alcoholism

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Poetic Form: Senryu/Shape
Inspired: 2024 January 12

NOTE: My Shape/Concrete poems START-OFF as WORK IN PROGRESS due to the dynamics of the program, transpositions are never in sync, and repetitive corrections necessitate improvements to take the form of its desired effects.

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I have never known him to be a drunk until~ I saw him sober ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ z z z z ^ m ( ) m | |___/ \___| | OO____Y____OO

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Silent One

Date: 1/13/2024 5:53:00 AM

Nice senryu and interesting how many people would be so different.. nice shape at the bottom also..

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/13/2024 6:21:00 AM

This is an old bit in my heap that I resurrected after an old drunk with a sole 12-pack beer in his shopping cart, fell off the store curb onto the roadway with racing young people to aid while I was waiting for the nurse in the pharmacy, tsk, tsk--sad. Aloha, William

Vijay Pandit

Date: 1/13/2024 5:16:00 AM

This is quite brilliant my friend. The ending line so powerful!

Hilo Poet
Date: 1/13/2024 6:26:00 AM

Sad event outside a store with a drunkard and a 12-pack beer in his cart fell off the store curb onto the road with youth rushing to his aid--hence a resurrected oldie I'd posted, waiting for my nurse in the pharmacy. Thanks, Vijay, Aloha, William