William Kelii Kekaula Poet Senryu

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Poetic Form: Senryu/Shape
Inspired: 2024 January 12

 

NOTE: My Shape/Concrete poems START-OFF as WORK IN PROGRESS due to the dynamics of the program, transpositions are never in sync, and repetitive corrections necessitate improvements to take the form of its desired effects.

 

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alcoholism

I have never known
him to be a drunk until~
I saw him sober
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                                m       (  )       m
                                |  |___/ \___|  |
                                 OO____Y____OO

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Silent One January 13, 2024 at 5:53 AM Nice senryu and interesting how many people would be so different.. nice shape at the bottom also.. William Kelii Kekaula January 13, 2024 at 6:21 AM This is an old bit in my heap that I resurrected after an old drunk with a sole 12-pack beer in his shopping cart, fell off the store curb onto the roadway with racing young people to aid while I was waiting for the nurse in the pharmacy, tsk, tsk--sad. Aloha, William

Vijay Pandit January 13, 2024 at 5:16 AM This is quite brilliant my friend. The ending line so powerful! William Kelii Kekaula January 13, 2024 at 6:26 AM Sad event outside a store with a drunkard and a 12-pack beer in his cart fell off the store curb onto the road with youth rushing to his aid--hence a resurrected oldie I'd posted, waiting for my nurse in the pharmacy. Thanks, Vijay, Aloha, William