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A Water Haiku

the village pump-
in a gurgle
my childhood  


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Valerie Staton

January 27, 2019 at 7:03 AM

Very well written!

Paul Callus

January 27, 2019 at 2:41 PM

Thank you, Valerie. Best regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

July 8, 2018 at 10:34 AM

I enjoyed revisiting your memory.

Paul Callus

July 8, 2018 at 10:46 AM

Thank you for a double visit, Richard. Have just been enjoying your memory go round. Regards // paul

Heidi Sands

May 3, 2018 at 2:36 PM

I can see it and hear it Paul. Great Haiku! :)

Paul Callus

May 3, 2018 at 4:13 PM

Many thanks, Heidi. Glad you like it:) Regards // paul

Elaine George

April 28, 2018 at 7:08 PM

So much conveyed in so few words. A classic haiku, Paul. To my favs it goes. Sincerely, Elaine

Paul Callus

April 29, 2018 at 8:22 AM

Your lovely comments and fav are truly appreciated, Elaine; thank you! Have a nice day:) Regards // paul

Mick Talbot

March 25, 2018 at 9:37 PM

Wow, I have just scrutinised your thread here an found no congratulatory comments, bemused, I checked the contest, mortified. I can't believe I overlooked this, remiss, I am ashamed of myself, my deepest heartfelt apologies Paul. This is a perfect haiku and should have been amongst the 1st place winners! Sadly I can't alter the results but in my book its a winner! Please forgive me, and accept a belated congratulations for an exceptionally good haiku... Upset I am... Mick

Paul Callus

March 28, 2018 at 5:06 PM

Hi Mick! This is only a contest and I can assure you that I hold no grudge:) On the contrary, I thank you for providing the inspiration with your contest...after all, that's what I mainly use contests for. I myself have been a judge in song contests, and I know how hard and frustrating it can be, both for the participants and the judges!! ~ Best regards // paul

Mick Talbot

March 25, 2018 at 9:45 PM

PS I to saw this on best new poems, its where I noted that it was an entry in on of my haiku contests, and it truly is a best, mortified, and ashamed I am for my terrible oversight... Mick

CayCay Godwin

March 23, 2018 at 9:53 PM

I saw this on Best New Poems and now that I've read it, I see why. You served up nostalgia in a few words making an impact, Paul. Good job. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Paul Callus

March 24, 2018 at 9:27 AM

Thank you for stopping by with lovely complimentary remarks, CayCay. ~ Have a lovely weekend...Poetry hugs to you too // paul

Akkina Downing

March 18, 2018 at 1:02 PM

I love this :)

Paul Callus

March 18, 2018 at 2:08 PM

Thank you, Akkina; you visits today are much appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

March 14, 2018 at 12:15 AM

For me, it would have been in the top three!

Paul Callus

March 14, 2018 at 9:15 AM

:) Thank you, Andrea. It has already been awarded two N/As in quick succession! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

March 12, 2018 at 8:39 AM

Wow a windmill, that is so cool. I enjoyed the mood your poem created.

Paul Callus

March 12, 2018 at 10:28 AM

Thank you, Richard. You'll see a picture of the windmill on my fb page. Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

March 11, 2018 at 6:50 PM

So very awesome, Paul. It's so reminiscent of simpler times. My grandpas sheep farm had one.

Paul Callus

March 12, 2018 at 10:11 AM

Glad you enjoyed, Rhoda. We had fun pumping water up from the big well. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

March 11, 2018 at 6:12 PM

This was pretty dang good. No win??? geeez.

Paul Callus

March 12, 2018 at 9:50 AM

Thank you, Andrea...at least it's a winner in your eyes:) Regards // paul

Jack Horne

March 10, 2018 at 10:28 AM

love this clever one, my friend

Sara Kendrick

March 9, 2018 at 4:28 PM

Ahh! At one time a settlement met at the well to get water for the day and evening. Thanks for stopping by. This one is very creative and expressive with the use of few words. Sara

Paul Callus

March 9, 2018 at 5:16 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, Sara. I'm sure many can relate to these bygone days:) Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

March 7, 2018 at 11:26 PM

Wow... That's so beautiful... Great haiku for the contest...

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 9:09 AM

Thank you for a lovely reaction, Supraja:) I have come across several good entries for this contest! Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

March 7, 2018 at 9:25 PM

Nice one!

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 9:07 AM

Thank you, Kim. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

March 7, 2018 at 8:46 PM

I remember those. A disused one in a rambling garden in the house I grew up in, however my parents kept it there for sentimental reasons and for the many hours of enjoyment it brought us kids. Your wonderful Haiku brought back sweet memories, thank you, and its a favourite with me Paul. Good luck in the contest....Maria

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 9:06 AM

Thank you very much, Maria. In the village square there was one such pump; people (mainly women) gathered there with jugs and pails, and filled them while exchanging news and gossip:) Glad it brought you back sweet memories. ~ Regards // paul

Eve Roper

March 7, 2018 at 8:28 PM

As old as I am I still really saw these kind of pump , but antiques .. and I'm an antique :)

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 9:01 AM

Those village pumps were very useful, although many households had wells where rain water from the roof was collected. As for being an antique, I would rather say that you have been graced with a long and fruitful life:) Thank you for stopping by, Eve. Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

March 7, 2018 at 12:38 PM

- My childhood too, Paul :) - I remember how heavy bucket was ... and spills :) - Excellent haiku - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 8:56 AM

I am glad you could relate to these lines, Anne-Lise:) My childhood was very simple when compared to present day life, but it was a lovely and happy one. Hugs // paul

Sneha Rv

March 7, 2018 at 2:44 AM

What a beautiful haiku.. I love the peaceful image it creates you don't even need a picture! So precious and this is a common sight in the villages here :)

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 8:53 AM

You're not only a talented writer, Sneha, but also a very good critic:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

March 6, 2018 at 6:20 PM

Ha! I love it! Fantastic ink Paul! My best to you in the contest :) xomo!

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 8:50 AM

And I love your reaction, Maureen:) Thank you! Best regards // paul

Susan Ashley

March 6, 2018 at 5:24 PM

Wonderful poetic nostalgia captured from your childhood memories, Paul. This haiku is so enthralling in its quaint charm and beautiful imagery that elicits sounds of water and sights of activity around a central feature of life. I love the peaceful and contemplative feeling of your superb poem. A fave for me, my friend! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 8:49 AM

Thank you, Susan. Your insightful comments are awesome, and a pleasure to read! It's heartening to know that my reasoning makes sense:) Thank you also for the fav. ~ Warm regards // paul

Jan Allison

March 6, 2018 at 2:36 PM

You write these haiku with such apparant ease...i am still 'pondering'Paul good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 8:45 AM

Thank you for your lovely comments and support, Jan:) Hugs // paul

Vladislav Raven

March 6, 2018 at 9:58 AM

Hi Paul, a wonderful Haiku, a memory sung in such few words. You write this form excellently. The Haiku sings in your hands. This Haiku shall be faved. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus

March 8, 2018 at 8:43 AM

Your comments and the fav are truly appreciated, Mike. Thank you my friend. Regards // paul