Alone

Each day as she gazes early morning sky
with sips of coffee and memories gone by,
horizon blushes like staring in lover's eyes,

just as she remembers when he sat next to her
in embrace of winds and rising orange glow
as birds flew over the shining meadows.

How hard it must be to conjure up such emotions
when today is not much different than yesterday
and sun kisses horizon just the same every day.

Yet, she aspires to behold sentiments long gone
hoping for renewal of evocative romance
sitting on her deck reminiscing ardent past.

One day she ventures out in drenching rain
as darker horizon manifests her stark loneliness
and sun hides in clouds, devoid of its charm.

In pouring rain she stays sodden in reflection
when tears join discourse of bleak emptiness
as remnants of fervor and passion wash away.

First Place 
October 25, 2017
Standard Contest No. 45
Sponsor: Brian Strands
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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March 29, 2018 at 3:32 AM
Wow Vijay congratulations on your well deserved placing in the contest! Really enjoyed this piece and you really don't disappoint the reader, I found the ending very liberating :)
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March 29, 2018 at 1:10 PM
Many thanks Kyle.
Inman Avatar
November 8, 2017 at 2:10 AM
Strong emotions in your poem Vijay.
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November 8, 2017 at 5:47 AM
Thank you James!
Gauthier Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 12:10 PM
Heartbreaking - such simplicity of loneliness so well expressed. Beautiful. Well deserved win.
Pandit Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 12:18 PM
Thank you Line--appreciate your comments!
Schiavina Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 8:35 AM
My poor words won't even come near to describe the perfection and beauty of your poem. Congratulations. So well done!
Pandit Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 11:20 AM
Thank you Frances!
Inman Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 8:14 AM
Vijay, a wonderful write.
Pandit Avatar
October 30, 2017 at 11:20 AM
Many thanks James!
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October 29, 2017 at 7:02 PM
Such a powerful, well-written poem, Vijay, with 'aloneness' so vividly presented. Although Free Verse, I felt such poetic rhythm in your words. Congrats on your fine 1st place win. Sandra
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October 29, 2017 at 9:32 PM
Thank you Sandra!
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October 29, 2017 at 2:44 PM
Congrats on your win, Vijay!
Pandit Avatar
October 29, 2017 at 4:17 PM
Thank you Dale!
Smith Avatar
October 29, 2017 at 11:12 AM
Great poem Vijay, congrats :)
Pandit Avatar
October 29, 2017 at 4:17 PM
Thanks Gary!
Teagan Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 12:19 AM
"she aspires to behold sentiments long gone, hoping for renewal of evocative romance" ~ you have a beautiful way of expressing emotions, Vigay. Absolutely gorgeous.
Pandit Avatar
October 28, 2017 at 7:07 AM
Thank you Becca!
Swartz Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 8:42 PM
Such a powerful piece. Very well written Vijay.
Pandit Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 9:22 PM
Thank you James!
Canerdy Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 11:00 AM
Lovely poem with appealing bittersweet descriptions and tone, Vijay! Janice
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October 27, 2017 at 11:51 AM
Thank you Janice!
Canerdy Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 11:00 AM
Lovely poem with appealing bittersweet descriptions and tone, Vijay! Janice
Johnson Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 9:09 AM
Such a powerful piece.The flow of words comes together like an orchestra. "One day she ventures out....."-There is power in this venture that we all must dare. Blessings my friend.
Pandit Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 9:17 AM
Appreciate your comments, curtis--many thanks!
Sands Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 8:35 AM
You have expressed this loss and sadness so well with superb description. Great lines in this poem. Well done Vijay :)
Pandit Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 9:16 AM
A joy to see you back in this space--many thanks Heidi! Hope your project is going well--best wishes for a successful outcome!!
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October 27, 2017 at 7:30 AM
The bitter the disappointment, the sweeter the love to come! Superbly written my friend, Vijay!
Pandit Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 9:14 AM
Thank you for your kind words Demetrios!
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October 26, 2017 at 9:06 PM
A very sad poem w/such deep melancholy romanticism exuding from your inked pores, Vijay. This is so elegantly written ... when tears join discourse of bleak emptiness as remnants of fervor and passion wash away. Listening to Al Jarreau's "All" while reading this gorgeous poem was exquisitely divine. You are so talented, it's really beautiful to read. Splendid poem. Solar powered poetry, my friend. Love and smiles always.
Pandit Avatar
October 27, 2017 at 7:13 AM
Thank you Freddie!
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October 26, 2017 at 1:42 PM
- A lovely poem with sad feelings, Vijay - Greatly described with your words - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 1:44 PM
Many thanks, Anne-Lise--appreciate your comments!
One Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 8:56 AM
A sad write my friend..
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:23 AM
True--Thank you Silent One!
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October 26, 2017 at 8:31 AM
Your imagery is exquisite and you have drenched us in your emotion.
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:22 AM
Thank you Richard--appreciate your visit!
Michael Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 8:13 AM
Such things make us cry or smile...Live or die...In the end, it's the wonder of life
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:21 AM
You are right--thanks Arturo!
Williams Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 6:20 AM
You have a great poetic flair Vijay. Such imagery in your words. you set a melancholy scene well...Maria
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:21 AM
Thank you Maria!
Sathasivam Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 2:48 AM
Excellent. Great imagery write. Well penned. Thanks for sharing it.
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:20 AM
Many thanks Ravi!
Rodrigues Avatar
October 25, 2017 at 10:07 PM
Those clouds have a way of depressing the soul! Great contrast!
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:19 AM
Thank you Kim--you are right, a contrast was intended!
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October 25, 2017 at 7:23 PM
Beautiful pen Vijay, not without melancholy. xomo :)
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:18 AM
Thank you Maureen!
Dietrich Avatar
October 25, 2017 at 7:16 PM
You captured very well that feeling of "aloneness" in this melancholy poem, Vijay.
Pandit Avatar
October 26, 2017 at 10:18 AM
Thank you Andrea!
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