Congrats on potd!

Regina Mcintosh November 26, 2019 at 11:44 PM Love your poem and Congrats on POTD... Much love and blessings, Gina

Charles Messina November 26, 2019 at 10:30 PM Beautiful poem Connie..Congrats on POTD! Charlie

Brandy Nicole November 26, 2019 at 10:29 PM I can feel your heart in every word, the emotions within. Longing to be with your granddaughter. I know you miss her. Family is very important. Your thoughts caress softly around me and my heart. Congratulations Connie, on Poem of the Day. ~ Brandy

Warren Doll November 26, 2019 at 6:47 PM She will always be with you and you with her. It doesn't matter how far away she is. Enjoy her visit. Congratulations on POTD, Connie. Happy Holidays~ Warren

Midnight Aurora November 26, 2019 at 4:50 PM How very sad. This poem deserves to be POTD. This really touched me.

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