A Walk To the Club

The lonely street stood still in the night,
Buildings grew tall all around with dim light.

Sound of my steps echoing in the alleys,
The air is moist like a mountain valley.

A bright neon light a few blocks away,
With a beer and an arrow pointing that way.

A few cars lined up beside the street,
I work my way through them not to discrete.

I walk up to the door with my collar pulled high,
The cold air chills me, as a taxi rides by.

Thumping of music can be heard from behind the door,
Some kind of music that I've never heard before.

A slight push on the door opens to a big room,
Louder now I heard sounds and the smell of perfume.

Smell of smoke and alcohol fills my lungs,
So thick is the smoke, my eyes burn and stung.

My eyesight dances across the room that's filled with so many,
I hear a man ask his waitress if she has change for a twenty.

I can see the bar all the way in the back.
With a lot of alcohol and a huge wine rack.

This was what I saw when I went out that night to the bar,
People gather and have fun in a place called The North Starr.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2014



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Date: 12/26/2014 8:52:00 PM
Hello Donald, stopping by to say hi, Hope your Christmas was a blessed one. always a fan..... Linda
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Date: 4/23/2014 9:56:00 AM
About your poem: How awesome the club night. The beer and arrow pointing your way. I don't know if I like the thought of smoke and alcohol filling my lungs. LOL, However, Donald it all sounds like the perfect place, to embrace, and mingle the odd feeling away. Thank you for the walk, and perfect lines that lead my imagery all the way to the back of the bar, where people gathered Under the North Star, (BAR) to have fun.... XOX~ Linda
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Date: 4/23/2014 9:59:00 AM
All as I had hoped it would, thank you so much for reading. I believe strongly in a firm visual presence in my writing for some reason and of course, good flow ;) thank you so much
Date: 4/23/2014 9:47:00 AM
Good morning Donald, to you:)..... First, I want to tell you, how i love the rhyme on... -Perfume & Room- <--- Yeah! Never rhymed them two words before. Nice thinking. At times, I don't like using "room" at the end of a rhyming poem line. LOL... All other words that rhyme with room have been over used. However, never did perfume run the mind.... I'll be back
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Donald Williams
Date: 4/23/2014 9:51:00 AM
I like my uniqueness O_o haha ty Linda you're a doll :)
Date: 4/23/2014 7:04:00 AM
Lovely write so descriptive paints a wonderful picture. Hugs Jan x
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Date: 4/23/2014 7:16:00 AM
Thank you so much for stopping by to read my work. I'm so happy you enjoyed it. thanks again Jan
Date: 4/22/2014 12:24:00 PM
My bad..Donald
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Date: 4/22/2014 12:09:00 PM
Sounds like a great place Donald....Tim
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Date: 4/22/2014 12:23:00 PM
Thanks Tim, Donald :)
Date: 4/22/2014 11:44:00 AM
Lol, I like it. You can put anything into a poem! Nice one :)
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Date: 4/22/2014 12:01:00 PM
Thank you for stopping by Toquyen :)
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