A Violette- He Was Nineteen

He met her in Dallas
In the Silver Palace
Said her name was Alice -
He was nineteen

She said,"Let's join forces!"
He said,"I ride horses -
We've seperate courses,
You are pristine!"

But she had known lovers
And seen 'neath the covers
Of more than most others -
Places unseen

He said,"I herd cattle
My brain's 'bout to addle
From sittin' a saddle
And in between."

But she wasn't worried
As he hadn't scurried
Or left as he flurried
In the extreme


She learned of things ranchin'
Taught him the styles dancin'
And rolled her eyes glancin'-
Tearing saline

They wed 'midst great laughter
And promised love after
The years would move faster -
He was nineteen

3-28-18
For Mick Talbot's Poetry Contest "A Violette"
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018


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Date: 4/16/2018 12:14:00 AM
Wonderful story and a charming write, my friend - congrats on your win! Blessings! :-)
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/16/2018 10:02:00 PM
Thank you, Gregoery!
Date: 4/15/2018 7:12:00 PM
this is a really interesting story. My husband had just turned 20 when WE married and it's over 40 years now@ I love this one. Congrats for the win.
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/16/2018 10:01:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. ..and congrats on your 40 years! There's a line that runs through my head that begs a poem to be written, but I jut haven't been able to put it together. Thinking of young marriages..."Love was easier back then"
Date: 4/15/2018 1:39:00 PM
what a fun rhyme many congrats on your win Larry:-) hugs Jan xx
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/16/2018 10:02:00 PM
Thank you, Jan!
Date: 4/15/2018 12:48:00 PM
Congrats on your top win for this fun poem, Larry.
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/16/2018 9:57:00 PM
Thanks, Line!
Date: 4/15/2018 8:39:00 AM
Congratulations on your first position win.
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/16/2018 9:57:00 PM
Thank you!
Date: 4/15/2018 8:27:00 AM
Hi Larry, Many thanks for taking up the challenge with this relatively new form. Critique: 100% perfect*! A beautiful Violette! Congratulations on your 1st place, many thanks for your support... Mick........................................................... * Benefit of the doubt on saline: say leen, say len, sa leen, sa len, sal ine, or sal een? I went with say leen?
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/16/2018 9:56:00 PM
Thank you, Mick and thanks for the placement. It was a good challenge and I enjoyed the contest!
Date: 4/1/2018 7:12:00 AM
A sweet poem, Larry.
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Larry Bradfield
Date: 4/1/2018 10:28:00 PM
Thank you! Different kind of format, isn't it?
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