Brenda Chiri Poet Rhyme

Amid the Jagged Shadows

"Amid the jagged shadows of 
mossy leafless boughs; " 
                         Samuel Taylor Coleridge 

Amid the jagged shadows

Being left alone in a state,
so destitute 
With a pain wrapped around 
her, so absolute 
She wished she knew of 
some way to cope
So lost in grief, she had lost 
all chance of hope
The pain pulled her down 
made her feel so low
Upon her soft cool cheeks 
tears unchecked did flow
Unbearable pain within her 
chest would ache
She prayed to god it was 
some cruel mistake 
Amid the jagged shadows 
of leafless mossy boughs
Light had left her, now the 
darkness she must allow

Date:11/21/2019
Writing Challenge 3, November - Any Form
Sponsor, Dear Heart - Wisshkobi Ode

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Caren Krutsinger December 9, 2019 at 12:30 PM Your imagery is brilliant and daring, Brenda. Brenda Chiri December 9, 2019 at 1:41 PM And your comments are wonderful thank you Caren!;)

Constance La France December 5, 2019 at 6:25 PM Brenda congratulations on your win in my writing challenge with this beautiful poem! Brenda Chiri December 5, 2019 at 8:58 PM Thank you dear heart!;) it was fun to do!;)

Joseph May December 4, 2019 at 4:34 PM So sad, no escape from the grief, Congrats on your win Brenda Brenda Chiri December 5, 2019 at 8:58 PM Lol so true joseph! Thank you!;)

Anne-Lise Andresen December 4, 2019 at 12:44 PM - Congratulations so much on your winning poem, Brenda :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Brenda Chiri December 5, 2019 at 8:58 PM Thank you Ann-Lise so much!;)

Connie Marcum Wong December 4, 2019 at 4:18 AM This poem is wonderfully expressive of grief Brenda. Congratulations on your wonderful Second Place win! xxoo Brenda Chiri December 4, 2019 at 6:15 AM Thank you so much Connie much appreciated!;)

Na Na December 3, 2019 at 8:36 PM Congrats on your winning poem Brenda Brenda Chiri December 4, 2019 at 6:15 AM Thanks so much!;)

Sandra Adams December 3, 2019 at 6:48 PM poignant yet beautiful....congratulations on your win :)

Sam Kauffman December 3, 2019 at 3:53 PM Hi Brenda, Congratulations on your winning placement. Really evokes the sense of grief in the grieving process.

Pace Ink-U-Script November 24, 2019 at 6:33 AM Deeply penned! I’ll be looking forward to seeing all your results to these contest you’ve entered. Your pen has been on fire Brenda! Keep posting! INK Brenda Chiri November 24, 2019 at 7:20 AM Lol now I am looking forward to it too thank you G!;) seems I had sometime on my hands so I figured I'd try to enter a couple of contests!;)

John Fleming November 23, 2019 at 9:30 AM I think Mr Coleridge would be more than happy to lend himself to your poem, Brenda...the style of writing you have employed is similar to that of his period. Nicely contrived. With much affection. :) john Brenda Chiri November 23, 2019 at 12:53 PM Ah John lol thank you so much! I am so happy to see you responding again! You have been missed so much!;)

Regina Mcintosh November 22, 2019 at 4:42 AM Beautifully done. Best wishes in the contest. Love and hugs, Gina Brenda Chiri November 22, 2019 at 2:48 PM Thanks so much Regina!;)

Quoth Theraven November 21, 2019 at 10:51 PM Brenda, I like the phantom phrase in these jagged shadows you've created. -Richard Brenda Chiri November 22, 2019 at 2:47 PM Richard thank you so much!;)

Matthew Anish November 21, 2019 at 9:30 PM You tell a sad tale here! Quite powerful! Peace & Love Matthew Anish Brenda Chiri November 22, 2019 at 2:47 PM Thank you Matthew I appreciate your visit!;)