About You

'When did you wake up?' You once asked.

The blind laughed in my heart, and
I fell in love.
A dream escaped, but your hairs
Darkened its path.

When we make love
I hear a sea roaring in your curls, and
Feel an animal on your skin.
In the needles of rain, eyes are missing,
And a burning river rushes out of your crevice.

While a cuckoo cries for moon drops,
Dawn comes with a yawn,
And the coconut tree bends to comb
Your disheveled clouds while I
Search for my succumbed heart
In crumpled pillows.

I see you flying away,
And I drink mountains from a bottle
Of sunsets, thinking about you
Until I hear the moon
Moaning for a window.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 10/23/2018 8:13:00 AM
This is absolutely gorgeous- you have great command of imagery. It's not uncommon for imagery to be used in describing appearance, e.g. "sapphire eyes," but you've elevated the emotional impact by choosing nature/living things, rather than static objects, to evoke the beauty of your lover. I think this is quite lovely, because it not only reflects their unique liveliness, but in my opinion, is the highest form of comparison to give another, as the most beautiful things we know are not man-made.
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Ibohal Kshetrimayum
Date: 10/24/2018 1:33:00 AM
Thank you so much, for your inspiring comment. God bless.
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