Aaronic Sonnet in a Face

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10th in Shape Poetry Contest (Sponsor: Vanya Evangeline)

Judged: March 5th, 2025

                                      what if a sonnet had a face               
                                  and hands  aimless beard coarse 
                         as scouring pads licking  off food  grime 
               high-heat stains                                   that shadow pans                                                                                      
                   almond eyes                                           lusty         
                          but                                              wise-looking
                       choppy                                              meters 
                                      
                                                   to meet 
                                                 expectations 
                                             surpassed by the 
                                       you-ness of you soundly
                                 tangential cadences and quaint

                                                 flirtations
                               drawing me into your world perfectly
           what if a sonnet bore                                arms and plump lips
           enveloping previous                                     lovelorn lives
           arms that carry like                                      bird's arias drift dripping                                      
            ease straining fragile                               peace from strife  
                             could it be a                      sonnet with clumsy 
                                                       feet 
                                          distressed emphasis 
                                            and bent rhymes
                                                   my sweet

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Date: 3/6/2025 6:50:00 AM
this is very difficult to create dear poet, shows so much effort in streamlining thoughts and words. you just pulled it off with ease. amazing. congratulations on your win. cheers dear friend!!!
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Date: 3/5/2025 4:50:00 PM
Congratulations. This is a great poem. Well done.
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/5/2025 7:51:00 PM
Appreciated.
Date: 3/5/2025 11:36:00 AM
A good first try as I see its your first shape poem! You choose a challenge for sure! Your poetry is beautiful and clever! Xo
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/5/2025 7:51:00 PM
Thanks, Crystol:)
Date: 3/2/2025 2:33:00 AM
- Creative shape and lovely written, Trina :) - Best wishes in the contest :) - hugs
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Trina Layne
Date: 3/2/2025 3:54:00 AM
Thank you, dear Anne! I knew what shape I wanted but never plotted a shape poem before. The shape was harder than the poetry itself. I will try some more over time. The prompt was a good incentive to start.
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