All I Could See

In an abyss of mar;
I was sunk.
My thoughts swimming;
in a pool of masquerade shame.
A dagger in my head;
All I could see was an evening of score.

With a flip of a hand;
Like an angered red dragon.
I breathed fire and redemption;
In the midst of rage and terror.
I had blood on my hands;
All I could hear was a cry from the soil.

In a faction of a second;
My heart had raced.
Thoughts crumbled with confusion.
A wanderer in the desert of oz.
My legs felt like shattered glass.
And all I could think was vengeance.

He had tainted her hands;
Abused them in pain.
She had screamed inside.
A caged animal in a circus.
Unfamiliar territory scared her.
And all I could excrete were tears dry.

With a bow he had decorated her.
A misdeed he did.
It was physical for him, 
Emotional damage for her.
Humanity lost inside a cave of bats and bears.
And all I could hear were screams.

Murder she wrote; the opposite.
Beauty like a bunch of roses; yes.
Heart like a garden of roses; yes.
A cactus environment she delved;
With eyes wide shut.
All I could hear were whispers.

With pique like that of a tiger.
I bore teeth, muscle and archery.
Blinded by a trim cloth of red.
A knight’s tale it foretold.
He had hurt my offspring.
All I could see was night.

Emotionally; I covered him with guilt.
Overt, I smeared him with shame.
Physically I scathed him; barbarian.
A man’s title he does not deserve.
Physically I had marked him for the world to see.
And all I could still see was darkness.

He had hurt my offspring.
All I could see was red.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2015



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Date: 8/13/2015 1:22:00 AM
HERZEL, Congratulations on your win. SKAT LOVE
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Date: 8/13/2015 1:00:00 AM
Congrats on ur awesome winning write Herzel!
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Date: 8/12/2015 5:16:00 PM
Herzel, Congratulations on your "Any Poem #33" contest win. Thank you for the support. Stop by my latest blog. **A Good Read** if you'd like or have time... Always & Forever ~LINDA~
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Date: 4/20/2015 8:01:00 AM
great poem. As promised, I returned and I am glad I did because the freshness of your talents are yet again exhibited through these wonderful lines. Definitely a 7
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Date: 3/5/2015 12:12:00 AM
"A man’s title he does not deserve" damn right!!!!
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Date: 2/26/2015 5:38:00 AM
Dear Herzel. What an incredible write! I was only a little ways into it when I was already wishing for a glimpse inside your mind. Preferably when there is no rage present :) However no doubt for the reasons you mention that would also be something a person would not dare to look away. 7 X 7
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Date: 2/23/2015 4:34:00 AM
What a ferocious poem of dynamic verse and brute beauty, dear Herzel! If someone hurts your offspring is that what he rightfully deserves! A seven my dear! BTW this morning you commented for the first time on my poem " WHY THAT MUCH" unfortunately it was erased and I reposted it! Thank you!
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Date: 2/19/2015 8:11:00 AM
There are two types of men: brutes and gentlemen. Try not to judge all men alike;either way, you will suffer hurt. Thanks for sharing.
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