Almost

ALMOST


Early afternoon shadows meridional 
Not quite minimal
The heat not quite maximal
Donkeys not yet in shade as usual
Flowers not quite wilting and dismal
We sit hand in hand  - two equal
Not quite yet one and eternal

allegorymonorhyme

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Andrea Dietrich

January 26, 2012 at 5:34 PM

Good you got in the eternal aspect of us all. Way to monorhyme, my friend. I like short fun poems like this. Thanks so much for what you said about my sonnet today. I appreciate it.Luv, Andrea

Carol Sunshine Brown

January 25, 2012 at 7:45 AM

I wish I had a better understanding on the forms of poetry so I could give you a clear confident comment on your writing. I will tell you I do love reading poetry. I thank you for sharing yours today I enjoyed reading it Sidney. Love, Carol

Cindy Lu

January 24, 2012 at 11:13 AM

unique rhymining, it took work to do this it seems. good writing, keep it going, best of luck, Cindy

Sidney Beck

January 24, 2012 at 11:18 AM

CindY i have been mixing up my reply comments tonight very badly .....i intended t saythe sme thing t o you too but it has become very mixed ...in error.....thanks for your support in liking my scribbles...best wishes Syd

Sidney Beck

January 24, 2012 at 11:15 AM

whoops Anne Lise I inserted the comment reply for Deb into your box in error......however I wanted t osa ythe same thing...thanks again and sorry I dont simply get enough time t o write t o people o n soup....Syd

Anne-Lise Andresen

January 24, 2012 at 11:10 AM

Thank you for sweet poem,I like it. :) - oxox love Anne-Lise

Sidney Beck

January 24, 2012 at 11:16 AM

Sidney Beck

January 24, 2012 at 11:11 AM

Deb thanks very much for your kind words...... I'm glad you liked the doggerel I scribbled....unfortunately I dont often get the time t o write to almost any one of the excellent people on the Soup...so forgive me for appearing taciturn ........pressure of work is high....best wishes and thanks again

Debra Squyres

January 24, 2012 at 11:01 AM

I like this...so many almosts in life.

Sidney Beck

January 24, 2012 at 11:13 AM

whooops i inserted your reply comment in Anne lise 's box hahaha.....here it is again...........Deb thanks very much for your kind words...... I'm glad you liked the doggerel I scribbled....unfortunately I dont often get the time t o write to almost any one of the excellent people on the Soup...so forgive me for appearing taciturn ............best wishes and thanks again

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