Adam's Rib
Adam's rib
genetically engineered --
Eve's birth
Ó November 27, 2011
Dane Smith-Johnsen
THAT MIGHT BE TOO SUBJECTIVE FOR HAIKU FORM. Here's another go at the same
idea...trying to learn the form!
the Bible
states God made Eve from Adam –
genetic engineering
I have been told that once I say that the Bible States, it moves away from a real image
because the bible doesn't talk and haiku is supposted to be objective and real. It
becomes subjective at this point. On the good side, it does have two distinct gramatical
parts.
I am STILL WORKING ON MAKING IT A TRUE HAIKU...
Here's another go at it! >>>>>
Holding my Bible
Thinking on engineered genes –
Eve from Adam’s rib
Ó November 28, 2011
Dane Smith-Johnsen
This might not work because the idea of Eve being created from Adam's rib is a story
that might be a fantasy according to many. So...still working on it!
OR maybe this will work >>>
holding my Bible
pondering engineered genes—
exhume his rib
Ó November 28, 2011
Dane Smith-Johnsen
I have been told that pondering is subjective...but I am using it as an the act of
pondering in this instance...hoping it will fit the form. exhume is rib is a possible action
and referrs to one person...hoping it will take people back to biblical thoughts of Adam
and still fit in the haiku form. WAITING TO HEAR as I continue to learn that Haiku "ain't"
as easy as it looks!
note: the first one fits the form, but I am told it doesn't meet haiku requirements.
Copyright © Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen | Year Posted 2011
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