Jan Allison Poet Tanka

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A Wilted Rose - Emotive Write

On your tiny grave
Lies a wilted scarlet rose
Snow blanket covers

I wish I could tuck you in
How I miss my precious child

One of Three Tanka Contest
Sponsored by Laura Loo

Checked with how many syllables

06-24-17

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Teddy Kimathi July 8, 2017 at 5:29 AM Greetings, buddy. Congrats for your well-deserved third placement in the contest!! :-) Jan Allison July 8, 2017 at 10:34 AM Cheers Teddy I hope you are going to find a partner for my collab contest:-) I had such fun writing with you and Ralph I thought I'd try and get other folks having fun:-) hugs jan xx

Paul Callus July 1, 2017 at 4:20 PM Pleased to come back with deserved congratulations, Jan! Well done...hugs // paul Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 4:26 PM Many thanks Paul I was delighted to be on the winner's list:-) hugs jan xx

Faye Gibson July 1, 2017 at 12:25 PM Well done, Jan; standing over your child's grave, whether they were 5 or 35 is absolutely soul wrenching. Congratulations. Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 12:29 PM Thanks Faye I can't think of anything more heartbreaking than losing a child:-( hugs Jan xx

Jeremy Smith July 1, 2017 at 11:14 AM Great win Jan :) Nice write Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 11:35 AM Thanks so much Jeremy:-) hugs Jan xx

Kim Rodrigues July 1, 2017 at 8:20 AM Beautiful and sad all at once. Makes me think of a 5 year old that died. Kim Rodrigues July 1, 2017 at 8:26 AM And congrats too! I got so into reading these lovely tankas! :) Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 8:23 AM It is an emotive poem Kim I'm so glad LuLoo liked it:-) hugs jan xx

Beautiful Scars July 1, 2017 at 7:34 AM So sadly beautiful Jan...loved this one...thank you Jan Allison July 1, 2017 at 7:37 AM Thanks you so so much LuLoo:-) I've just mailed you my thanks:-) I'm delighted you liked my sad poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso June 26, 2017 at 12:19 PM A very tender beautiful write Jan. Jan Allison June 26, 2017 at 12:21 PM Thanks Arthur I do surprise folks with the odd serious poem:-) hugs jan xx

Connie Marcum Wong June 25, 2017 at 9:39 PM A beautiful touching write Jan. The picture adds adds extra emphasis on the sadness and the beauty. : ) Jan Allison June 26, 2017 at 3:55 AM Thanks Connie I have written few of this form. I think Luloo is going to have a tough time judging this contest I've seen some lovely poems:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus June 25, 2017 at 4:59 PM Cleverly done, Jan. A sad mother and her longing. gl in the contest. Hugs // paul Jan Allison June 25, 2017 at 5:03 PM Thanks Paul I think Luloo has quite a challenge judging this contest:-) hugs jan xx

Janis Medders Tobechi June 25, 2017 at 1:05 PM Very moving Jan. Good luck in the contest. Jan Allison June 25, 2017 at 1:11 PM Thanks Janis I still want to write another poem based on the colour 'medallion':-) hugs Jan xx

Craig Cornish June 25, 2017 at 10:47 AM The jux here Jan is done so tenderly and peacefully--smiles and tears both Jan Allison June 25, 2017 at 12:29 PM Thanks so much Craig, I have only written this form a couple of times and hope LuLoo likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Pat Adams June 24, 2017 at 9:01 PM Beautiful touching poem. It makes me want to cry. I don't do that much. Great job! Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 9:04 PM aww Thanks Roger, it is a very sad poem but i have to go with the flow of my pen:-) hugs jan xx

Pashang Salehi June 24, 2017 at 4:46 PM I felt the sadness in my bones.... Jan Allison June 25, 2017 at 12:30 PM Yes pure fiction for me Pashang, but I am sure there are people who have suffered the loss of a baby who can relate to my sad lines:-( hugs Jan xx Pashang Salehi June 25, 2017 at 9:41 AM I do hope that it's fictional..... and please say yes. Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 4:59 PM Thanks so much Panshag it is a very sad peom:-( hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 24, 2017 at 4:09 PM amazing, and beautiful, Jan, good luck in the contest.. ~* Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 4:22 PM Thank you so much Eve:-) hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith June 24, 2017 at 12:45 PM Such sadness Jan Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 3:32 PM Thanks Tim it is an emotive write:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands June 24, 2017 at 9:39 AM This is beautifully written and sure does stir the emotions within. Gentle, peaceful, sad, longing. This poem has it all. Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 11:01 AM Thanks Heidi it is a very sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx

James Marshall Goff June 24, 2017 at 9:37 AM Sweet heaviness of love drapes this gentle poem, Jan....good work Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 11:01 AM Thanks James:-) hugs Jan xx

Augustus Black June 24, 2017 at 9:31 AM I appreciate this write. It's written very softly with loving hands. All the best. Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 11:02 AM Thanks so much Augustus:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White June 24, 2017 at 8:16 AM That's seriously beautiful Jan Jan Allison June 24, 2017 at 8:18 AM I hope Luloo likes it Darren:-) I also want to write a poem based on the colour 'medallion' as I've never heard of yellow described in this way:-) hugs Jan xx