Alone

The darken theater held them there they sat
she looking down and he looked out together 
neither spoke, they came together but alone.

So many married years had passed each more alone.
She looked down and chatted on her phone, he sat
near me, we starred toward the movie together. 

They never knew how sad they looked together 
but all could see, and none envy, two alone. 
I shook my head and sat silent as they sat,

 side by side, they sat together, but alone.



*Tritina
Copyright © | Year Posted 2013

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Iloduba Jnr Avatar
May 29, 2013 at 6:32 AM
how so true. you can be wit someone and still be alone.great thought, good poem.
Bacha Avatar
April 16, 2013 at 6:54 PM
WOA, love it, love it....Congratulations. a 7>>>> Fave...
Haick Avatar
March 16, 2013 at 5:42 PM
Congratulations on a very fine win, Debbie! Well written and true. Tough situation...I think I'd rather be "alone", all myself. Great job and goes to my Favs. List. Love, Annalise
Jones Avatar
March 14, 2013 at 6:48 PM
Congrats Debbie :-)
Gorelick Avatar
March 11, 2013 at 7:36 AM
Hmm.. seems a pretty comon state..well done Deb. congrats. BG
A   Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 9:36 PM
DEBBIE, this happens to be a xool and exciting new form in which Andrea, introduced for her contest. ~ CONGRATULATIONS with your awesome Tritina winning poem. Take Care, LINDA
May Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 12:19 PM
together yet alone...so profound....congrats on a great win
Liwayway Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 11:08 AM
so true for married couple. Beautifully written poem friend Debbie. Congratulations on your win in Andrea's Contest. Cheers!! :)
Tams The Golden Girl Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 7:54 AM
Congrats on your place oh cool lady xx
Williams Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 7:39 AM
Debbie congrats on your win, a very sad affair indeed ...David
Poet Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 7:06 AM
Congrats on your win Debi!Loved it on my first read.
Gildersleeve Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 7:03 AM
So true for some married couples. Ho hum of a life. Congrats on your win. Nicely done. Warm Smiles, Connie
Dietrich Avatar
March 10, 2013 at 12:10 AM
Debs, I utterly love the message of your tritina. It was one of my favorites for what you were actually saying about a married couple. Congratulations. Soupmail for you.
Kendrick Avatar
March 2, 2013 at 11:50 AM
Reads like a winner..Good luck in the contest..This is one of the forms that you like to do..Interesting thoughts on some long term relationships..Sara
Bolden Avatar
February 26, 2013 at 8:58 AM
I love it
Zerbst Avatar
February 22, 2013 at 10:19 PM
Finely crafted words. I hardly noticed the repeats at first.
Williams Avatar
February 22, 2013 at 8:45 AM
Debbie a sad picture painted, not been here in a while as my time is at a premium now...David
Collins Avatar
February 22, 2013 at 7:18 AM
I love it Debbie - so estranged and at the movies yet. I've been sick and not able to concentrate on poetry. Nothing serious love, kathy
Poet Avatar
February 21, 2013 at 7:48 PM
Excellent!!
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