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A World Without You

Shattered dream of hushed night Trapped in tenebrous nightmare A world without you, a forlorn cry, Vacant stare of lonesome life Aching to hear your loving voice. A chorus of sweet angelic hymn Saddened to remain unsung, A charming ballad of romance Distressed to fade unheard. An allegory of impassioned love Woefully abandoned unwritten, An album of cherished memories Left unfinished and unspoken. Muzzled voice of an empty nest-- A robin’s roost bereft of eggs, A nightingale strumming tunes of ache-- Its lyrics trembling in latent pain. A world without you, quite barren-- A spring shriveled in wintry freeze Wishing for life’s ornate revelries, Longing vibrant summer flowers And autumn’s fiery zealous splendor. May 29, 2020 Placed 1st: A world without you poetry contest Sponsor: JCB Burl Placed 1st: Strand #780 Contest by Brian Strand

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Paul Callus

Date: 6/9/2020 8:37:00 AM

The anguish of shattered love is superbly executed, Vujay. Belated congrats on placing first with this gem. Regards // paul

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/9/2020 8:42:00 AM

Much appreciate Paul--many thanks. Regards.

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 6/6/2020 11:13:00 AM

You deserve all and every accelaide my friend Vijay for you amazing talent is impossible to hide. Blessings and hugs Jennifer. Congratulation on both 1st wins!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/6/2020 2:23:00 PM

Thank you Jennifer--much appreciate.

Aditi Mishra

Date: 6/1/2020 3:12:00 PM

Back to congratulate you on your top win Vijay. So happy to see your name in the list again. :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 3:19:00 PM

Thank you Aditi--much appreciate.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 6/1/2020 1:43:00 PM

Congratulations on your win. This poem would be a wonderful song. Enjoy your win and day..............

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 3:18:00 PM

Thank you Paula--much appreciate.

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 6/1/2020 8:31:00 AM

Wonderful imagery! Congratulations!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 9:48:00 AM

Thank you Kim--much appreciate.

Janice Canerdy

Date: 6/1/2020 8:16:00 AM

This is SO moving and beautiful, so sad-- that unfinished album! CONGRATS on your well-deserved win, Vijay. Janice

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 8:29:00 AM

Thank you Janice--much appreciate.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 6/1/2020 4:03:00 AM

This is simply stunning Vijay! It is so deserving of your First Placement. Congratulations! Blessings xxoo

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 8:29:00 AM

So very kind of you my friend--much appreciate--many thanks.

Jc Hawkens

Date: 5/31/2020 6:02:00 PM

You never fail to impress with your eloquent poetry. Beautifully written. Congratulations on your win.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 8:28:00 AM

So very kind of you JC--much appreciate--many thanks.

Silent One

Date: 5/31/2020 3:11:00 PM

I can see why this finished first...Everyone should have a chorus like in your second stanza ..Great poetry my friend

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 8:28:00 AM

Much appreciate, SO--many thanks.

Eve Roper

Date: 5/31/2020 10:33:00 AM

A world without you an idea that is heartbreaking. Well written verse with deep emotion written from the heart. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Hugs Eve

Vijay Pandit
Date: 6/1/2020 8:27:00 AM

Thank you Eve--much appreciate.

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/31/2020 8:35:00 AM

Wow Vijay. Excellent poem. I can feel this. Well written. I hope all is well and you have a nice day :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 8:50:00 AM

Much appreciate your kind remarks Heidi. Glad to see, you are posting again. All is well with me. Stay safe my friend.

Regina Mcintosh

Date: 5/31/2020 8:29:00 AM

Love this. It's a wonderful writing. I will be back to wish you congrats I'm sure. Bless you and love to you, dear friend, Gina

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 8:49:00 AM

Much appreciate your vote of confidence my friend. Many thanks for your visit and lovely comments, Gina.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 5/31/2020 7:00:00 AM

Admirably written verses expressing powerfully heart's emotions dearest, Vijay! Blessings

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 7:02:00 AM

Thank you my friend--much appreciate your kind remarks.

Lawrence Sharp

Date: 5/31/2020 2:39:00 AM

The mournful nature of this poem is compelling and very artfully executed, Vijay. Very well crafted, my friend.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 6:21:00 AM

Much appreciate my friend your kind feedback--many thanks, Lawrence.

Harry Horsman

Date: 5/30/2020 10:45:00 PM

Love has a lot to answer for Vijay...but when poetry as good as this is created..It is awesome.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 6:20:00 AM

So very kind of you Harry--much appreciate--many thanks.

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 5/30/2020 9:10:00 PM

Oh so very woeful and full of lament. Very sad, yet beautifully penned. Love it.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 6:20:00 AM

Much appreciate Rhoda--many thanks. Welcome back!

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 5/30/2020 7:43:00 PM

Lovely, heartfelt lines, Vijay! I feel the pain...best of luck in the contest. Hugs, Rhonda

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 6:19:00 AM

Delighted by you visit and comments Rhonda. Much appreciate--many thanks.

Besma Riabi Dziri

Date: 5/30/2020 7:05:00 PM

You never cease to amaze your reader! You never cease to satisfy a craving for a beauty! You always allow your reader to rise to higher levels of great poetry! You take the soul to a world without pulsating heart! We do not have to imagine! Your great interpretation is quenching! A great pleasure to read your wonderful poetry, dear Vijay! My deepest regards and blessings.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/31/2020 6:19:00 AM

A pleasure to read your feedback, Besma. Much appreciate your kind remarks--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/30/2020 2:33:00 PM

a wowser, Vijay. LOVE this. FAVE

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/30/2020 4:13:00 PM

Music to my ears..coming from the best poetess on Soup. Much appreciate, Andrea--many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE.

Aditi Mishra

Date: 5/30/2020 12:55:00 PM

Your beautiful imagery portrays both the joy of love and tha agony of separation. Charismatic flow of emotions Vijay. Best wishes for the contest :)

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/30/2020 4:11:00 PM

Always a treasure to read your feedback, Aditi. Much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.

Jeanne Mcgee

Date: 5/30/2020 8:48:00 AM

Your descriptions were so vivid and haunting. a winner Vijay.

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/30/2020 9:13:00 AM

Much appreciate Jeanne--many thanks.

Mike Gentile

Date: 5/30/2020 6:58:00 AM

I can really feel the ache in your verse, Vijay. A truly empty world you have painted with this moving piece. Good luck in the contest!!!

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/30/2020 7:08:00 AM

So very kind of you--much appreciate Mike--many thanks.

Brandy Nicole

Date: 5/29/2020 11:02:00 PM

Moments without you, such a sad thought. The world would be gray, quiet- no words or music. You have truly set the mood here. Tender and lonely. ~ Brandy

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/30/2020 6:44:00 AM

Thank you my friend--much appreciate, Brandy.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/29/2020 4:28:00 PM

I could sense the loneliness in your verse Vijay, Beautifully written, this will do well. Good luck in the contest Enjoy your weekend Tom

Vijay Pandit
Date: 5/30/2020 6:43:00 AM

Much appreciate your visit and comments Tom--many thanks.