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A Summer Vale

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A Summer Vale

     Hints hailed she raised her ocher veils,
          Expose those enlightened from shade,
               Spun tales of yesterdays reveals,
                    Golden treasures anoint the blessed,
               The abandon of buttered skins,
          Urbane exodus blooms on roads,
     As summer vale blows saffron breaths.

2019 September 05

*3rd Place*

FAREWELL, SUMMER
~~nette onclaud

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Jeanne Mcgee Date: 9/13/2019 7:50:00 PM A warm congrats William on you podium win. Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/13/2019 7:51:00 PM Feeling the warmth my way ~ Aloha always, William

Andrea Dietrich Date: 9/12/2019 5:06:00 PM wow, i love the saffron breaths at the end. Other imagery was also very nice . Congrats for the win Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 5:16:00 PM Needn't respond to any--- Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 5:15:00 PM Your duly visits are justifiably honor-bound and gracious--If you're up to a read of subtle hints--don't know if read--my recent faves are The Testament, A Winter Debut, O' True North, Cascade, & Too High A Price ~ Aloha always William

Charlotte Puddifoot Date: 9/12/2019 4:24:00 PM this is one of my faves on the winners list - congrats! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 5:18:00 PM No response is necessary--- Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 4:54:00 PM AWESOME My recent fave is The Testament (Hope it's OK)--yours were the only one read as I suffer from severe vertigo been on the top and all (chuckles) every word I wrote you -- heartfelt (laughing gas talking) ~ Aloha always William

Anne-Lise Andresen Date: 9/12/2019 12:44:00 PM - Goodbye Summer .... and congratulations on your winning poem, William :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 12:50:00 PM Ah! Precious! ~ Aloha always William

Nette Onclaud Date: 9/12/2019 11:59:00 AM subtly designed with ' the abandon of buttered skins,' william... congrats on this ' feeling' poem and thanks for participating in my challenge...huggs Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 12:21:00 PM Luv's always ~ Aloha William

Lonna Blodgett Date: 9/12/2019 9:28:00 AM Love the final line “blows saffron breaths”. Congrats Lonna Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 10:06:00 AM Totally sweet--enjoyed ~ Aloha always William

Brenda Chiri Date: 9/12/2019 5:36:00 AM Congrats on a well deserved win!;) Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/12/2019 5:48:00 AM I see better through your kindness, ~ Aloha always William

Caren Krutsinger Date: 9/6/2019 4:10:00 AM "The abandon of buttered skins," - yes, this is what it is! Login to Reply Hilo Poet Date: 9/6/2019 4:30:00 AM Dutiful Coppertone lotions and not whats ~ Aloha always William