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Amid the Jagged Shadows

"Amid the jagged shadows of mossy leafless boughs; "                           Samuel Taylor Coleridge Amid the jagged shadows Being left alone in a state, so destitute With a pain wrapped around her, so absolute She wished she knew of some way to cope So lost in grief, she had lost all chance of hope The pain pulled her down made her feel so low Upon her soft cool cheeks tears unchecked did flow Unbearable pain within her chest would ache She prayed to god it was some cruel mistake Amid the jagged shadows of leafless mossy boughs Light had left her, now the darkness she must allow
Date:11/21/2019 Writing Challenge 3, November - Any Form Sponsor, Dear Heart - Wisshkobi Ode

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Date: 12/9/2019 12:30:00 PM
Your imagery is brilliant and daring, Brenda.
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/9/2019 1:41:00 PM
And your comments are wonderful thank you Caren!;)
Date: 12/5/2019 6:25:00 PM
Brenda congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this beautiful poem!
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/5/2019 8:58:00 PM
Thank you dear heart!;) it was fun to do!;)
Date: 12/4/2019 4:34:00 PM
So sad, no escape from the grief, Congrats on your win Brenda
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/5/2019 8:58:00 PM
Lol so true joseph! Thank you!;)
Date: 12/4/2019 12:44:00 PM
- Congratulations so much on your winning poem, Brenda :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/5/2019 8:58:00 PM
Thank you Ann-Lise so much!;)
Date: 12/4/2019 4:18:00 AM
This poem is wonderfully expressive of grief Brenda. Congratulations on your wonderful Second Place win! xxoo
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/4/2019 6:15:00 AM
Thank you so much Connie much appreciated!;)
Date: 12/3/2019 8:36:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Brenda
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 12/4/2019 6:15:00 AM
Thanks so much!;)
Date: 12/3/2019 6:48:00 PM
poignant yet beautiful....congratulations on your win :)
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Date: 12/3/2019 3:53:00 PM
Hi Brenda, Congratulations on your winning placement. Really evokes the sense of grief in the grieving process.
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Date: 11/24/2019 6:33:00 AM
Deeply penned! I’ll be looking forward to seeing all your results to these contest you’ve entered. Your pen has been on fire Brenda! Keep posting! INK
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/24/2019 7:20:00 AM
Lol now I am looking forward to it too thank you G!;) seems I had sometime on my hands so I figured I'd try to enter a couple of contests!;)
Date: 11/23/2019 9:30:00 AM
I think Mr Coleridge would be more than happy to lend himself to your poem, Brenda...the style of writing you have employed is similar to that of his period. Nicely contrived. With much affection. :) john
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/23/2019 12:53:00 PM
Ah John lol thank you so much! I am so happy to see you responding again! You have been missed so much!;)
Date: 11/22/2019 4:42:00 AM
Beautifully done. Best wishes in the contest. Love and hugs, Gina
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/22/2019 2:48:00 PM
Thanks so much Regina!;)
Date: 11/21/2019 10:51:00 PM
Brenda, I like the phantom phrase in these jagged shadows you've created. -Richard
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/22/2019 2:47:00 PM
Richard thank you so much!;)
Date: 11/21/2019 9:30:00 PM
You tell a sad tale here! Quite powerful! Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Brenda Chiri
Date: 11/22/2019 2:47:00 PM
Thank you Matthew I appreciate your visit!;)

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