Notes About The Poem

Premiere Contest WinnerA Winter In Yosemite

gentle flakes drift down
   to soften the valley floors
      while lacing the trees
         with the silent retelling
             of ancient native legends

winding brooks of glass
   shimmer as they meander 
       through meadows of gleaming frost
         A crystalline bridal veil
             adorns the cathedral cliffs 

granite monoliths,
   crafted by glacier giants,
      surround this valley...
        hovering, as if to guard
         the peace in God's gift to earth
                       

..............................................................................................................
For Brian Strand's Contest: #223
Copyright © | Year Posted 2008

Poem

Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Scars Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 1:01 PM
Beautiful Carrie..congrats on your placement :)-luloo
Capitano Avatar
October 16, 2016 at 9:21 AM
Great job, wonderfully vivid images. Congrats on this win.
Brown Avatar
November 16, 2011 at 12:34 PM
Congratulations on your well deserved win in the Your Choice Once More contest Carrie. Love, Carol
A   Avatar
November 13, 2011 at 1:24 AM
CARRIE,,, WOW! ANOTHER WONDERFUL WIN, CONGRATULATIONS, in BRIANS ;-) contest,..p.d.
Lucas Mcclure Avatar
November 12, 2011 at 2:50 PM
Congratulations on your first place win with this amazing poem!----lori
Dufresne Avatar
November 11, 2011 at 5:17 PM
Awesome Carrie. A masterpiece of imagery... each line a poem. Congratulations to you, for your talent recognition and win with this triple Tanka
Song Avatar
November 11, 2011 at 4:05 PM
Hi Carrie! I have never been to Yosemite National Park, but it is a goal for me in the next couple years. I am thrilled that God made something so beautiful for mankind to adore...oh, and what a gift for poets to write about too. :) Congrats on this awesome write. I wish to be standing beside one of these granite monoliths that guard this powerful scenery sometime soon. Thanks for inserting the breathtaking photo. Gwendolen
Devonshire Avatar
November 11, 2011 at 11:50 AM
Wow! A new favorite for me, Carrie. Yosemite is perhaps the most beautiful national park I ever visited and I have photos of it hanging on my walls. Your description of "bridal veil" falls and the granite monoliths sculpted during the last Ice Age are magnificent. Big congrats on your first-place win in Brian's contest! Love, carolyn
Sweetheart Avatar
November 11, 2011 at 9:35 AM
Congrats Carrie on a wonderful first place win with this amazing piece of poetry luv..
Thomas Avatar
November 25, 2008 at 7:50 AM
Beautiful images in this poem. I especially love the "winding brooks of glass"! Thank you so much for your comments on my poem. I appreciate it so much! Happy Thanksgiving!
Strand Avatar
November 24, 2008 at 12:01 AM
Beautiful poetry Carrie.Rgds Brian & thanks for your welcome observations.
Winter Avatar
November 23, 2008 at 5:35 AM
Wow. What a sight to behold. What poetry! Completely breathtaking. I wonder if I will ever get to see such beauty. Love, Shar
Reynolds Avatar
November 23, 2008 at 3:21 AM
I too have always wanted to go there, and by gum - I will one day! Hopefuly in winter so I can withness this granduer for myself - amazing visual, I felt like I could see it all (including my crystal breath exhale) awesome, love, Kristin
Fawcett Avatar
November 23, 2008 at 2:16 AM
Awesome Tanka, Carrie. I've always wanted to see Yosemite and this makes me want to see it in winter. Beautifully written. Love, Nigel
Get a Premium Membership
Turn off ads, get more exposure for your poetry, and get more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Diverse Voices: The Poetry of Human Rights and the Pursuit of Peace