Ahhh, Evening

Ahhh, evening
and a breeze in my face
the fan is noisy
Copyright © | Year Posted 2012


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Date: 6/2/2012 12:17:00 AM
Tremendous Haiku!!! Soup mail!!!
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Date: 3/26/2012 3:51:00 PM
Now here I would say [and i do this often] you have simply discribed what you saw..there is no particular beauty or ah HA! about this moment, no real reason for you to write about it at all..I can get here now to get to the ah HA! moment and do it in correct form LOL
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Charles Henderson
Date: 3/26/2012 4:36:00 PM
without disagreeing with your statement, I think I can say that my first view was me having breeze in my face and the turn is that the breeze is from a fan. Not the wind blowing. Kind of dull maybe but made sense to me at the time.
Date: 3/25/2012 7:44:00 AM
a noisy fan // cooling my face // evening breeze // 4.4.3...I'll keep trying to xxx Hugs
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Date: 3/24/2012 8:34:00 PM
This very nice Charles.Pl.visit my haiku 'a confused haiku'
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Date: 3/24/2012 8:09:00 PM
I don't know if it is traditional or contemporary, but I like it! Blessings, Rhonda
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