All in a flap

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Write Eight Beautiful Lines Poetry Contest
Sponsored by: Constance La France
03/28/2025

A step too far, brings right of passage to a ledge Fluttering at cliff walls, pushing life’s brittle edge A sheer instinctive thrust, with no trust to pledge Now or never moment, undermines fear’s wedge A chick leaps off, flailing frail wings fail to fledge Featherweight of hope meets a ten-pound sledge Crashing straight down, no safety net to dredge Next guy flaps like mad, landing softly in a hedge

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Tom Cunningham

Date: 3/28/2025 1:48:00 PM

Pushed the boundaries and plenty of luck can minimise any negative outcome, never giving up helps too, quite a thought provoking verse David. Good luck in the contest and enjoy your weekend. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 3/28/2025 3:35:00 PM

Very true Tom, sheer determination only goes so far, some luck is indeed needed to get through this life in one piece, it’s such a fine line though, and impossible to predict, have a great weekend too, cheers David