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Written for " Abandon" sponsored contest by Constance La France

"The sun loved me again, when it saw that the stars would not abandon me" Jenim Dibie... I paint on the blue-black arms of blank skies, with pirouetting promises in midnight eyes, no longer impatient for the dawning of hues~ manipulating the ache between ink and muse. I breathe in silence, wrap my soul in rhyme-less forms, to taste topaz tears of dusk, beneath swirling storms, as I’ve long learned to sing with wistful stars alone, amidst the warmth, cloaked within cold-chiseled stone~ flickers of grief, now veiled by bonfire blazes, of melancholic memories and fleeting phases, where love and light no longer collaborate, yet sail like astral flames of fate that life must validate… I ponder, do nameless ghosts of the sun recall my name? For I crave not the fickle flares, nor to take their blame. I am kissed by the redolent rays~ of ruin and wild orchids in lilac moon’s haze, surfing through lagoons drenched in marine dust, fighting tilted tides mirroring broken trust… So, let me abandon the scorching gold of sunrise~ forgive this heart, serving nothing but lyrical lies…

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Sam Scott

Date: 5/28/2025 11:17:00 AM

Inky - you were right to point me in this direction - I love a rhyme. I am not qualified to critique just enjoying the signature style.. This really should have some audio don't you think? The magic of rhyme is the rhythm - it lends to a vocal. I do, ofcourse have favourite lines: "as I’ve long learned to sing with wistful stars alone.." Yep. But better still this: "manipulating the ache between ink and muse". Our styles are quite different - but maybe one-day a collab? Blessings and stuff S:) x

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/27/2025 4:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your winning work. Way to go. Sara K

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/24/2025 10:40:00 AM

- Congratulations on your win in the contest "Abandon", Ink :) - hugs

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 5/24/2025 9:57:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. I enjoyed reading your wonderful write from the first line to the last line. Great Picture... Have a blessed weekend with your win.......

Paige Hind

Date: 5/21/2025 2:03:00 PM

Dear Ink, the world certainly wouldn't call your work lies. So much of a heart, is in them. <3 Beautiful, beautiful work.

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/21/2025 9:15:00 AM

Dear Ink, an excellent poem that captures the conflict between creative expression and emotional suffering. Longing, memory, and relational complexity, especially love and loss, are also explored. The night sky and twilight frame the speaker's reflection and emotional struggles. Your word choice is rich and expressive, using sensory images and emotional depth. Colorful and tactile words like "blue-black," "topaz tears," and "lilac moon’s haze" pop. Adjectives provide emotional weight, while nouns like "muse," "ghosts," and "orchids" connect inspiration, recollection, and beauty.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/21/2025 6:50:00 AM

Ink, you are a poet in love with language, with vivid expression. You have conveyed a powerful message about the extremes of emotions that come with the extremes of life. Janice

Di11y Da11y

Date: 5/21/2025 5:51:00 AM

Beautiful poetry Ink, full of meaning. It's like sinking into a meditation just reading it. Favourite line is "flickers of grief, now veiled by bonfire blazes" such an imaginative combination that works magnificently. Good luck for the contest x

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:14:00 AM

Its always an honor hearing from you, many did like that line, im so grateful to receive your feedback. Thank you so very much truly! Sending you light always

Tom Woody

Date: 5/21/2025 5:37:00 AM

I like how Maria described this - aching elegance. That's a perfect way to look at most of your poetry. You have an exceptional command of the English language and your use of word couplings and phrasing is indeed elegant. Nice take on the theme Inky

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:15:00 AM

Thank you so much, i had to scroll up to see which theme it was haha. Appreciate your kind response. Maria is a kind soul. She sees beauty in everything. Sending you light

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 5/21/2025 5:22:00 AM

- A pleasure to read your contribution to this contest :) - In the darkness it is difficult to perceive the sensible, rational and positive thoughts, but one must be strong ... towards an ever better life ... and enjoy every golden sunrise :) - Best wishes :) - hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:16:00 AM

Thank you dear anne lise i appreciate your heartfelt response truly! Sending you light always

Lin Lane

Date: 5/21/2025 4:03:00 AM

First, when commenting on a poet's lines, I am always in favor of letting them know what lines stood out to me. I appreciate it when I learn what about my writing was particularly interesting to them... despite what anyone else thinks... it's a personal preference and to disagree sheds a negative light on PS. Here is my fave, "the dawning of hues~ manipulating the ache between ink and muse." On the winning list or not, Ink it's a winning write in my eyes.

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:19:00 AM

Ah it is actually good to quote lines so the poet knows we read the poem, i do that alot too dear linnersz, and it always makes me happy when i know my complicated poems are read and felt. Your comments are always so sincere. I appreciate them truly. Sending you light always

Maria Williams

Date: 5/21/2025 3:42:00 AM

Dear Inky,this is absolutely stunning—so evocative and richly layered. Your use of imagery feels like a dance between shadow and light, every line painted with emotion and poetic depth. There's a kind of aching elegance here, especially in how you frame grief and solitude as something almost sacred. “Surfing through lagoons drenched in marine dust” is pure magic. This piece doesn't just speak—it sings in whispers. Beautiful work. A fave...Hugs

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:21:00 AM

Awwn your fave means alot beautiful soul maria, i did a rhyme after a long time! This poem took me an hour to write. Im not so good with rhymes so i have to open rhyme zone and search bla bla ugh i like to free flow my thoughts however i was determined to deliver a rhyme for this prompt haha! Im so happy you liked it! Always a pleasure seeing you in comments. Sending you light always

Sara Kendrick

Date: 5/21/2025 2:58:00 AM

Reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Way to go. Sara K

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:22:00 AM

Awwn thank you dear sara! So happy to see you today in my comments! I did respond to your soupmail. Sending you light always

Lioness Onpaper

Date: 5/21/2025 2:17:00 AM

I paint on the blue-black arms of blank skies, with pirouetting promises in midnight eyes,Oh my that opening line !!!! taste topaz tears of dusk, beneath swirling storms, Look at the kind of beauty you bring to light with just a few lines !!! love and light no longer collaborate, yet sail like astral flames of fate that life must validate…mmmmmmm do nameless ghosts of the sun recall my name .. For I crave not the fickle flares, nor to take their blame. flawless!!! let me abandon the scorching gold of sunrise~ forgive this heart, serving nothing but lyrical lies… Gorgeous end to an absolutely glorious piece papi!!!

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:25:00 AM

Papi you are gorgeous! Thank you for taking time to read! And quoting lines you love too! Always grateful for your support as i kno you hate reading lol

Billie Jama

Date: 5/21/2025 1:48:00 AM

This is mesmerising, sis. Your pen always displays such emotional clarity and lyrical grace. “Flickers of grief, now veiled by bonfire blazes” is my favourite line, what an image of transformation. And “fighting tilted tides mirroring broken trust” hit deep; it beautifully captures the quiet ache of healing. The introspection and elegance in this piece is signature you—poetry that lingers deep within the morrow. Bravo

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:25:00 AM

Sis thank you for being here on soup and for reading me , leaving this sincere and heartfelt response and i appreciate you so very much truly always! Im grateful that this rhyme was good enough for you too! Sending you light always

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 5/21/2025 1:39:00 AM

My beautiful talented TWINSZY

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:26:00 AM

Awwn i love you dahlin

The Aura Rhymes

Date: 5/21/2025 1:38:00 AM

I use lines from your poems , when I post my model shoots on Instagram. Thank you ink

Ink Empress
Date: 5/21/2025 6:26:00 AM

You can quote the whole poem too i dont mind! Yours is mine and mine is yours to own lol