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Across a Black Mat

ACROSS A BLACK MAT ‘……..’’’’’’’’’’’’’’….’’’’’’’’ splash of yellow hues winking across a black mat breaths dance with stardust light folds drenched eyelids skins under quilt of twilight ~ lullaby the moon and so aprons sleep hanging on a weary chair ~ smelling of meatloaf senryu © all rights reserved …………………… Brian Strand's Contest 1/14 Any Theme By nette onclaud

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Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/15/2013 11:11:00 PM

Very interesting ones, Nette. Nice to see you won a contest long ago with these. Soupmail

Kash Poet

Date: 8/31/2011 10:02:00 PM

Hi Nette,sorry I am late.This is excellent poetry from you.Congratulations on your win.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 8/31/2011 5:06:00 PM

congrats on a joint third place win! beautiful words and beautiful imagery as always :-)

Caryl Muzzey

Date: 8/31/2011 10:45:00 AM

Congratulations on your win with this fabulous write, I enjoyed the read~ Caryl

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/30/2011 9:55:00 PM

Congrats Nette luv on another amazing win with more magnificent words and splendid poetry ..so fine.. my friend..

Olusegun Arowolo

Date: 8/30/2011 6:17:00 PM

Nice Senryu,Nette.Congratulations on your well deserved win in this contest....peace be..Olusegun.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/30/2011 4:48:00 PM

Congrats..Sara

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 8/30/2011 7:23:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved winning piece Nette. Love, Carol

David Williams

Date: 8/30/2011 3:07:00 AM

hey Nette, congrats on a great win , David

Francine Roberts

Date: 8/29/2011 11:21:00 PM

congrats on your third place win nette, great job

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 8/24/2011 12:03:00 PM

enjoyed reading today!! Good morning!! cheers and a cup of brew!!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 8/23/2011 10:00:00 PM

well this is mesmerizing and inviting Nette luv.. a sure winner and chart topper Nette luv as your passion shows in these vibrating lines ..luv.. good luck ...

Elizabeth Wesley

Date: 8/23/2011 8:52:00 PM

Your visions are always amazing Nette, I could say you paint mind pictures as no one else can.

Jack Ross Jr.

Date: 8/23/2011 4:57:00 PM

Wow, color poem supun with golden threads, morning, noon, and night....with love...old Jack

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/23/2011 12:52:00 AM

wow, that last one sure hit the senses! Great ending senryu, Nette. And best of luck in the contest. thanks for my win in your carnival contest.I enjoyed doing it.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 8/22/2011 11:46:00 AM

I especially like the last one..Reads like a mother or father who has prepared a comforting meal..Sara

Steven Cooke

Date: 8/22/2011 9:07:00 AM

another beautiful write, just like shelling peas, as we say in england. top bat old bean.

S.Jagathsimhan Nair

Date: 8/22/2011 8:56:00 AM

yet another stunning beauty, nette,thanx for your sweet words too, hugs, jag

Kash Poet

Date: 8/22/2011 4:36:00 AM

Come visit......

Kash Poet

Date: 8/22/2011 4:33:00 AM

The last stanza...that is awesome.What a strings of Senryus!! enjoyed the imagery here Nette.Best wishes in the contest.

Judy Ball

Date: 8/22/2011 1:08:00 AM

Another beautiful piece from your skilled pen my friend. Lovely imagery. God Bless, JB

Nancy Jones

Date: 8/22/2011 12:12:00 AM

LOL!! a netski indeed! many waves of preeshedness to you... thanks so much for being.

Russell Sivey

Date: 8/22/2011 12:02:00 AM

Great imagery! "lullaby the moon" is one of my favorite lines of all time...you wrote flawlessly!! Thank you Nette for sharing this poem...good luck on the contest!