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A Triad of Haiku IIII

Neck-craning grey goose,

Alerted head half-turned;

An eye fixes me.
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Madly racing Swifts,

Screaming loudly cloud to cloud,

Scythe through the hot air.
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Autumn, why approve

The harvesting for your yet

Unfinished produce?

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Kim Rodrigues Date: 8/13/2025 11:33:00 AM Second ku is so cool! Yikes! Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/13/2025 2:38:00 PM Thanks, Kim. I enjoy writing them. :) john

Rowena Velasco Date: 8/11/2025 6:15:00 PM I love the vivid snapshots your haikus create—each one paints such a clear, lively picture. The goose’s wary gaze, the swifts’ wild flight, and the reflective question about autumn all capture moments full of life and thought. Beautiful work! Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/12/2025 12:57:00 PM I am very happy you consider them to be worthy of commenting, Rowena. I very much appreciate, you taking the time to do so. Many thanks! :) john

Eileen Manassian Date: 8/11/2025 2:53:00 AM Lovely... all 3, but that line of the scythe in the hot air is pure gold. Great writing. Thanks for your visit to my latest poem. I'm doing well now. Blessings. Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/11/2025 7:43:00 AM Glad to hear you are now in good spirits, Eileen. Good health is paramount to everything. My very best regards! :) john

Andrea Dietrich Date: 8/10/2025 10:01:00 PM Oh wow I love these, John. All are great! Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/11/2025 12:44:00 AM High praise indeed, Andrea! Not sure which is my favourite...probably the goose haiku. As Tom comments below, they always suspect us of "nefarious intent". Just the very thing I was trying to express - a bullseye ?? by Tom! Lol.

Victor Buhagiar Date: 8/10/2025 8:36:00 PM Your triad is full of imagery. Loved them. Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/11/2025 12:29:00 AM Manh thanks, Victor - much appreciated! :) john

Sara Etgen-Baker Date: 8/10/2025 4:10:00 PM I like the idea of a Haiku triad. The last one is a bit thought provoking and a great contrast to the previous two. Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/11/2025 12:28:00 AM Thanks, Sara. The last one is trying to demonstrate that Nature always knows better than us. Just because ALL of the fruits are not fully ripe...does not follow on that we know better than Mother Nature when to start picking them. :) john

Brenda Chiri Date: 8/10/2025 9:03:00 AM You make a haiku sound romantic John!;) Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/10/2025 2:30:00 PM Of that I have no doubt...its a an absolute given. :) john Brenda Chiri Date: 8/10/2025 11:30:00 AM Hey I heard with age like fine wine we just keep getting better!;) John Fleming Date: 8/10/2025 10:25:00 AM I like the thought of that, Poetess. :) john

Tom Woody Date: 8/10/2025 5:35:00 AM Big daddy's on it John! First one's my fave. They gotta make sure we don't have nefarious intent. Can ya blame 'em? Last one in the form of a question. Autumn knows what she's doin'. She's got some history. Keep crankin' 'em out J. We love it Login to Reply John Fleming Date: 8/10/2025 8:18:00 AM Cheers, Tom! I really do enjoying penning them...more to follow. Many thanks! :) john