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For last fifty years. Sad pillows still surround me Moans are dragging me. For last fifty years. Heart is unable to see the dark span thrilled me For last fifty years. I run around the time's dust and the whirlwind falls. For last fifty years. I'm looking for My Nineties Calm and loving beam. For last fifty years. Want to remain unloaded. No one crossed but me. For last fifty years. doom angels did not appear for life-changing hug. For last fifty years. Some subterfuge was muttered. Step aimed for repent For last fifty years. hunt for a watering pot Rain for Aaron's rod For last fifty years. And I'm relying on you sky's tears have fallen. For last fifty years. The eyes decipher birth signs on heat and pain shores. For last fifty years. sins tighten the grip of grief hope and goodness fade For last fifty years. The metal scream may be heard. metal beat yields steel. Written: August 6, 2021 A Brian Strand 1,2 or 3 line Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Brian Strand

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/12/2021 5:33:00 AM

Fifty years spent in grief and longing or hunting for something sounds like a difficult period of one's life but I am not sure that it is what this work is about but maybe something deeper. Enjoyed reading your winner. Way to go. Congrats. Sara

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/12/2021 9:19:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kindness, Sara, and for your delightful comment. Blessings and hugs

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 8/7/2021 2:23:00 PM

A compelling picture of the passing years, congratulations~

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/7/2021 2:33:00 PM

Thanks for reading and commenting Michelle

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/7/2021 11:22:00 AM

You strung them along well, Lassad. I like doing series with first line as the theme to begin each one. Congrats here.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 8/7/2021 9:04:00 AM

Amazing chain Lasaad that spins a story of "the last fifty years." Love the steel and metal metaphors. Congratulations on your win my friend! Sending blessings.

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/7/2021 9:34:00 AM

Thank you very much, Sam, your motivating words are so dear to me, and I'm delighted you like this poem. Blessings and kindest wishes, dear friend.

Christuraj Alex

Date: 8/7/2021 6:52:00 AM

So Beautiful Haiku Chain. Congratulations on your win!

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/7/2021 9:35:00 AM

Thank you very much, Alexis, appreciate your kind words.

David Kavanagh

Date: 8/4/2021 11:50:00 AM

You honestly gave me pause for thought Lasaad with these strikingly deep haikus, some are very personal to you, and appear a little cryptic to this reader, I may need a little help deciphering, “remember I’m agnostic” but overall the flow continues to intrigue, right up to the final line, (swine lost faith we grow), seems to hammer home your underlying message, cheers David

Sotto Poet
Date: 8/4/2021 12:28:00 PM

Thank you very much for your detailed assessment and exhaustive analyses, David. Although there are no particular pieces of information tackled, the topic addressed here is everything that irritates the younger generation, which is very valued compared to our older generation. Best wishes, my good friend.