Alone

Any hopes that I had about you coming back are laid gently to rest as hand in hand you walk at ease with each other all that past we had shared ashes now just ashes For contest 'Pleiades A', sponsor Kim Merryman August 10, 2016

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Teddy Kimathi

Date: 8/16/2016 4:22:00 AM

Congrats Viv, for your WIN in the contest!! ;-)

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/16/2016 3:06:00 PM

Thanks, Teddy, much appreciated. Regards, Viv

Paul Callus

Date: 8/15/2016 5:50:00 AM

Always a pleasure to come back to a winning poem, Viv! Congratulations!! Regards // paul

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/16/2016 3:07:00 PM

Thanks Paul, always tricky with shorter forms. Regards, Viv

Kim Merryman

Date: 8/14/2016 9:31:00 AM

This was such a sad write, Viv. Your last line was a perfect ending. Congrats on your well written Pleaides! Thank you for supporting my contest. Blessings!

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/16/2016 3:07:00 PM

Thanks Kim, enjoyed the challenge. Viv x

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/13/2016 7:41:00 PM

Hi Viv, I just came back to say congratulations on your winning write. It was well deserved: -) Alexis

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/13/2016 5:38:00 PM

I can see this better as an Etheree Viv. I loved your meaningful words that evoked strong emotions. Congratulations on your win! 7 ; )

Jan Allison

Date: 8/13/2016 9:49:00 AM

Dropping back with my congrats Mr Viv:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/16/2016 3:08:00 PM

Thanks Jan, Viv x

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/13/2016 7:52:00 AM

- Congratulations on your winning poems, Viv ! - Great on a moving theme ! - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/13/2016 1:10:00 AM

wow, a sad one!!! The last line is another wow. I love yours, and congrats for the win.

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/16/2016 3:08:00 PM

Thanks Andrea, yours too! Viv x

Sandra Haight

Date: 8/12/2016 9:15:00 PM

Very touching and heartfelt, Viv. A whole story in so few lines and syllables. All the best for the contest. Sandra

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/13/2016 12:58:00 AM

Thanks, Sandra, hope you're ticketty-boo. Viv x

James Inman

Date: 8/12/2016 12:02:00 PM

Viv, your vulnerable side! Well done. A beautiful write.

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/13/2016 12:59:00 AM

A bit of a softy under this rugged, chiselled, well toned physique, James. I really must get my spectacles fixed :)

Alexis Y.

Date: 8/11/2016 2:26:00 PM

Hi Viv, You did good in this difficult form. I can sense the sadness as well as anger in this write. When a relationships ends it can bring much heartache. I wish you the best of luck in the contest:-) Alexis

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/13/2016 12:59:00 AM

Thanks, Alexis. a Challenging form, indeed. Viv

Paul Callus

Date: 8/11/2016 10:47:00 AM

A sad topic, Viv...the poem flows smoothly...not easy when writing in this form! hope to see this on the winners' list! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 8/11/2016 6:09:00 AM

Well captured angst!

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/11/2016 6:26:00 AM

Tricky to pack a lot in the form, Richard, but thanks, appreciate it. Regards, Viv

Laura Leiser

Date: 8/10/2016 11:18:00 PM

Very sad longing here, and very nicely written, Viv! Enjoyed:)

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/10/2016 11:45:00 PM

Thanks, Laura, back to my kooky smiley levels now, Viv x

Daniel Turner

Date: 8/10/2016 7:27:00 AM

I suppose the hardest thing in life is to admit failure, especially in a relationship. Extremely painful. It's nice to see your serious side Viv. Really enjoyed the sad read from you. Peace mate.

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/10/2016 11:45:00 PM

Cheers, Daniel, a bit of broken heart from a good while back. Regards, Viv

Joanna Daniel

Date: 8/10/2016 2:29:00 AM

This is a lovely write, Viv...so much said in few words...difficult form, but I can see a winner:)

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/10/2016 11:46:00 PM

Thanks Jo, these forms really make one work. Viv

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 8/10/2016 2:11:00 AM

A serious one from you Viv. Sometimes those feelings come rushing back. A song or scent or scene turns the mind abruptly backward. This is sad but very lovely Viv. Most of us have been there. ; ) 7

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/10/2016 11:47:00 PM

Indeed they do, Connie. In this case the song would be 'run to you' by Bryan Adams, the scene would be Jersey, the scent Avon Wild Linen. Viv x

Jan Allison

Date: 8/10/2016 12:39:00 AM

Oh Mr Viv this is so sad to know there is no chance of rekindling a relationship. Good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley
Date: 8/10/2016 12:58:00 AM

Hi Jan, fortunately this is about a past relationship, many moons ago. I promise to be more upbeat in future, Viv x