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Adam's Rib

Adam's rib
genetically engineered --
Eve's birth

Ó November 27, 2011
Dane Smith-Johnsen


THAT MIGHT BE TOO SUBJECTIVE FOR HAIKU FORM.  Here's another go at the same 
idea...trying to learn the form!

 the Bible 
 states God made Eve from Adam –
 genetic engineering

I have been told that once I say that the Bible States, it moves away from a real image 
because the bible doesn't talk and haiku is supposted to be objective and real.  It 
becomes subjective at this point.  On the good side, it does have two distinct gramatical 
parts.  

I am STILL WORKING ON MAKING IT A TRUE HAIKU...
Here's another go at it!  >>>>>

Holding my Bible
Thinking on engineered genes –
Eve from Adam’s rib

Ó November 28, 2011
Dane Smith-Johnsen

This might not work because the idea of Eve being created from Adam's rib is a story 
that might be a fantasy according to many.  So...still working on it!

OR maybe this will work >>>

holding my Bible
pondering engineered genes—
exhume his rib

Ó November 28, 2011
Dane Smith-Johnsen

I have been told that pondering is subjective...but I am using it as an the act of 
pondering in this instance...hoping it will fit the form.  exhume is rib is a possible action 
and referrs to one person...hoping it will take people back to biblical thoughts of Adam 
and still fit in the haiku form.  WAITING TO HEAR as I continue to learn that Haiku "ain't" 
as easy as it looks!



note: the first one fits the form, but I am told it doesn't meet haiku requirements.

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