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A Triad of Haiku II

We are as stiff wheat

Stood waiting in dusty fields -

Both to face the blade!
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We ran barefooted

Throughout our young, carefree days

Never caring why.
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Summers late Swallows

Re-building their sticky nests

Are mindful of time.
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Ryan Geoffrey Hayward

Date: 8/13/2025 6:08:00 PM

I love the contrast of the first two haikus here. The threat of sometime coming in the first contrasting with child-hood innocence which can br destroyed at any time by man. And the third relates to nature's beauty and how too there's a storm brewing there. Excellent pieces!!!

John Fleming
Date: 8/19/2025 2:52:00 PM

Thanks, Ryan. I really am very grateful for your kind words. Much appreciated! :) john

Ryan Geoffrey Hayward
Date: 8/13/2025 6:09:00 PM

Millard Lowe

Date: 8/4/2025 5:15:00 PM

A profoundly beautiful allegorical flow, John. Your Haikus are remarkable! You should continue canvassing them. It's a joy to travel with you. ONE. Peace and Love

John Fleming
Date: 8/5/2025 1:33:00 AM

Your generous comments are most kind, Millard. Rest assured...I do intend to keep writing them. Many thanks for your kind support. :) john

Evelyn Judy Buehler

Date: 8/3/2025 10:47:00 PM

Your beautiful haikus bring to mind the song, Time Passages, John. I enjoyed them all. Nicely written. :)

John Fleming
Date: 8/4/2025 12:42:00 AM

Thank you, Evelyn, you are most kind. Cheers! :) john

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 8/3/2025 10:26:00 AM

- Those who know my poems know how much I love haiku poems ... all 3 are excellet ... the second is so true ... - hugs

John Fleming
Date: 8/3/2025 1:29:00 PM

Thanks, Anne-Lise. I have never wrote much Haiku...but I do find it both challenging and rewarding. I like the discipline it imposes upon you...makes you think just that little bit harder. Makes it easier also in some rather strange ways. A contradiction in terms I suppose - how peculiar! Lol. :) john

Rowena Velasco

Date: 8/3/2025 7:16:00 AM

Really enjoyed this set—each haiku paints a clear picture and brings a different feeling. The first one’s intense, the second made me smile, and the last one’s just quietly beautiful.

John Fleming
Date: 8/3/2025 9:39:00 AM

Thank you for your lovely comments, Rowena. I think it's fair to say the third one is most people's favourite. Mine too. :) john

Paige Hind

Date: 8/2/2025 2:29:00 PM

Very beautiful.

John Fleming
Date: 8/2/2025 3:02:00 PM

Thank you, Paige...that is a very lovely comment to make...and very kind too. My best regards! :) john

Nette Onclaud

Date: 8/2/2025 6:53:00 AM

amazing, soulful ku, john... i like them all!

John Fleming
Date: 8/2/2025 7:05:00 AM

Thank you very much, Nette. I really enjoy this form of poetry. :) john

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/1/2025 9:21:00 PM

I really enjoyed this set. So profound too

John Fleming
Date: 8/2/2025 4:44:00 AM

I am very happy to read that you consider the Haiku 'profound', Andrea - because they were intended to be! The first one concerns an oncoming battle. The time of year is August. The soldier realizes that, just like the crop that is about to face the sickle...so he is about to take part in a great slaughter. The second Haiku is trying to convey a sense of childhood being free of conventional restraint. Something that is more and more imposed uon us all as we age. And the final one is pretty straightforward: be mindful of what you start...the clock is ticking and we cannot always control adverse factors. I have seen Swallow chicks abandoned before. Once the great urge to return home pulls upon the swallows...they will even abandon their own chicks. Many thanks, Andrea. :) john