John Fleming Poet Haiku

A Triad of Haiku IIII

Neck-craning grey goose,

Alerted head half-turned;

An eye fixes me.
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Madly racing Swifts,

Screaming loudly cloud to cloud,

Scythe through the hot air.
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Autumn, why approve

The harvesting for your yet

Unfinished produce?

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Kim Rodrigues August 13, 2025 at 11:33 AM Second ku is so cool! Yikes! John Fleming August 13, 2025 at 2:38 PM Thanks, Kim. I enjoy writing them. :) john

Rowena Velasco August 11, 2025 at 6:15 PM I love the vivid snapshots your haikus create—each one paints such a clear, lively picture. The goose’s wary gaze, the swifts’ wild flight, and the reflective question about autumn all capture moments full of life and thought. Beautiful work! John Fleming August 12, 2025 at 12:57 PM I am very happy you consider them to be worthy of commenting, Rowena. I very much appreciate, you taking the time to do so. Many thanks! :) john

Eileen Manassian August 11, 2025 at 2:53 AM Lovely... all 3, but that line of the scythe in the hot air is pure gold. Great writing. Thanks for your visit to my latest poem. I'm doing well now. Blessings. John Fleming August 11, 2025 at 7:43 AM Glad to hear you are now in good spirits, Eileen. Good health is paramount to everything. My very best regards! :) john

Andrea Dietrich August 10, 2025 at 10:01 PM Oh wow I love these, John. All are great! John Fleming August 11, 2025 at 12:44 AM High praise indeed, Andrea! Not sure which is my favourite...probably the goose haiku. As Tom comments below, they always suspect us of "nefarious intent". Just the very thing I was trying to express - a bullseye ?? by Tom! Lol.

Victor Buhagiar August 10, 2025 at 8:36 PM Your triad is full of imagery. Loved them. John Fleming August 11, 2025 at 12:29 AM Manh thanks, Victor - much appreciated! :) john

sara Etgen-Baker August 10, 2025 at 4:10 PM I like the idea of a Haiku triad. The last one is a bit thought provoking and a great contrast to the previous two. John Fleming August 11, 2025 at 12:28 AM Thanks, Sara. The last one is trying to demonstrate that Nature always knows better than us. Just because ALL of the fruits are not fully ripe...does not follow on that we know better than Mother Nature when to start picking them. :) john

Brenda Chiri August 10, 2025 at 9:03 AM You make a haiku sound romantic John!;) John Fleming August 10, 2025 at 2:30 PM Of that I have no doubt...its a an absolute given. :) john Brenda Chiri August 10, 2025 at 11:30 AM Hey I heard with age like fine wine we just keep getting better!;) John Fleming August 10, 2025 at 10:25 AM I like the thought of that, Poetess. :) john