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A Wet Day

I took a stroll on a wet November day
following a track down to the byway
there was a pile up causing a long delay
nearby some heaps of trash left to decay
rumbling sounds as I cross the tramway
then down the steep hill to the walkway

Into the park where I watch the children play
rain soaking me through, my hair in disarray
hangs down in threads, like papier-mache
when I get home and dry off, I sit and watch the bay
warm and cosy I drink my tea, watch the spray hit the quay
a blustery day with heavy showers, I decide inside now to stay

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Mustapha Mohammed

Date: 8/28/2013 7:01:00 PM

Well executed dear Shadow. As Richard rightly said its no easy task in rhyming every line but you made a meal out of it.

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 8/29/2013 4:49:00 AM

dearest M.M I can remember you telling me rhyme gets easier the more you use it my dear friend you are right I now enjoy rhyme lol ty for enjoying this Love Shadow xox smiles

Wilma Neels

Date: 8/26/2013 7:07:00 AM

You describe this so clearly and you did it in rhyme Shadow, I have a very difficult time with rhyme lol :) I sure enjoyed your beauty this afternoon. Reminded me of the rain we had last week in Cape Town :)

Shadow Hamilton
Date: 8/29/2013 4:54:00 AM

Hi Wilma back in march I could not write in rhyme it is due to the encouragement M.M gave that I fought on with it. Now I enjoy using it but still have to work hard at it lol, keep trying it will come and use a good rhymer if you are stuck for a word. Glad you liked Shadow x smile