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A Water Haiku

the village pump-
in a gurgle
my childhood  


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Valerie Staton

Date: 1/27/2019 7:03:00 AM

Very well written!

Paul Callus
Date: 1/27/2019 2:41:00 PM

Thank you, Valerie. Best regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 7/8/2018 10:34:00 AM

I enjoyed revisiting your memory.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/8/2018 10:46:00 AM

Thank you for a double visit, Richard. Have just been enjoying your memory go round. Regards // paul

Heidi Sands

Date: 5/3/2018 2:36:00 PM

I can see it and hear it Paul. Great Haiku! :)

Paul Callus
Date: 5/3/2018 4:13:00 PM

Many thanks, Heidi. Glad you like it:) Regards // paul

Elaine George

Date: 4/28/2018 7:08:00 PM

So much conveyed in so few words. A classic haiku, Paul. To my favs it goes. Sincerely, Elaine

Paul Callus
Date: 4/29/2018 8:22:00 AM

Your lovely comments and fav are truly appreciated, Elaine; thank you! Have a nice day:) Regards // paul

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/25/2018 9:37:00 PM

Wow, I have just scrutinised your thread here an found no congratulatory comments, bemused, I checked the contest, mortified. I can't believe I overlooked this, remiss, I am ashamed of myself, my deepest heartfelt apologies Paul. This is a perfect haiku and should have been amongst the 1st place winners! Sadly I can't alter the results but in my book its a winner! Please forgive me, and accept a belated congratulations for an exceptionally good haiku... Upset I am... Mick

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2018 5:06:00 PM

Hi Mick! This is only a contest and I can assure you that I hold no grudge:) On the contrary, I thank you for providing the inspiration with your contest...after all, that's what I mainly use contests for. I myself have been a judge in song contests, and I know how hard and frustrating it can be, both for the participants and the judges!! ~ Best regards // paul

Mick Talbot
Date: 3/25/2018 9:45:00 PM

PS I to saw this on best new poems, its where I noted that it was an entry in on of my haiku contests, and it truly is a best, mortified, and ashamed I am for my terrible oversight... Mick

CayCay Jennings

Date: 3/23/2018 9:53:00 PM

I saw this on Best New Poems and now that I've read it, I see why. You served up nostalgia in a few words making an impact, Paul. Good job. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Paul Callus
Date: 3/24/2018 9:27:00 AM

Thank you for stopping by with lovely complimentary remarks, CayCay. ~ Have a lovely weekend...Poetry hugs to you too // paul

Akkina Downing

Date: 3/18/2018 1:02:00 PM

I love this :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/18/2018 2:08:00 PM

Thank you, Akkina; you visits today are much appreciated. Warm regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/14/2018 12:15:00 AM

For me, it would have been in the top three!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/14/2018 9:15:00 AM

:) Thank you, Andrea. It has already been awarded two N/As in quick succession! Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/12/2018 8:39:00 AM

Wow a windmill, that is so cool. I enjoyed the mood your poem created.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2018 10:28:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. You'll see a picture of the windmill on my fb page. Regards // paul

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 3/11/2018 6:50:00 PM

So very awesome, Paul. It's so reminiscent of simpler times. My grandpas sheep farm had one.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2018 10:11:00 AM

Glad you enjoyed, Rhoda. We had fun pumping water up from the big well. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/11/2018 6:12:00 PM

This was pretty dang good. No win??? geeez.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/12/2018 9:50:00 AM

Thank you, Andrea...at least it's a winner in your eyes:) Regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 3/10/2018 10:28:00 AM

love this clever one, my friend

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/9/2018 4:28:00 PM

Ahh! At one time a settlement met at the well to get water for the day and evening. Thanks for stopping by. This one is very creative and expressive with the use of few words. Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 3/9/2018 5:16:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed it, Sara. I'm sure many can relate to these bygone days:) Regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 3/7/2018 11:26:00 PM

Wow... That's so beautiful... Great haiku for the contest...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 9:09:00 AM

Thank you for a lovely reaction, Supraja:) I have come across several good entries for this contest! Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 3/7/2018 9:25:00 PM

Nice one!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 9:07:00 AM

Thank you, Kim. Have a nice day. Regards // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 3/7/2018 8:46:00 PM

I remember those. A disused one in a rambling garden in the house I grew up in, however my parents kept it there for sentimental reasons and for the many hours of enjoyment it brought us kids. Your wonderful Haiku brought back sweet memories, thank you, and its a favourite with me Paul. Good luck in the contest....Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 9:06:00 AM

Thank you very much, Maria. In the village square there was one such pump; people (mainly women) gathered there with jugs and pails, and filled them while exchanging news and gossip:) Glad it brought you back sweet memories. ~ Regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 3/7/2018 8:28:00 PM

As old as I am I still really saw these kind of pump , but antiques .. and I'm an antique :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 9:01:00 AM

Those village pumps were very useful, although many households had wells where rain water from the roof was collected. As for being an antique, I would rather say that you have been graced with a long and fruitful life:) Thank you for stopping by, Eve. Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 3/7/2018 12:38:00 PM

- My childhood too, Paul :) - I remember how heavy bucket was ... and spills :) - Excellent haiku - Luck in the contest - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:56:00 AM

I am glad you could relate to these lines, Anne-Lise:) My childhood was very simple when compared to present day life, but it was a lovely and happy one. Hugs // paul

Sneha Rv

Date: 3/7/2018 2:44:00 AM

What a beautiful haiku.. I love the peaceful image it creates you don't even need a picture! So precious and this is a common sight in the villages here :)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:53:00 AM

You're not only a talented writer, Sneha, but also a very good critic:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart

Date: 3/6/2018 6:20:00 PM

Ha! I love it! Fantastic ink Paul! My best to you in the contest :) xomo!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:50:00 AM

And I love your reaction, Maureen:) Thank you! Best regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/6/2018 5:24:00 PM

Wonderful poetic nostalgia captured from your childhood memories, Paul. This haiku is so enthralling in its quaint charm and beautiful imagery that elicits sounds of water and sights of activity around a central feature of life. I love the peaceful and contemplative feeling of your superb poem. A fave for me, my friend! Warmest wishes always.. ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:49:00 AM

Thank you, Susan. Your insightful comments are awesome, and a pleasure to read! It's heartening to know that my reasoning makes sense:) Thank you also for the fav. ~ Warm regards // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 3/6/2018 2:36:00 PM

You write these haiku with such apparant ease...i am still 'pondering'Paul good luck in the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:45:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely comments and support, Jan:) Hugs // paul

Vladislav Raven

Date: 3/6/2018 9:58:00 AM

Hi Paul, a wonderful Haiku, a memory sung in such few words. You write this form excellently. The Haiku sings in your hands. This Haiku shall be faved. Have a wonderful Tuesday. Your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:43:00 AM

Your comments and the fav are truly appreciated, Mike. Thank you my friend. Regards // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/6/2018 7:53:00 AM

Great imagery!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/8/2018 8:42:00 AM

Thank you, Richard. Regards // paul