Alone

I sit here all alone,
Waiting for someone to notice,
Notice my cries out for help,
I'm all alone inside,
The voices tell me i should of died,
My pillow is soaked from the tears i've cried,
The guilt from all the times i lied...
Copyright © | Year Posted 2010

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Pettit Avatar
January 9, 2011 at 8:01 PM
The relatively small group of words you have chosen convey a descriptively sad tale. I suggest you make the following changes: "alnoe" should be "alone", "somoeone" is correctly spelled "someone". Your fifth line should read "The voices tell me I should have died." Make those changes and your presentation looks much better.
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April 21, 2010 at 3:43 AM
Beautiful words and a nice Poem reflecting your loneliness. You have great potential to write lovely poems. Use loneliness to be a blessing for you. The world would not be with you, when you are crying, but it would be with you when you laugh. Pain & sadness are a blessing for Poets. Just make them your friends. I had sent you my comments on 16th Jan also but you have not acknowledged. I was worried after reading your Poem Suicide. Thanks. Love and best wishes.x. Ravindra…x Ashley Wiseheart
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