Alone

The darken theater held them there they sat
she looking down and he looked out together 
neither spoke, they came together but alone.

So many married years had passed each more alone.
She looked down and chatted on her phone, he sat
near me, we starred toward the movie together. 

They never knew how sad they looked together 
but all could see, and none envy, two alone. 
I shook my head and sat silent as they sat,

 side by side, they sat together, but alone.



*Tritina

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 5/29/2013 6:32:00 AM
how so true. you can be wit someone and still be alone.great thought, good poem.
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Date: 4/16/2013 6:54:00 PM
WOA, love it, love it....Congratulations. a 7>>>> Fave...
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Date: 3/16/2013 5:42:00 PM
Congratulations on a very fine win, Debbie! Well written and true. Tough situation...I think I'd rather be "alone", all myself. Great job and goes to my Favs. List. Love, Annalise
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Date: 3/14/2013 6:48:00 PM
Congrats Debbie :-)
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Date: 3/11/2013 7:36:00 AM
Hmm.. seems a pretty comon state..well done Deb. congrats. BG
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Date: 3/10/2013 9:36:00 PM
DEBBIE, this happens to be a xool and exciting new form in which Andrea, introduced for her contest. ~ CONGRATULATIONS with your awesome Tritina winning poem. Take Care, LINDA
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Date: 3/10/2013 12:19:00 PM
together yet alone...so profound....congrats on a great win
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Date: 3/10/2013 11:08:00 AM
so true for married couple. Beautifully written poem friend Debbie. Congratulations on your win in Andrea's Contest. Cheers!! :)
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Date: 3/10/2013 7:54:00 AM
Congrats on your place oh cool lady xx
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Date: 3/10/2013 7:39:00 AM
Debbie congrats on your win, a very sad affair indeed ...David
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Date: 3/10/2013 7:06:00 AM
Congrats on your win Debi!Loved it on my first read.
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Date: 3/10/2013 7:03:00 AM
So true for some married couples. Ho hum of a life. Congrats on your win. Nicely done. Warm Smiles, Connie
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Date: 3/10/2013 12:10:00 AM
Debs, I utterly love the message of your tritina. It was one of my favorites for what you were actually saying about a married couple. Congratulations. Soupmail for you.
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Date: 3/2/2013 11:50:00 AM
Reads like a winner..Good luck in the contest..This is one of the forms that you like to do..Interesting thoughts on some long term relationships..Sara
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Date: 2/26/2013 8:58:00 AM
I love it
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Date: 2/22/2013 10:19:00 PM
Finely crafted words. I hardly noticed the repeats at first.
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Date: 2/22/2013 8:45:00 AM
Debbie a sad picture painted, not been here in a while as my time is at a premium now...David
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Date: 2/22/2013 7:18:00 AM
I love it Debbie - so estranged and at the movies yet. I've been sick and not able to concentrate on poetry. Nothing serious love, kathy
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Date: 2/21/2013 7:48:00 PM
Excellent!!
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