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A Triad of Haiku IIII

Neck-craning grey goose, Alerted head half-turned; An eye fixes me. -------------------------------------- Madly racing Swifts, Screaming loudly cloud to cloud, Scythe through the hot air. -------------------------------------- Autumn, why approve The harvesting for your yet Unfinished produce?

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 8/11/2025 2:53:00 AM

Lovely... all 3, but that line of the scythe in the hot air is pure gold. Great writing. Thanks for your visit to my latest poem. I'm doing well now. Blessings.

John Fleming
Date: 8/11/2025 7:43:00 AM

Glad to hear you are now in good spirits, Eileen. Good health is paramount to everything. My very best regards! :) john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/10/2025 10:01:00 PM

Oh wow I love these, John. All are great!

John Fleming
Date: 8/11/2025 12:44:00 AM

High praise indeed, Andrea! Not sure which is my favourite...probably the goose haiku. As Tom comments below, they always suspect us of "nefarious intent". Just the very thing I was trying to express - a bullseye ?? by Tom! Lol.

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 8/10/2025 8:36:00 PM

Your triad is full of imagery. Loved them.

John Fleming
Date: 8/11/2025 12:29:00 AM

Manh thanks, Victor - much appreciated! :) john

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 8/10/2025 4:10:00 PM

I like the idea of a Haiku triad. The last one is a bit thought provoking and a great contrast to the previous two.

John Fleming
Date: 8/11/2025 12:28:00 AM

Thanks, Sara. The last one is trying to demonstrate that Nature always knows better than us. Just because ALL of the fruits are not fully ripe...does not follow on that we know better than Mother Nature when to start picking them. :) john

Brenda Chiri

Date: 8/10/2025 9:03:00 AM

You make a haiku sound romantic John!;)

John Fleming
Date: 8/10/2025 2:30:00 PM

Of that I have no doubt...its a an absolute given. :) john

Brenda Chiri
Date: 8/10/2025 11:30:00 AM

Hey I heard with age like fine wine we just keep getting better!;)

John Fleming
Date: 8/10/2025 10:25:00 AM

I like the thought of that, Poetess. :) john

Tom Woody

Date: 8/10/2025 5:35:00 AM

Big daddy's on it John! First one's my fave. They gotta make sure we don't have nefarious intent. Can ya blame 'em? Last one in the form of a question. Autumn knows what she's doin'. She's got some history. Keep crankin' 'em out J. We love it

John Fleming
Date: 8/10/2025 8:18:00 AM

Cheers, Tom! I really do enjoying penning them...more to follow. Many thanks! :) john