Affliction

I kneel my knees to please the Above
Dying to eat every word from the hope
Went to the prominent land with great gurus
Sitting on the hot seat, listening to them

Time came for judgement holding the swords of my fear
First battle got victory but it wasn't remain long
Tears suddenly rolled down not because of failures
But for the companions stood better to receive the crown 

In the dark sited with a small light of candle
Regrets with gigantic question, "what did I do wrong?"
The unending question covered the beating heart
Marked the loneliness to face the bright shine

Under the humiliation around the eyes 
Expected that it would I overcome!
Turning my head towards the abstruse gem
Gives brilliant views and bogus fate!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2013



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Date: 1/31/2015 10:50:00 AM
I read a lot of your writings and I must say you have a lot of beautiful words and this one I really love along with more but God has given you the ability to word some wonderful poems I thank you for your words here in an know God's blessings are with you
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Date: 4/13/2015 10:56:00 AM
thanks Rev. Samuel I appreciate what u said :)
Date: 11/21/2013 10:27:00 PM
Oh...welcome! To the soup! jimbo
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Date: 11/21/2013 10:26:00 PM
Enjoyed! jimbo
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Date: 5/29/2013 6:18:00 AM
Nice work poet. Saw ya comment on my poem. Thanks. We can be more friends, you know as poets. My facebook name is Sogodav.
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Date: 5/30/2013 10:22:00 AM
have great day thanks!
Date: 5/19/2013 1:54:00 PM
Elai, Congratulations on your Featured Poem of the week. Take Care *Linda
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Date: 5/19/2013 7:54:00 PM
thanks and I don't expect it! I'm so flattered... thank you Linda.
Date: 5/12/2013 5:00:00 PM
This one of the best reminders of when we are done with these human bodies and it is time for out judgement in front of God I see this in the bible {in different words} I have given sermans on this very subject WOW love it what a wonderful was to tell of the great judgement Elai I do believe that God has a big plan for you keep the Faith and work wonderful.
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Date: 5/14/2013 2:59:00 AM
thanks Rev. I know He has for me!
Date: 5/9/2013 9:23:00 PM
Elai, your poem is very enjoyable, :-) Wishing you a nice warm welcome to Poetry Soup. Wishing you the best in your writings. I hope you find this community to be one of the best. May you find inspiration by reading some of the poetry written here by other poets, and myself? If you ever want or need feedback on any given poem, please look me up by clicking on my name anytime you're on line. I'm looking forward in becoming your #1 poetry soup fan. Please keep me posted every time you post a poem <3 LUV ~*~SKAT"
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Date: 5/5/2013 8:39:00 AM
thanks you so much for the comments!
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Date: 5/4/2013 5:52:00 AM
Powerful write!!!
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Elai Cee
Date: 5/5/2013 8:38:00 AM
thanks u too!
Date: 5/3/2013 8:11:00 PM
about your poem: Elai, wow... that's a very strong way on viewing fate and hope. A deep poem... kind of epic... always~ Linda
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Elai Cee
Date: 5/3/2013 9:27:00 PM
thanks Linda... hope can share more poems.
Date: 5/3/2013 8:10:00 PM
Hi Elai, Welcome to poetry soup. My name is Linda; many poets on the soup call me PD for fun. If you like, please consider checking out my contest in the future. SOME ARE FUN : -) You can find the contest page by clicking on the top left hand side. You will find many different contests to choose from. I’m looking forward in reading and following your poems right now and the future. If you ever want or need feedback on a certain poem, please look me up. I can't wait to read what you highly recommend. You can always stop by and say hi if you like. Keep me posted when you post your next poem…. Thank you ~ Always & Forever *LINDA
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Date: 5/3/2013 8:04:00 PM
I believe you have much to offer to this site. You are creative and if you post more I believe you will develop a following..... Jake
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Elai Cee
Date: 5/3/2013 9:28:00 PM
thank you im looking forward for it!
Date: 5/3/2013 3:44:00 PM
nice one :)
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Elai Cee
Date: 5/3/2013 6:50:00 PM
thank you Aaron.
Date: 5/3/2013 10:38:00 AM
great!
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Date: 5/3/2013 10:29:00 AM
Thank you for your fine poem, you write very well Elai. - Welcome to P-Soup. - Hope you will get much pleasure from sharing your thoughts and poems here with us. - Wish you all the best. - (Give comments, to get back) - Have a lovely weekend. - oxox / / Anne-Lise :)
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Elai Cee
Date: 5/3/2013 10:37:00 AM
thank you so much! hope can share more poems!
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