Alone

I sit here all alone, Waiting for someone to notice, Notice my cries out for help, I'm all alone inside, The voices tell me i should of died, My pillow is soaked from the tears i've cried, The guilt from all the times i lied...

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Robert Pettit

Date: 1/9/2011 8:01:00 PM

The relatively small group of words you have chosen convey a descriptively sad tale. I suggest you make the following changes: "alnoe" should be "alone", "somoeone" is correctly spelled "someone". Your fifth line should read "The voices tell me I should have died." Make those changes and your presentation looks much better.

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 4/21/2010 3:43:00 AM

Beautiful words and a nice Poem reflecting your loneliness. You have great potential to write lovely poems. Use loneliness to be a blessing for you. The world would not be with you, when you are crying, but it would be with you when you laugh. Pain & sadness are a blessing for Poets. Just make them your friends. I had sent you my comments on 16th Jan also but you have not acknowledged. I was worried after reading your Poem Suicide. Thanks. Love and best wishes.x. Ravindra…x Ashley Wiseheart