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My grief lies dormant, in hibernation but pain is buried deep in my heart, still. A tinge of sadness with no cessation. My dad's death left a void nothing can fill. In summer, I still feel the winter's chill. There's a gaping hollow in my soul's core. Sorrow wages a never-ending war; a quicksand that wants to swallow me whole. It's a fire, raging; an ocean's roar There's a hollow, but life's joys filled the hole Submitted for... Strand No 650 Any Theme Any Form Poetry Contest (Winner: Honorable Mention) Sponsored by Brian Strand Date written: 01/18/2020 How Death Has Affected Me Poetry Contest (Winner: 1st Place) Sponsored by Lu Loo Checked at howmanysyllables.com Rhyme Scheme: A-B-A-B-B-C-C-D-C-D Date written and submitted: 01/05/2020

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Date: 1/14/2020 11:26:00 PM
Congrats. Thanks for sharing this... I'm especially delighted with your last line: "There's a hollow, but life's joys filled the hole." God bless you.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 1/15/2020 12:09:00 PM
Thank you so much, Beata:-) Most appreciated.
Date: 1/13/2020 8:37:00 PM
Soo well written Edward, I believed every word(don't know if it's real life) if so, so sorry for your loss, if only poetic genius, then kudos to you for having such an empathetic write!
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 1/13/2020 10:57:00 PM
Thank you, John:-) Unfortunately, it's a real loss. I really appreciate the condolences. Blessings to you!
Date: 1/12/2020 1:58:00 PM
ahh, that ending line was perfect for this poem, after seeing all the grief you experienced. Love how you did this theme. Congrats for the win.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 1/12/2020 2:13:00 PM
Thank you very much, Andrea:-)
Date: 1/11/2020 7:26:00 PM
i can feel this one...i lost both parents... this is wonderfully penned Edward...congratulations on your win :) hugs
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 1/12/2020 7:52:00 AM
Thank you, Sandra:-) I'm so sorry for your losses...
Date: 1/11/2020 12:11:00 PM
grief in hibernation, sorrow at its best. beautifully sad in many ways wearing sad emotions. Loved this so much. Congratulations on your placement and thank you for your participation. x:-)-luloo
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 1/11/2020 4:21:00 PM
Thank you so much for my placement, Luloo:-) I'm so glad you loved it. Stay blessed, my friend!
Date: 1/5/2020 12:29:00 PM
This is excellent, Edward--so beautifully written--a win in my books.
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Edward Ibeh
Date: 1/5/2020 12:41:00 PM
Thank you very much, Vijay:-)

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